Posted 07 July 2011 - 09:36 PM
Good luck in the contest! I think you've got a solid entry.
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Posted 17 July 2011 - 06:47 PM
This is a very good story! It's very well written and it has a nice mix of narrative and speech which a lot of the other entries do not have. The thing I like a lot about this story is the reference to lego's way of building prisons and especially Jack's final remark which I found very funny.
The only criticism I could make is not a very big one in my mind. I feel your picture could have added a bit more to the story by maybe having jack's head leaning out the back of a prison. As I said, though, this, in my mind, is not a very big deal as this is writing competition.
Very good luck!
Posted 19 July 2011 - 09:28 AM
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