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I'll take this to the crew and see if we can get a place for the game to be played.

Has the makings of a nice Brig of war IMO, the colour scheme looks a lot like those used by the British navey during 1800's in Australia but could easily be Dutch of French too. I was at the museum today and there where quite a few paintings of brigs that looked just like yours. Keep us updated.

Found it. It was called Europa not Europica as I said earlier.....check it out Imagine this with todays techniques.

Ah good to see we're back on topic, nice save Horry that could have got ugly.......bring on the classics. I'd love to see some of the pieces used in the never released "Europica" ( I think that's what it was to be called) line appear in some new classic sets, mainly the hair pieces (wigs) for both men and women.

I think you could drop this line without hurting the story, "after spending so much time with Jack he had got used to it," Good luck

Oh sorry for the miss-information, I didn't know I had super powers ( as I can edit my own titles).

You can edit your title by clicking "full edit" once inside the edit screen. Sorry I was wrong.

Ah I didn't see it as a script but after reading it again I guess it is. In that case it needs more direction so that the players get a better sense of their intention. Blackpyre has given some great feedback again, though the comic idea is not allowed in this comp.

You can add the 's to the title by doing a "full edit" See how I used quotation marks just then , all spoken words should have them. I'd avoid using abbreviations like BSB as it takes away from the story telling and looks cheap (please don't take offence). I've seen others remark on the lack of rum in classic pirates but what do you think was in those barrels?....water, apples maybe? You have a good story but it needs work, I'm sure those after the "creative critic" will help you out. Good luck.

There is one little thing that doesn't sit right with me and that's the manacles that held fast then later are broken....I assume the test while rattling them revealed their weakness though this is not confirmed in the story......just a small nit pick really. Good luck.

Is this a finished product or are you still tweaking it? Good luck in the comp either way.

Well done ! Word count didn't stop you from writting a funny, descriptive and entertaining story...look people it can be done.

"Classic" says it all ! Classic cars, movies and pirates are always better IMO. I've still collected most of the PotC sets (and love them) but for me they are not in the same league....like apples and pears.

Cheers for the feed back guys! @ Admiral Croissant, I could have done snot water but I feel it lacks movement, and I'm quite happy with the sand. Each to their own I guess.

Horry knows what he's talking about "less is more" when playing online RPG. Now I just need to finish my ships update.

That is a great first draft !! I'm sure you can cut quite a few words by choosing them carefully. You have a great story telling style and the imagery flows when reading it. Best of luck in the comp.

I'd offer to shoot my BSB for you to "shop" in but my sails went walk-about during my dark age . You could use an official image of the BSB and cut it out and shop it in as an alternative, but the pic is not really that important it's all about the story.

Nice one WhiteFang. Great to see the first entry up already! You may want to read through it again as there are some grammar issues here and there. You could probably cut the word count a tad too (but I didn't find it too long). Your picture is great , do you own a BSB ? If you do I would recommend replacing the island with that. You seem to have some good "Photo Shop" skills maybe you could shop it in over the island. Just some thoughts, Good luck in the comp

First post updated.... I'm a naughty bumper.

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That's great Horry and something I'm sure a few members would enjoy doing! This in essence is a war game and assuming players are realistic with their ships, crew and armaments could be a great deal of fun, even fleet battles could be done with multi players once rules and game play becomes familiar. I'm not sure if this was the intention of this thread but I like the spin you've put on it.

LEGO heads are yellow for a good reason, "non race specific" there for they will not go flesh toned.....I hope

Excuse me while I retrieve my jaw from the floor. That's a great build there mate, the essential details are there with minimal part usage. My hat goes of to you sir well done recreating one of the greatest characters from Gen 1. I'm guessing you used the actual model as a refference ? Your presentation is top notch too.

As you state yourself this is a discussion thread and should have been posted in the "discussion forum" not the MOC sub-forum. I'm not sure where your going with this, I don't see any reason to have conformity with in ship building. As with all mocs it's an artistic expression of the builder and to create a standard building guide or judging table seems counter productive to me. Who will this benefit ? Why do we need to be judged against one another? (we have comps for that) This idea sounds to me like something that could stop new ship builders from posting if their techniques are unorthodox. Have I got the wrong end of the stick here?