Jump to content


Governors Retirement


  • Please log in to reply
14 replies to this topic  – Started by Scop , Oct 08 2008 04:13 AM

#1 Scop

Scop

    Posts: 82
    Joined: 08-October 08
    Member: 4088
    Country: Germany

Posted 08 October 2008 - 04:13 AM

Posted Image Vig. 21d
Hello everyone out there!

It was just some months ago when I left the time you use to call "dark ages". Since then I was studying eurobricks and when I saw this contest I thougt I have to build something, too. For I am surely not the best builder in town and my amount of bricks is very limited I am aware of the fact that I won´t have any real chance, but that´s not so important for me. So, enough said, here is my first MOC:





The Story: After years of fighting piracy and great victories, the Governor decided to retire and live a joyful live at his caribbean mansion.
But some pirates survived his anti-piracy campaigns and this is the moment they´ve been waiting for.
This time they have not only come for gold and diamants, they also want to make sure the governor will never come back from his retirement...

EDIT: Here is the final version:

Posted Image
Posted Image
Posted Image
Posted Image
Posted Image
Posted Image

Thanks for helping with the picture-linking :)

Improvements: Blood, Blood, Blood. One Pirate less, but more cruelty

Arrrrrrrr! :jollyroger:



Scop

If deep-linking still doesn´t work:

Picture 1, Front
P2
P3
P4
P5
P6

Edited by SlyOwl, 05 November 2009 - 08:11 PM.


#2 Snake...SNAKE...SNAAAAKE?!

Snake...SNAKE...SNAAAAKE?!

    Posts: 373
    Joined: 06-June 08
    Member: 3250
    Country: CANADA

Posted 08 October 2008 - 04:26 AM

Very nice.
One problem.
On the guys hanging, I'd add a small amount of blood and try to get rid of some clutter.

Edited by Snake...SNAKE...SNAAAAKE?!, 08 October 2008 - 04:26 AM.

The solid snake
Join the We Hate Liquid Ocelot fan club!!!!!!


MGS4 gets a perfect 10 out of 10 on IGN! w00t!

#3 Zorro

Zorro
  • Farewell Dieter!


    Posts: 5757
    Joined: 17-September 08
    Member: 3951
    Country: Belgium

Posted 08 October 2008 - 04:40 AM

My opinion:
This is a very good MOC, it has all we wanted to see in this contest.
I think this is outstanding for a first MOC/attempt and if some minor improvements are made, you might even have a chanche to win a prize !

Possible improvements:
1) Blood, blood and more blood. Add some more blood (like in the governors neck).

2) See you don't add more minifigs or items then you already have. If you add any more, people will call it too cluthered or too crowded (IMHO, it is maxed out, but not "over the edge" yet).

3) The face expressions could be done better. The governor has a fairly neutral expression on his face, would you have a neutral one if your head is about to be cut off :pir-skull: ?
Also the pirates themselves could (should?) look more EVIL.

At this point I cannot be of more help to you because I only see one pic at this time.
We really should see the other sides as well to make it the best MOC it could be. Remember that the judges/staff CAN always demand you to make additional pictures (I don't). Read the section about the pictures.


Minor and/or not brick related improvements that can be made as well:
a) Post more pictures, you should post six for the best effect, read the entry instructions that have been pinned on top of the Pirate forum.
And why post at 360x480 pixels if you may post at 800x600 pixels?
Posting at a higher pixel rate will make the pictures larger and therefore easier to see for the members and judges. It also might improve the overall picture quality.

b) Put some alineas between your sentences, this will make it easier for us to read your introduction.

c) I would state that this is a WIP (work in progress) into your description. Ask a mod to do this if you want to change it.

Edited by zorro3999, 08 October 2008 - 05:29 PM.


#4 QuartermasterRobert

QuartermasterRobert

    Posts: 135
    Joined: 05-March 08
    Member: 2844

Posted 08 October 2008 - 05:30 AM

While a bit crowded, I like it. It conveys a "natural" feel of a pillage!

#5 Mister Phes

Mister Phes
  • Uncle Sam edit!


    Posts: 20259
    Joined: 19-March 05
    Member: 273

Posted 08 October 2008 - 06:53 AM

Oh dear!  It appears a conquistador from the mighty Imperial Armada has faired poorly admist this merry yet raucous Pirate festivy.  So what's happened to the dear old governor?


Posted Image


#6 Shadows

Shadows
  • Awesome, brilliant, not redundant.


    Posts: 14556
    Joined: 30-April 07
    Member: 1558
    Country: USA

Posted 08 October 2008 - 07:17 AM

View PostMister Phes, on Oct 8 2008, 01:53 AM, said:

So what's happened to the dear old governor?
More importantly, what about his lovely daughter? :pir_kiss:

Shadows is looking for stalkers. Yep, you heard me right. CLICKY!



New Member? Read This | Questions? Need Help? Ask Here
Site Guidelines | Eurobricks FAQ | Visual User Guide | Tutorials


#7 Guss

Guss
  • One armed pirate


    Posts: 2649
    Joined: 05-September 08
    Member: 3895
    Country: Switzerland

Posted 08 October 2008 - 09:08 AM

there is a lot of people on a little plate, but I think it's ok and it's a nice and cruel moc ^^ maybe as everyone said, a little more blood will be nice^^
Posted Image

#8 Lego12

Lego12
  • Kill'n George


    Posts: 1572
    Joined: 28-June 08
    Member: 3422
    Country: USA

Posted 08 October 2008 - 01:55 PM

Well all I have to say is that it is ok, but needs some work. Maybe add some blood. I also agree that it is too crowded and some stuff should be taken out. I like how you used the chains to hang some people. You should make it a bit more gruesome! Come on! I want to see some real stuff! Some bad stuff! Maybe add a Pirate eating the governer's head! I hope my suggestions have helped you.

Lego12
"One without strength is one without purpose."

"You never know, until you know."

-Lego12

#9 Erdbeereis

Erdbeereis
  • Not short in real life


    Posts: 6881
    Joined: 31-January 08
    Member: 2630
    Country: U.S.A.

Posted 08 October 2008 - 04:02 PM

This is a very creative idea!
A few pointers:

1) On the sand in front, I think it would look nice to have yellow tiles there for a smoother look.

2) Give us some more blood! :pir-devil:  Perhaps some on the Governor's head under the knife and on the upside down man with the sword in his gut. You could use a red plume maybe.

3) I too, would like to see some more pictures, such as a side and back view, so we can see what's going on there.

Other than those minor points, this is a great entry! (By the way welcome to Eurobricks! Feel free to introduce yourself in this forum.

New Member? Read This | Questions? Need Help? Ask Here

Site Guidelines | Eurobricks FAQ | Visual User Guide | Tutorials


#10 Legoking

Legoking
  • Classic-Pirates' cabin boy


    Posts: 1026
    Joined: 28-May 08
    Member: 3200
    Country: United States

Posted 09 October 2008 - 04:53 AM

Opinion
Very creative MOC Scop. I can't believe you fit nine pirate minifigs onto this small base plate. That is amazing. I like the whole battle scene and how the pirates are stealing from the governers house. You have the right idea for this contest Scop. I see lots of detail that I like. Chains rapped around everywhere, wine glasses, treasure cheats and dead pirates on the ground. Perfect!!!! Your story goes great with your MOC. I really like the pirate that is on the top with a minifig head on his knife.

Possible Improvements

1) You can take a couple more pictures of your MOC and take close-up shots.

2) You could also add some more blood to your MOC. On places like the ground or ontop of your MOC where the parrot is.

3) You could add some more bricks and make the door entry bigger so you could have some more room to add more detail or minifigs.

4) Also, on the ground, you could add some smooth tiles to make your MOC look better.

Overall- This is a great MOC and some minor improvements would make this an even better MOC. I think you have the right idea for this contest and you will do fine. I wish you the best of luck!

LegoKing
My MOC page
My Brickshelf
My Brickset   
My Current Trades

Credit of my wonderful drawn avatar goes to Hound Knight. Posted Image
I am the Lego King of the World!

Support the Pirates forum, buy your LEGO here!


#11 Thomas B.

Thomas B.
  • Restraining Order


    Posts: 243
    Joined: 24-August 08
    Member: 3818
    Country: USA

Posted 10 October 2008 - 12:51 AM

Well, there is a small amount of goriness, but it's still lacking.  If you don't look closely, it looks like a celebration. More pictures are needed. Yellow tiles are needed up front. Use red transparent tiles for blood. Other than that, it's pretty good.

MOC On!  :jollyroger:

Edited by Thomas B., 10 October 2008 - 01:01 AM.

My site... http://brickbrain.net/test2/index.php

Hinckley took a restraining order out on me!


#12 Scop

Scop

    Posts: 82
    Joined: 08-October 08
    Member: 4088
    Country: Germany

Posted 30 November 2008 - 04:33 AM

I just edited my first post, but I did have some problems with uploading the pictures, could somebody please tell me if everything is ok now?

#13 Erdbeereis

Erdbeereis
  • Not short in real life


    Posts: 6881
    Joined: 31-January 08
    Member: 2630
    Country: U.S.A.

Posted 30 November 2008 - 05:27 AM

The entry looks very nice now!

I would recommend deep-linking your pictures though, so viewers don't have to click on the links to see them.

Here's a tutorial on deep-linking for you. Tutorial

Good luck! :pir-classic:

New Member? Read This | Questions? Need Help? Ask Here

Site Guidelines | Eurobricks FAQ | Visual User Guide | Tutorials


#14 Scop

Scop

    Posts: 82
    Joined: 08-October 08
    Member: 4088
    Country: Germany

Posted 30 November 2008 - 05:39 PM

Deep-linking doesn´t seem to work.If I try it, there are red crosses instead of pictures...

#15 Erdbeereis

Erdbeereis
  • Not short in real life


    Posts: 6881
    Joined: 31-January 08
    Member: 2630
    Country: U.S.A.

Posted 30 November 2008 - 05:49 PM

Probably because they are hosted on Blogspot rather than a photo hosting website like Brickshelf.

I would highly recommend creating a Brickshelf account, as it's very easy to deep-link from there, just follow the tutorial.

Hope this helps!

New Member? Read This | Questions? Need Help? Ask Here

Site Guidelines | Eurobricks FAQ | Visual User Guide | Tutorials





1 user(s) are reading this topic

0 members, 1 guests, 0 anonymous users

Sponsored Links