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Jack Sparrow Can't Escape the Classics


27 replies to this topic  – Started by blackpyre , Jun 14 2011 03:24 AM

#26 SilvaShado

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Posted 07 July 2011 - 09:36 PM

Glad to see that you went with version 2. It was my favorite. :-)

Good luck in the contest! I think you've got a solid entry.

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#27 Zilcho

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Posted 17 July 2011 - 06:47 PM

Hi blackpyre!

This is a very good story! It's very well written and it has a nice mix of narrative and speech which a lot of the other entries do not have. The thing I like a lot about this story is the reference to lego's way of building prisons and especially Jack's final remark which I found very funny.

The only criticism I could make is not a very big one in my mind. I feel your picture could have added a bit more to the story by maybe having jack's head leaning out the back of a prison. As I said, though, this, in my mind, is not a very big deal as this is writing competition.

Very good luck!

#28 blackpyre

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Posted 19 July 2011 - 09:28 AM

Thanks for your feedback Zilcho.  The only reason why I didn't do more with the picture is because I didn't want to give away the punch line.  So I put up a picture that helped set the tone for my story instead.

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