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Great story, I has a great link between PotC and Classic Pirates because of them battling about the colour of their 'skin'. The story is well written and humourous. I particularly like how you have introduced characters from other themes (Dobby and Yoda). An improvement you could possibly make is that the Zombie says 'I only came here because the cake shop told me I was too ugly’. You may have made it sound like the cake shop itself (the building) sound like that it is talking to the Zombie to some readers. You could possibly change this to the woman in the cake shop or the woman behind the till in the cake shop told the Zombie eh was too ugly. Overall, a great entry that is great to read and has good Lego-related humour in it. ~buddy~

Nice variant of the 8421 set, like your black and orange colour scheme, I think it works well on the crane. Very well done. ~buddy~

Welcome to Eurobricks Sebas, I hope that you enjoy the forums! ~buddy~

Excatly right there simonwillems, because of the unhealthy food and noisy children, I barely ever go to McDonalds and now if you can't go on EB on their WiFi that is another reason not to go. ~buddy~

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Great entry, I like the way you have given detail and expression to the characters by the way that you have written their pronounciation of words. Also you have given further detail about the characters by what you have made them say, such as when Jack says that Gibbs is late when in fact Gibbs is early and Jack is late. This shows Jack's attitude well. Also, I like the storyline of it that it is set in a bedroom when a child is asleep and that there is fog rolling in as Jack makes an entrance. Another thing about the setting of it is that it is descriptive and makes the reader visual the setting is when the ship is 'scraping wood and leaving a trail in the dust as she inched closer to the edge.' To improve the story, you could maybe add a small few word description of the boy, for example, you could say the colour of his hair or his age or you could say that he was dreaming of Lego. But this would only be a slight adjustment to an already great story. Great entry with good descriptions and a good storyline. ~buddy~

Great entry, I like that your entry is a poetic ballad and has a good ryhme and rhythm to it, without lacking any details of a story that doesn't rhyme would have. Another positive point about your entry is that the rhymes are cleverly thought out to give detail and show both PotC and Classic Pirates, such as the way you've made Eldorado Fortress fit into the rhythm by saying 'Unto the fortress, El Dorado.' Also, this rhyme has a pirate-like feel to it, as does the whole ballad. Also, I like how at the end it say that the gold was Pearl not Chrome, which reminds me of the recent gold colour issues with the PotC sets. To improve, you could maybe add a little back story that refers to where Barbossa is singing this ballad, just a sentence or two at the start that gives a setting such as a tavern where Barbossa is a bit drunk and loud and wants to sing a ballad about his travels to impress other pirates there or the barmaids or a differnet backstory that you would prefer to mine. Well done on the entry, it is well written and flows well. ~buddy~

Good entry, I particularly like the structure of the story with it mainly made up of speech between the characters to show what is happening in the story and the speech also helps the reader start to establish the characteristics of the characters. Also, I like the way that you have smoothly introduced the Classic Pirates link of the story, with the sudden appearance of Captain Brickbeard after an incident with Jack long ago. I agree with the others, that a negative point about this story, is the lack of characterisation in the story, this wouldn't be hard to fix you could just add some small extra details or words in a speech so that the characters are more vivid and detailed in the readers mind. An example of a way that you could do this is by when you say 'Jack and I were crew on a boat, the Voyager. We were very good friends, and both wanted to become captain, so we decided to kill Captain Loppett, to become co-captains together . But when we did, Jack became drunk with power, and threw me overboard, so I swam here and...' In this speech, you could mention what they did together when they were friends (Pirate activities such as drinking rum together etc.). Also, you could add to the characterisation by making Jack seem a bit more menacing when he has his eye on something big and serious (the Captain's role). This could just be saying that he threw Brickbeard overboard ina specifically dangerous place such as the Bermuda Triangle or shark-infested waters. On the whole, a great entry with a well structured storyline. ~buddy~

Great entry, I like the that the story has a good mix of Classic Pirates and PotC, with the setting being Eldorado Fortress and the prisoner being Jack Sparrow. Also, you refer to the classic rivalry between the Redcoats and the Bluecoats. Another positive to the story is fact that you don't name Jack until the end of the story, even though in your mind when reading it you know it will be Jack Sparrow. This is because of the part about him have having a bottle with a ship in and a 'broken' compass, this adds some extra mystery and curiosity about the story that make you want to read on and confirm your suspicion. I agree with others that a negative about the entry is the fact that at the start you say, 'the prisoner rattled his manacles, testing their strength, but they held fast.' If they held fast then, then how did he pull them apart and escape? This could be improved by you simply removing the part about them being tight or perhaps imply later on that it is something to do with the fog wothout mentioning it was the fog but wording it cleverly to make the reader immediatley associate the breaking of the manacles with the rolling in of the fog. On the whole though, a great entry with good humour. ~buddy~

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+1 for Bendybadger, a great deal and smooth transaction, with very quick delivery. Thanks. ~buddy~