Lands of Roawia Comics

[Mark of Falworth]

Hey All!

Here are my first two comics I've ever made. Tips and advice are very appreciated!

LoR Comic strip. by Mark of Falworth, on Flickr

LoR Comic 2 by Mark of Falworth, on Flickr

Enjoy!

[Graham Gidman]

Haha, these are great!

[Sandy]

The pictures are brisk and clear, and the special effects and the speech bubbles are well edited in.

However, comics are more about showing than telling, and you've done both in this case. It is a waste of space to have a picture of a man getting a rug swept under him and then have a text next to it saying "a rug was swept under him". And you've done the same thing with each picture. The sheer amount of text, although well written, makes the comic a chore to read through - and there's only five different panels of it!

Repeating the last panel of the first page on the second page is also a big waste of space.

So yeah, cut down the text and give us more pictures - they are the purpose of comics, otherwise it would be just a story with illustrations.

[Balbo]

Hehe, that's great . I really like the photography and the story

[Mark of Falworth]

Thanks people!

The pictures are brisk and clear, and the special effects and the speech bubbles are well edited in.

However, comics are more about showing than telling, and you've done both in this case. It is a waste of space to have a picture of a man getting a rug swept under him and then have a text next to it saying "a rug was swept under him". And you've done the same thing with each picture. The sheer amount of text, although well written, makes the comic a chore to read through - and there's only five different panels of it!

Repeating the last panel of the first page on the second page is also a big waste of space.

So yeah, cut down the text and give us more pictures - they are the purpose of comics, otherwise it would be just a story with illustrations.

Those are some very good points! I'll put your advice into action next time I do these.