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In a far away land, a guard tells the tale, of how he went from a rip roaring adventurer to a sweetroll protecting guard. Edited by RedBrick1

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Bump! I am beginning work on a new brickfilm and was wondering if anyone had any feedback on how my animation could improve? Thanks.

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Hmm, well for starters, I think I've seen this before somewhere...Maybe.

I think the "Arrow to the knee" meme has run it's course and died by now, but thankfully my exposure to it wasn't extreme enough to ruin the punchline.

The good part about this short is that it not only used the title's meme, but also references several other works. That's a good method of doing things, and even if somebody doesn't like or get some of the jokes, the rest can appeal to him. The main guy had a stop-and-go type pacing to his voice that broke up the lines, and caused a very unnatural feel. Almost like the actor was trying to remember the script after only reading it a few times. The kid's voice was heavily processed, and with the abundance of younger folks getting into brickfilming, finding a genuinely young voice would have been fairly easy.

The animation is good, but the guy wiggles around a lot, and it could use a bit more easing. The motions didn't always match up to the voice, but I'm not sure if that's the animation's fault, or the voice actor's.

The arrows are done very well, but they guy obviously can't count. "Couple of them to both kneecaps." would add up to two arrows per kneecap, or four total. :wink:

Background noises are a bit loud, and it's hard to make out the "Yell in town" line, but overall it's a nice well-developed short.

While the set is a bit on the basic side, it does a good job of representing a castle, and matches with the more basic character designs to give everything a simple, but good kind of simple, look.

The few flaws shouldn't be too hard to fix, and other than those, you've done a good job.

Congratulations.

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Maybe not using words like "trash boy" In medieval/fantasy settings ;-)!

Good animation I love the over the shoulder almost shot of the boys face a priceless expression that says it all!

Keep up the good work

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