RedBrick1 Posted June 8, 2013 (edited) In a far away land, a guard tells the tale, of how he went from a rip roaring adventurer to a sweetroll protecting guard. Edited June 8, 2013 by RedBrick1 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
RedBrick1 Posted June 20, 2013 Bump! I am beginning work on a new brickfilm and was wondering if anyone had any feedback on how my animation could improve? Thanks. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
SteampunkDoc Posted June 20, 2013 Hmm, well for starters, I think I've seen this before somewhere...Maybe. I think the "Arrow to the knee" meme has run it's course and died by now, but thankfully my exposure to it wasn't extreme enough to ruin the punchline. The good part about this short is that it not only used the title's meme, but also references several other works. That's a good method of doing things, and even if somebody doesn't like or get some of the jokes, the rest can appeal to him. The main guy had a stop-and-go type pacing to his voice that broke up the lines, and caused a very unnatural feel. Almost like the actor was trying to remember the script after only reading it a few times. The kid's voice was heavily processed, and with the abundance of younger folks getting into brickfilming, finding a genuinely young voice would have been fairly easy. The animation is good, but the guy wiggles around a lot, and it could use a bit more easing. The motions didn't always match up to the voice, but I'm not sure if that's the animation's fault, or the voice actor's. The arrows are done very well, but they guy obviously can't count. "Couple of them to both kneecaps." would add up to two arrows per kneecap, or four total. Background noises are a bit loud, and it's hard to make out the "Yell in town" line, but overall it's a nice well-developed short. While the set is a bit on the basic side, it does a good job of representing a castle, and matches with the more basic character designs to give everything a simple, but good kind of simple, look. The few flaws shouldn't be too hard to fix, and other than those, you've done a good job. Congratulations. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Legopast Posted June 27, 2013 Maybe not using words like "trash boy" In medieval/fantasy settings ;-)! Good animation I love the over the shoulder almost shot of the boys face a priceless expression that says it all! Keep up the good work Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
