Hinckley

Thanks for the quick feedback. I'll give it another shot tonight when I do the next interlude. Or I could try to fix these with your comments...or do both. Yes, I think the dynamic paneling lesson is a necessity for me. It's a great one to take in conjunction with this one. Perhaps you and def should team teach a more advanced lesson on "adding dialogue to dynamic paneling".

vote tally Godric Goaty-Blather: 3 votes (Rutherford Hablabble-Bibble, Helena Hippopaw, Lulu Pittoolo) Helena Hippopaw: 1 vote (Godric Goaty-Blather) Purplonia Pink: 2 votes (Looney Lumpylove, Gertrude Tincanchew)

Kiel, help! I feel this is a weak area on my part (I'll enroll in dynamic paneling soon too. ) This is my most recent attempt. The game is filled with others. I can post better and worse examples, but I did struggle with this last night, pulling the raw images out several times to re-cut to fit all the dialogue. Any pointers for me?

vote tally Godric Goaty-Blather: 3 votes (Rutherford Hablabble-Bibble, Helena Hippopaw, Lulu Pittoolo)

Interlude You may now vote. You have 48 hours to reach a conviction.

A huge huge thank you to Wong Wang, Catalina Kittywhisker, Boris Biddlesdorf and Durmudgelous Krup. Thanks for playing and dedicating yourself to the experimental concept. Again, please refrain from revealing your true identity here, but you do have the option to confess on the dead board. Great work, guys. I'm glad you participated in my game. It was fun having you.

Players only please! Day Three has begun. You may not vote in the first 24 hours. Non-playing Characters Harriet Slutter, Female, Student at Pigblister's School of Sorcery and Magicky-doings Pandrione Danger, Female, Student at Pigblister's School of Sorcery and Magicky-doings Rufus Whingesly, Male, Student at Pigblister's School of Sorcery and Magicky-doings Faggo Foogoy, Male, Student at Pigblister's School of Sorcery and Magicky-doings Nevrick Longastley, Male, Student at Pigblister's School of Sorcery and Magicky-doings Albutt Bumblebore, Male, Headmaster of Pigblister's School of Sorcery and Magicky-doings Phallonius Phuckwit, Male, Professor at Pigblister's School of Sorcery and Magicky-doings Odor Eaters / Fermentors / anything evil that needs representation Players (19) Ariattny Sugarbottom, Female, Shopkeep Barkonius Twitch, Male, Gardener Bartholomew Bearbutt, Male, Queefitch Referee Belinda Bugglesby, Female, Potato Post Office Dillpickle Catterweed, Male, Herbologist Drubulum Panck, Male, Dragon Keeper Firuz Foxtail, Male, Alchemist Gertrude Tincanchew, Female, Caretaker Godric Goaty-Blather, Male, Shopkeep Helena Hippopaw, Female, Banker Langston Lionheart, Male, Healer Looney Lumpylove, Female, Applesauce Maker Lulu Pittoolo, Female, Magizoologist Nicholas Dickory, Male, Clock Maker Orion Kettleboil, Male, Astronomer Purplonia Pink, Female, Artist Rutherford Habblable-Bibble, Male, Door-to-door Wand Salesman Timly Dimplebop, Male, Plumber Twatty Tittlesteen, Female, Barmaid The dead Snarky Snickerpuss, Male, Poo Network Repairman, lynched on Day One - Order of the Penis Regelius Snoot, Male, Ambassador, electrocuted on Night One - Order of the Penis Flabflom Flimflam, Male, Magical Maintenance, bonerfied on Night One - Order of the Penis Wong Wang, Male, Mathematician, lynched on Day Two - Order of the Penis Catalina Kittywhisker, Female, Moogle Relations, electrocuted on Night Two - Order of the Penis Boris Biddlesdorf, Male, Goblin Trainer, bonerfied on Night Two - Order of the Penis Durmudgelous Krup, Male, Wandmaker, bonerfied on Night Two - Order of the Penis Objective: The Odor Eaters win when they have outnumbered the Order of the Penis, including any third-parties and the Order of the Penis wins when all of the Odor Eaters are dead, including any third-parties. The Rules: You may not reveal or pretend to reveal your true identity throughout the course of the game. Doing so will result in the immediate death of your character. Likewise, be extra certain you do not post in the game as your real Eurobricks identity. If this gives away which character you are playing, this rule will be applied to that action. Each player will be given a character to play, who will be aligned with either the Order of the Penis or the Odor Eaters. To win the game, the Order of the Penis must kill off all of the Odor Eaters (and any third parties), while the Odor Eaters must outnumber the Order of the Penis (and any third parties). Any third party player will have win conditions that are detailed in their role PM... Each day you will be able to vote to lynch a player. Voting should be done in the following format only; Vote: Character. Similarly, unvoting is to be done in this format only; Unvote: Character. No other format will be accepted. You may also proxy your vote to another player, using this format; proxy: Character. Naturally, unproxying a vote is also possible. The player with the most votes is lynched. In the case of a tie, there will be no lynch. In the case of a no-lynch, a Role Madness night will commence. A Role Madness night favors the Odor Eaters. A game day will last a maximum of 72 hours. You may not vote in the first 24 hours. The day will not end when a majority vote has been reached. If there is time left, a majority vote can be over-turned. After the day has concluded, a night stage will commence, which will last a maximum of 24 hours, unless otherwise noted. Night actions must be sent to the host in the first 20 hours of the night stage, or they will not be accepted, no exceptions. The alignment of lynched players, as well as those that died during the night, will be revealed at the beginning of the next day, barring any interference. You may not quote or pretend to quote anything sent to or from you in PM with the game host. This includes all the details and pictures of your character and role, as well as any night action results. Role claims and reporting of night action results are acceptable, but in your own words only. Do not attempt to use the structure of your role PM to your advantage. You may not quote PMs from or to other players. Paraphrasing is allowed but no direct quoting. Please refrain from quoting PMs in the game threads and in private. Do not play the game outside the thread. Similarly, do not post out of character inside the thread. Game tactics and roles may only be discussed in the game thread or via PM with other players. Private discussion is done at your own risk and should be treated as part of the game. If you are dead, you may not post in thread or discuss the game with any of the players. Any information you had becomes void, and may not be passed on. Violation of this rule will result in a multiple game suspension. If you are converted, you must accept your new affiliation. If it's proven that you gave up your new team after conversion, the whole game will be null and you will most likely not be asked to play one of my games again. You may not edit your posts. You must post in every day thread. You must vote in every day thread. If you have a Night Action, you are required to use it every night, unless otherwise noted. If you have a Night Action, you may not target the same player on three consecutive nights. If you encounter a problem or have a question, please contact the host via PM. Please please please use only the confirmation PM I sent you to communicate with me if you can. Violation of the above rules will result in a penalty of one vote per every four living players (1/4 of the active players list) on the first violation and death of your character on the second. Some additional guidelines, although they are not rules that will incur penalties if you don't follow them: The pictures may or may not contain clues. They most likely do not, but look all you want. Wildly speculate. It's fun. Using acronyms, especially tl;dr, or any 7334 speak will cause major trouble for your character, perhaps even instant death. Roleplaying is a good thing and it is encouraged in this game and will be required at some point. So get to know your personality quirks, they've been created for a reason. You have all been sent a role PM in this format: Any Third Parties may have slightly different role PMs.

Of course! Thank you for playing. I'll give you the dead board address and an official "Thanks for playing!" post when the new thread goes up, hopefully, tonight!

Set an egg timer. Only check EB once every two hours, for 10 minutes! Rest of time spent studying! Good luck on finals.

Not just a bit busy, completely busy! Only check EB on study breaks. Study, study, study! Do well on your finals, man!

You made such vast improvements, Brickington. You should be really happy with how far you've come. Great job opening up your mind and learning what is here to be learned. Here are some little pointers to help: Your photography skills are pretty good. The lighting looks great. Perhaps work on depth of focus a bit. Perhaps take DarkDragon's "Depth of Focus" lesson. Great MOCs. The sets look nice and I like the characters you created. The layout of the comic looks great, but I have trouble reconciling the background with the subject matter. Consider using something different. DarkDragon makes a good point about the dialogue being cut off. If that's a stylistic choice, fine. However, learning to setup a shot so it has room for dialogue is one of the hardest things to do. Go look at the Harriet Slutter Mafia game. I have trouble with it all the time . Take def's dynamic paneling lesson, like DarkDragon suggested. As soon as Brickworld is over, I plan to take it as well. We can be students together! Panel #4: what is he doing? It'd be better to see him at the door to the King's chamber (that's not clear until the next panel) with a knife or something... Watch your spelling. "Would their there be a rebellion?" No offense but if you misspell anything in Character and Theme 3, I'll fail you. Sorry. I like the story. Did you write it yourself? It's very clever. I think the comic panels reflect the story very well. I think story-wise, as Steampunk Doc said, you may want to choose a more linear story to do a comic with. This works as a comic, but I'd like to see your story writing skills at work as well. At least in one of your WIPs. I do like what you wrote here, though. It's very clever and you have a good sense of humor. Numbering the panels 1 through 5 is misleading as they aren't actually steps to become King. So, now you just have numbered panels. If you want them to be a list, you should also put that in your narrative yellow boxes. Example: Step 1. Impress the King. To make this more of a linear story that people expect to see in a comic, perhaps tell the story of how the main character tried to become king. Example: "Step 1. Impress the King. I always thought it would be easy to impress the King. The books made it look easy. Grab a sword, slay a Dragon. Done. King impressed. But that was easier said than done..." and then move onto a story about him trying to slay a dragon. In the end he could choose to mop the floors instead. That's just one way to turn your idea into a traditional comic. Again, this isn't about forcing you to stick to tradition and writing every comic and stories the way they have always been written. If you want to do a comic like this which breaks tradition, it's best to come from a place of understanding the tradition first and developing your craft from the basis of the rules you eventually want to break. Overall, though, really nice work. Great improvement. Keep it up.

Day Two is now over. With 15 votes, Wong Wang will be lynched. final vote tally Drubulum Pank: 5 votes (penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty) Ariattny Sugarbottom: 5 votes (penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty) Orion Kettleboil: 5 votes (penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty) Wong Wang: 15 votes (Drubulum Pank, Lulu Pittoolo, Godric Goaty-Blather, Orion Kettleboil, Timly Dimplebop, Bartholomew Bearbutt, Gertrude Tincanchew, Ariattny Sugarbottom, Langston Lionheart, Twatty Tittlesteen, Firuz Foxtail, Looney Lumpylove, Cataline Kittywhisker, Nicholas Dickory, Dillpickle Catterweed) Durmudgelous Krup: 1 vote (Rutherford Hablabble-Bibble) Rutherford Hablabble-Bibble: 1 vote (Barkonius Twitch) Gertrude Tincanchew: 2 votes (Purplonia Pink, Durmudgelous Krup) Godric Goaty-Blather: 4 votes (Helena Hippopaw, Belinda Bugglesby, Wong Wang, Boris Biddlesdorf) Mod note: Get your Night Actions in please, ASAP! Thank you.

vote tally Drubulum Pank: 5 votes (penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty) Ariattny Sugarbottom: 5 votes (penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty) Orion Kettleboil: 5 votes (penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty) Wong Wang: 14 votes (Drubulum Pank, Lulu Pittoolo, Godric Goaty-Blather, Orion Kettleboil, Timly Dimplebop, Bartholomew Bearbutt, Gertrude Tincanchew, Ariattny Sugarbottom, Langston Lionheart, Twatty Tittlesteen, Firuz Foxtail, Looney Lumpylove, Cataline Kittywhisker, Nicholas Dickory) Durmudgelous Krup: 1 vote (Rutherford Hablabble-Bibble) Rutherford Hablabble-Bibble: 1 vote (Barkonius Twitch) Gertrude Tincanchew: 2 votes (Purplonia Pink, Durmudgelous Krup) Godric Goaty-Blather: 4 votes (Helena Hippopaw, Belinda Bugglesby, Wong Wang, Boris Biddlesdorf) Mod note: While you will still have the full 20 hour Night Action deadline, I will accept Night Actions now if you are ready with them. Thank you.

vote tally Drubulum Pank: 5 votes (penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty) Ariattny Sugarbottom: 5 votes (penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty) Orion Kettleboil: 5 votes (penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty) Wong Wang: 11 votes (Drubulum Pank, Lulu Pittoolo, Godric Goaty-Blather, Orion Kettleboil, Timly Dimplebop, Bartholomew Bearbutt, Gertrude Tincanchew, Ariattny Sugarbottom, Langston Lionheart, Twatty Tittlesteen, Firuz Foxtail) Durmudgelous Krup: 2 votes (Nicholas Dickory, Rutherford Hablabble-Bibble) Rutherford Hablabble-Bibble: 1 vote (Barkonius Twitch) Gertrude Tincanchew: 2 votes (Purplonia Pink, Durmudgelous Krup) Godric Goaty-Blather: 4 votes (Helena Hippopaw, Catalina Kittywhisker, Belinda Bugglesby, Wong Wang) Mod note: While you will still have the full 20 hour Night Action deadline, I will accept Night Actions now if you are ready with them. Thank you.

Can you guys let me know how much space you want at Brickworld? I'm getting organized for it in this topic. Thanks.

vote tally Drubulum Pank: 5 votes (penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty) Ariattny Sugarbottom: 6 votes (penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty, Wong Wang) Orion Kettleboil: 5 votes (penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty) Wong Wang: 13 votes (Drubulum Pank, Lulu Pittoolo, Belinda Bugglesby, Godric Goaty-Blather, Orion Kettleboil, Timly Dimplebop, Bartholomew Bearbutt, Gertrude Tincanchew, Catalina Kittywhisker, Ariattny Sugarbottom, Langston Lionheart, Twatty Tittlesteen, Firuz Foxtail) Timly Dimplebop: 1 vote (Helena Hippopaw) Durmudgelous Krup: 2 votes (Nicholas Dickory, Rutherford Hablabble-Bibble) Rutherford Hablabble-Bibble: 1 vote (Barkonius Twitch) Gertrude Tincanchew: 1 vote (Purplonia Pink) 12 hours remain in Day Two. Mod note: While you will still have the full 20 hour Night Action deadline, I will accept Night Actions now if you are ready with them. Thank you.

Interlude vote tally Drubulum Pank: 5 votes (penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty) Ariattny Sugarbottom: 6 votes (penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty, Wong Wang) Orion Kettleboil: 5 votes (penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty) Wong Wang: 12 votes (Drubulum Pank, Lulu Pittoolo, Belinda Bugglesby, Godric Goaty-Blather, Orion Kettleboil, Timly Dimplebop, Bartholomew Bearbutt, Gertrude Tincanchew, Catalina Kittywhisker, Ariattny Sugarbottom, Langston Lionheart, Twatty Tittlesteen) Timly Dimplebop: 1 vote (Helena Hippopaw) Durmudgelous Krup: 2 votes (Nicholas Dickory, Rutherford Hablabble-Bibble) Rutherford Hablabble-Bibble: 1 vote (Barkonius Twitch) 24 26 hours remain in Day Two.

vote tally Drubulum Pank: 5 votes (penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty) Ariattny Sugarbottom: 6 votes (penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty, Wong Wang) Orion Kettleboil: 5 votes (penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty) Wong Wang: 10 votes (Drubulum Pank, Lulu Pittoolo, Belinda Bugglesby, Godric Goaty-Blather, Orion Kettleboil, Timly Dimplebop, Bartholomew Bearbutt, Gertrude Tincanchew, Catalina Kittywhisker, Ariattny Sugarbottom) Timly Dimplebop: 1 vote (Helena Hippopaw) Firuz Foxtail: 1 vote (Twatty Tittlesteen) Durmudgelous Krup: 2 votes (Nicholas Dickory, Rutherford Hablabble-Bibble)

Mod note: vote tally Drubulum Pank: 5 votes (penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty) Ariattny Sugarbottom: 5 votes (penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty) Orion Kettleboil: 5 votes (penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty, penalty) Wong Wang 7 votes (Drubulum Pank, Lulu Pittoolo, Belinda Bugglesby, Godric Goaty-Blather, Orion Kettleboil, Timly Dimplebop, Bartholomew Bearbutt) Timly Dimplebop: 1 vote (Helena Hippopaw)

Interlude You may now vote. You have 48 50 hours to reach a conviction. (Mod note: Yes, once again I'm starting voting early. I'm tired. One of these days, I'll start the day thread at a decent hour. )

The Interview Set up an interview between you and one (or several) of your characters. Take the time to set it up. Write a paragraph about this character's background as if you were writing an article about the character and conducting an interview. You can also choose any part of the story to be interviewing your character during. Be as specific or general as you want with your questions, but definitely be creative. Don't try to edit yourself. Ask anything. You never know what answer you will get. The answers may surprise you. Setup a follow-up interview or interview your character at several points during the story. Some things to keep in mind: 1. Does your character know they're being interviewed by the author? If so, how do they feel about you? Are they upset with you for writing a certain incident? Do they blame you for anything? 2. Are they willing to open up right away? Do they have to warm up to you? What makes them open up? 3. Are there things that they won't tell you? Things that they're thinking that they would never say out loud? If so, write those down in a separate document! Those are the most interesting! There's a very clear point to this exercise and hopefully you will see it without being told. Let yourself go and have fun with it. Once you are comfortable with the format, it should flow naturally, like a conversation between author and character. Once it gets there, let it go as far as you are able and then we can look at what you have when it's done.

Great job, Brickington. You passed this lesson as well. I really like your update about Patrick's fear and confidence. The story is much more interesting if we see him overcome his own challenges to surprise the others. It's more fun to watch him surprise even himself! Vast improvement. Keep up the great work. I'll finish up lesson three and move it here for you tonight. Thanks!

Mod note: The Day One thread is now open so you can quote directly if you wish. I will try to remember to do this for each game day as the game progresses. Thank you. Carry on.

A huge thank you to Snarky Snickerpuss, Regelius Snoot and Flabflom Flimflam. Thanks for playing my game! I hope you had fun. Sorry it ended so early for you.

Players only please! Day Two has begun. You may not vote in the first 24 hours. Non-playing Characters Harriet Slutter, Female, Student at Pigblister's School of Sorcery and Magicky-doings Pandrione Danger, Female, Student at Pigblister's School of Sorcery and Magicky-doings Rufus Whingesly, Male, Student at Pigblister's School of Sorcery and Magicky-doings Faggo Foogoy, Male, Student at Pigblister's School of Sorcery and Magicky-doings Nevrick Longastley, Male, Student at Pigblister's School of Sorcery and Magicky-doings Albutt Bumblebore, Male, Headmaster of Pigblister's School of Sorcery and Magicky-doings Phallonius Phuckwit, Male, Professor at Pigblister's School of Sorcery and Magicky-doings Odor Eaters / Fermentors / anything evil that needs representation Players (23) Ariattny Sugarbottom, Female, Shopkeep Barkonius Twitch, Male, Gardener Bartholomew Bearbutt, Male, Quidditch Referee Belinda Bugglesby, Female, Potato Post Office Boris Biddlesdorf, Male, Goblin Trainer Catalina Kittywhisker, Female, Muggle Relations Dillpickle Catterweed, Male, Herbologist Drubulum Panck, Male, Dragon Keeper Durmudgelous Krup, Male, Wandmaker Firuz Foxtail, Male, Alchemist Gertrude Tincanchew, Female, Caretaker Godric Goaty-Blather, Male, Shopkeep Helena Hippopaw, Female, Banker Langston Lionheart, Male, Healer Looney Lumpylove, Female, Applesauce Maker Lulu Pittoolo, Female, Magizoologist Nicholas Dickory, Male, Clock Maker Orion Kettleboil, Male, Astronomer Purplonia Pink, Female, Artist Rutherford Habblable-Bibble, Male, Door-to-door Wand Salesman Timly Dimplebop, Male, Plumber Twatty Tittlesteen, Female, Barmaid Wong Wang, Male, Mathematician The dead Snarky Snickerpuss, Male, Floo Network Repairman, lynched on Day One - Order of the Penis Regelius Snoot, Male, Ambassador, electrocuted on Night One - Order of the Penis Flabflom Flimflam, Male, Magical Maintenance, bonerfied on Night One - Order of the Penis Objective: The Odor Eaters win when they have outnumbered the Order of the Penis, including any third-parties and the Order of the Penis wins when all of the Odor Eaters are dead, including any third-parties. The Rules: You may not reveal or pretend to reveal your true identity throughout the course of the game. Doing so will result in the immediate death of your character. Likewise, be extra certain you do not post in the game as your real Eurobricks identity. If this gives away which character you are playing, this rule will be applied to that action. Each player will be given a character to play, who will be aligned with either the Order of the Penis or the Odor Eaters. To win the game, the Order of the Penis must kill off all of the Odor Eaters, while the Odor Eaters must outnumber the Order of the Penis. Any third party player will have win conditions that are detailed in their role PM... Each day you will be able to vote to lynch a player. Voting should be done in the following format only; Vote: Character. Similarly, unvoting is to be done in this format only; Unvote: Character. No other format will be accepted. You may also proxy your vote to another player, using this format; proxy: Character. Naturally, unproxying a vote is also possible. The player with the most votes is lynched. In the case of a tie, there will be no lynch. In the case of a no-lynch, a Role Madness night will commence. A Role Madness night favors the Odor Eaters. A game day will last a maximum of 72 hours. You may not vote in the first 24 hours. The day will not end when a majority vote has been reached. If there is time left, a majority vote can be over-turned. After the day has concluded, a night stage will commence, which will last a maximum of 24 hours, unless otherwise noted. Night actions must be sent to the host in the first 20 hours of the night stage, or they will not be accepted, no exceptions. The alignment of lynched players, as well as those that died during the night, will be revealed at the beginning of the next day, barring any interference. You may not quote or pretend to quote anything sent to or from you in PM with the game host. This includes all the details and pictures of your character and role, as well as any night action results. Role claims and reporting of night action results are acceptable, but in your own words only. Do not attempt to use the structure of your role PM to your advantage. You may not quote PMs from or to other players. Paraphrasing is allowed but no direct quoting. Please refrain from quoting PMs in the game threads and in private. Do not play the game outside the thread. Similarly, do not post out of character inside the thread. Game tactics and roles may only be discussed in the game thread or via PM with other players. Private discussion is done at your own risk and should be treated as part of the game. If you are dead, you may not post in thread or discuss the game with any of the players. Any information you had becomes void, and may not be passed on. Violation of this rule will result in a multiple game suspension. If you are converted, you must accept your new affiliation. If it's proven that you gave up your new team after conversion, the whole game will be null and you will most likely not be asked to play one of my games again. You may not edit your posts. You must post in every day thread. You must vote in every day thread. If you have a Night Action, you are required to use it every night, unless otherwise noted. If you have a Night Action, you may not target the same player on three consecutive nights. If you encounter a problem or have a question, please contact the host via PM. Please please please use only the confirmation PM I sent you to communicate with me if you can. Violation of the above rules will result in a penalty of one vote per every four living players (1/4 of the active players list) on the first violation and death of your character on the second. Some additional guidelines, although they are not rules that will incur penalties if you don't follow them: The pictures may or may not contain clues. They most likely do not, but look all you want. Wildly speculate. It's fun. Using acronyms, especially tl;dr, or any 7334 speak will cause major trouble for your character, perhaps even instant death. Roleplaying is a good thing and it is encouraged in this game and will be required at some point. So get to know your personality quirks, they've been created for a reason. You have all been sent a role PM in this format: Any Third Parties may have slightly different role PMs.