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I really agree with you Aanchir about what you're saying, but still, there could be a better way of doing it! For example if they exclude Maccus or Bill and also exclude Will or Gibs, then they could simply introduce other Pearl crew members. There's two reasons for it: Gibs and Will can both be bought in previous sets, so there's no point even for true collectors to have more than 2 of the same figures. Since Will and Gibs are sold in sets where other figures are exclusives, to complete the collection you need them all. The other point is that at least Davy Jones should be exclusive to the Flying Dutchman! It should be one of the reasons why you buy that ship! Also all other Jones' companions belong to that ship, which will again cause a lot of duplicated minifigures (Can't imagine the Flying Dutchman without Maccus nor Bill) Even worse, we might think it will never get released. It relly looks like this set is the last one, and LEGO is still considering the continuation of the theme, which is very disappointing! What I'd do is this: Take away Davy Jones or Maccus or Bill and also take away Will (he's already in two sets, Gibs is just in one), add Pintel and Ragetti and maybe even Cotton. Release the Flying Dutchman in the January and include as many of the crew as possible (7 or 8). The characters in the game are really awesome, and I'll be very upset if the Flying Dutchman is released including another Jack Sparrow! There everyone would be satisfied - kids still getting the bad guys (there were never more than two from opposite fraction in classic pirates ships) and AFOLs getting more characters and less duplicates! When it comes to size - the ship is mostly considered small for the lack of height, because the cabin is build straight on top of the floor piece. For me it looks like a bad design of a western train engine ... with some sails.

1 point each to: 5) Cryostasis (Build by Darkblane) - What can I say, my favorite entry, great idea, realization and nice photo-shooting! Also the figs are great! 11) The Minifig Museum (Build by Rolli) - The idea of figs is great and the diorama of this one is the strongest! 14) Eurobricks Collectable Minifigures Series 1 (Build by Oky Wan Kenobi) - Nice figs but Leprechaun sure earned you my voice! Great job and congratulations to everyone who found time and an idea to enter this category!

This was a tough one to choose from my top five entries and I give a point to each of these: 4) The Monster Entry (Build by Titolian) 30) The Monster Entry (Build by CorneliusMurdock) 33) Mad Scientist Entry (Build by Skafte)

My entry is for the sailor: "Ahoy, I see land!" Sorry for bad pictures, I really suck at making photos and even more at editing them :(

Thanks for comments, I was just thinking about where to spend the spare word! I think all comments are in place, so I did the changes. You don't know a LEGO dog postman?! Shame on you :) Just kidding ... I thought a FABULAND character would make a nice reference to a moderator, who likes FABULAND avatar images ...

Edited the first post with the second version. I cutted the words a bit to meet the limitation and changed the twist a bit. The code and parley thing really didn't go together, and I found it more funny this way! Hope you like it!

Ok my mistake, maybe in english it does sound similar if you read it the english way. However I can't agree for spanish. I think in spanish it is more like - how to explain - a sharp o at the end and that's also how I read it. But the verb go in english is pronounced something like [gou] with an o lengthened a bit. It's not like go as the chinese version of chess. El Dorado in english though might be more like [El Doradow]. For example try typing that whole sentnce into google translate under english and click the listen button. You'll hear what I mean. It does sound similar, but not a rhyme for me ... As already mentioned before I'm not a native speaker and might be wrong.

Hey there, this really is a unique entry. I love the story, the way you mixed in the classics and the ending chrome reference is also a nice touch! Making a poem really is a interesting chice and although I was a bit sceptic about it, after reading it, it changed my mind. I don't think there is any backstory needed since a poem is a poem and it should stay that way. I only think that though most of the rhymes are great, some could be imporved. For example this one: 'Til sirens told us where to go, Unto the fortress, El Dorado. The 'El Dorado' should not be pronounced the way to rhyme with 'go' or it sounds wierd. Maybe a selection of different words may fix a thing here and there, or a completly redoing some sentences like this one into: Til sirens gave us navigation, El Dorado was our destination. Also the words chest and tempest don't seem to make a rhyme. But these are only minor things that in my oppinion would polish the poem even more. I'd also get rid of the paranthesis at hte end and make it into '... pearl - not chrome' or simply '... pearl, not chrome'. Your way it looks like the words in paranthesis are not the part of hte poem. Yes I know some might have already noticed I'm not a big fan of paranthesis in artistic writing! Good luck in the contest!

Splendid! I really love the way this story is improving. I'd just point out a few more things that would polish it even further, but this are really little details and might be to subjective, so feel free to ignore them. First I see you skipped the mentioning of the ship totally, which is not such a great idea. Going from floating in nowhere directly to the dialogue is a bit strange. You don't have to mention the namo nor shape or color of the ship, just that Jack passes a ship. Than this: ... what I really need (beside rum) is a rope" - here I'd get rid of the (beside rum) part for sparing the words for the ship. Or at least get rid of the paranthesis. It's not clear did Jack really say that, did he just think about it, or is it just a description for the readers. If he said that, just replace the parens with comas else skip it. Okay, last thing I'd change are still the double and tripple question or exclamation marks. One is enough and multiple are only used in messages sent via messenger or other instant messeging apps, to express feelings. It's not in common writers way and feels to much like "leet speak". Also there are some little mistakes like space after quotes, in: " Not a pushover ... but that can be easily corrected by rereading the story through a few more times before posting the final version. All in all it's a very promissing entry! EDIT: Another thing I noticed in reading it agaiin is this line: The Cook happened to have the generic classic smiley face. Hre I'd simply change it to: The Cook with his generic classic smiley face replied ... or something similar. The thing is that the word combination "happened to have" seems like there is somethin behind it and further explanation is expected. It left me with the question: Why did the cook happen to have the face he did?

I'm very disappointed with this for multiple reasons: - the crew doesn't make any sense, no matter which movie it represents Bill never was on the Black Pearl as I remember - It' really is small and there is no upper hull piece at the back, so we only get 1 black one. It'll be hard to make the ship greater if not buying two sets ... - as it seems the hull is also not as wide - 10 middle studs I guess or even less - getting two cannons on six spots as usual - the overall design is really nothing special and the front looks empty to me - I hate it how the design of ships made a step backward in LEGO. I mean QAR is nice and this ship is not that bad, but not at all special. I miss all the ropes on both ships, all previous ship designs had a rope from front to end. On QAR it's even more important, since ropes play a role. Also with no ropes the front seal attachment is way off! - the simple fact of the minifigs included gives me a bad feeling of not getting the Flying Dutchman any time soon! Overall, I'll probably buy this set for the fact it'll be cheaper then QAR and the design of the great new minifigures. But a lot will need to be done to get a satisfactory representation of the Black Pearl moc or mod vise. I hate it how LEGO manages to make us buy the sets we don't really like or at least don't find them extraordinary.

Yes I agree with that, but then in that case I loose the description of Blackbeards reply being calm - as he always is, not afraid of anyone. Well maybe that really isn't that important in a short story like this. I'll rethink it all over and give you all my next go, hopefuly during the weekend, when I'll also take the picture.

Yes classic pirates would be nice to return, especially with some civil themed sets like the Kingdoms theme this year. Something similar to London escape ...

Great! This story has improved a lot! I'd just point some things out, which will also help you reduce the ammount of words: In the first there's no need to say that the ship picked him up, since it's recognized from the dialogue afterwards. It could just say a ship passes his boat. Also no need for telling the ships name. Also I'd remove the part of explaining how the kitchen was swaped with the jail and keep your original idea. It's humiliating enough for Captain to work in the kitchen, besides, he does not look tough nor dangerous, he's just not that good with words ... I loved the hand joke, it really made me LOL! I also loved the part where the compas turned in no direction (of course Jack wishing for rum) from your original story and suggest to put that back in and skip the part with an empty cup. Just a few suggestions from my side. All in all it has been greatly improved! Edit: Also there's no need for double quotes here: "Ouch!" "Now ... You can simply continue the sentence after the exclamation, since it's said by the same person.

As mentioned in an entry before, I'd change the capital sentence NOOOOO with just normal sentence case. I found Yoda hilarious! I could clearly imagine how sets are left after kids play, where Yoda is somehow stuck in the deck of a pirate ship. But about the Syrenes, the heat was really growing when I read the story, but then you mention the 90's? I'd replace that with one particular song to make it even funnier (may also be the mentioned Hansons), but I was really expecting Justin Bieber!

Everything's been said already and I agree I to would avoid using the word LEGO. I'd just use bricks instead. If not for other reason, then for the fact that blackpyre already mentioned it has to be written in all capital to be correct. That is also the only change I'd do - replace the last sentence in capitals into normal size. In the stories or novels you normally stick to normal sentence case no matter if it's shouting or something has to stand out. There for the exclamation mark is used.

Seems like Matt was following our other contest topics, since the paragraphs and quotations seem fine as we've discussed these things before - or he just knows how things are done! As on the content side of the story, I think the overall story is OK, but I miss the LEGO references which all AFOLs are used to find in the stories that are meant for a contest like this. If Brick Beard was not such a common known LEGO figure, then this could also be a story not meeting the rule about LEGO POTC and classic pirates meeting eachother ... But now it struck me, the death of Brick Beard could also mean the end of the classic pirates theme - it is the only reference I could make from this entry to LEGO pirates. And on the other side of content (a bit picky though), why does Will not help Jack defeat Black Beard. Does he just stand and watch there? Please take no offense on a harsh comment, maybe it's just I got used to the way all the other entries were going, and didn't find your style that interesting.

Yes the compatibility mode solves both problems! Sorry for not noticing the previous thread about this ...

The idea is great and the LEGO references is clearly represented as in all other stories, and again from a different angle (this time mentioning the times with no Pirates theme). I would not do a script for a fact of loosing words for names telling the lines but I see you don't have a problem with the words count. On the contrary you still have around 100 spare words. I'd really use them for giving the dialogues more life as already suggested by blackpyre. If I ever go to watch a play (that's what scripts are for) I prefer to watch a comedy. The joke Jack spited out was very funny and it could be improved by pissing off Red Beard a bit more. Maybe mentioning that he's looking for bottles and we all know there were none in the classic pirates :)

It is mentioned that the set is dissasembled and the lines and ropes were meant to be just ropes lying araund mixed with bricks in a drawer (The sword controls any ropes, not just the ones from the ship, mentioned in the movie the Black Pearl was attacked by its own ropes ...) Anyway now i realized that most AFOLS have a far greater LEGO collection than me and sort the bricks in smaller boxes. My LEGOs are all stored in a 1 meter by 1 meter drawer under the bed. Minifigs, ropes, all the colors - everything is mixed. I only keep the sails away to prevent them from beeing wrinkled. I do agree and will try to describe that better! Thanks for pointing it out.

I don't think I'll find more space for any better description. I prefer keeping the dialogues, since they are the funny part of the story. And anyway everything is happening in a drawer full of LEGOs, so it's basically just lego bricks all around and the environment doesn't play any role in the story. Also the picture will be taken this weekend, which will clearly show exactly what's happening. Yes I to don't like the "No Parley" and the code part. I have to change it to something better. I'll also try to make more seperate lines, by the next edit. Thanks for comments!

I must say I like the idea of how previous contestants decided to go for a WIP story and change it according to what people have to say, so here's my go: A new set acquired After two months of being proudly displayed on a shelf, the great Queen Anne's Revenge has finally been disassembled and put into the drawer with other bricks. Before the crews eyes got used to the darker place, someone started complaining. “Look at all their fancy detailed clothes.” “Ay, and check their heads, that color makes my yellow face turn green!” “Check out the black furry one, his sword is made of rubber!” Roaring of about a dozen pirates was heard as Angelica suggested parley. “There is no such thing as Parley in the classic pirate’s universe, men slay them all!” Suddenly all the ropes lying around enliven and started wrapping around the threatening pirates. “Although you might be greater in number, you don’t stand a chance against my sword and my zombie crew,” Blackbeard answered calmly. “To arms!” shouted the general as a couple of bluecoats joined the fight. Just before the clash a movement of a huge pile of bricks drew everyone’s attention. A postman dog showed up with a watering-can in his hands. “Puppy?” Jack was surprised peeking from his hideout. The dog watered the flowers in front of him then looked at the crowd staring at him. “What is with all the nonsense? I’m old enough to have witnessed plenty of such deviant behavior but all ended with new guys happily merging with the old ones. After all we all have the same creator!” Blackbeard broke the moment of silence: “Ay, that black tricorne there looks more accurate to the movies. Give it here!” Some pirates chuckled while a bluecoat spoke to the cook: “With your head I can clearly represent Bonaparte!” Everyone burst into laughter. It was clear that there was no more offense and most importantly they all served the mocking purpose happily ever after! Word count: 300 The picture is coming later this evening. It needs some editing. Here is the first draft in case you missed it and want to understand the comments and see the changes: Edit 2: The title and the picture were added, also Bricks4Funs suggestions were considered since I find them in place!

Here, I'd only change the ending. Only the last sentence in particular - the playability thing just doesn't make it into the story for my taste. I understand it and think it's a bit funny, but since it's the only thing it has to do with the real life - well I can't describe it, maybe it's just the way I feel at the moment. Else it's a nice story and a great idea with all the references to LEGO sets. P.S. I definitely miss the picture in this one, because I can clearly imagine a prison cell with no back wall and jack and Red Beard sitting in it ...

I love the idea of the plank game being included in the story. And the description of how stupidly the dice bounced wins for me in this story. But, I do find it too complex with the doors appearing from nowhere and for my taste, the story makes no sense after announcing that Jack has won. If it wasn't for blackpyre's description, I would've never got it - if that is correct at all? But still even then, it still misses something crucial - the pirate feel!

Nice story and not like posters before I like the idea of jack getting free. It's a nice way to put the story to an end within the small word limitation! You only shouldn't mention that when he tested the manacles that they held fast. He just tested them, and was keep on testing them in hope the guard gets annoyed - like in the last movie!

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