Star Wars Episode? The Story Unfolds

[Palin Jax]

Hey All,

I've been considering a new concept for here, and I would like your input. As you know, I am new here, and most of the time, when not checking the latest news, I've been posting in the TIE army thread. Which bring me to this new concept, which is not total new, but here goes.

I love to write, but I am limited in time by what I can tackle. My character, Palin Jax, needs a bit of back story, or rather a story. While the TIE army thread is enjoyable, and I will still be involved there, I want to tackle concepts I have perceived from the films, and what I have gleaned from the EU books. I believe the Empire is not totally evil, at least not the denizens of it, it is just ruled by what George Lucas has constructed as his antagonists. If you read further into the New Republic, it is always struggling to fix itself, always at the brink of collapse. Vader comes back to the Light side, but what really drew him to the Dark in the first place? It wasn't just Padme.. What drew Papaltine to it as well?

As I have played Palin, I have portrayed him as a bright new clone, possessing all the traits of what we as people consider to be good, but I want to push him to the dark side, and see the why of it. In envisioning him, I have also considered making him force adept. I cannot fully do it in the format in there because I will not control another persons character without their consent, and even then, it is hard to set it up. What I am asking is, does anyone want to go on that adventure with Palin, or does anybody care to see it at all.

I will monitor this thread, and if the feedback is positive, I would like to begin an Open Story. It will mainly focus around Jax life, but as and avid role player, and GM, I will welcome others to the story. But I do want story, not "oh I blew up 20 Storm Troopers with my +5 blaster of instant death", or "I forced chocked 20 Rebel Scum". I want feeling, emotion... Basically, something to tide us all over till 09, when we will get to see that famous scrawl across our little screens. So let me know what ya think :-$

Edited January 24, 2008 by Palin Jax

[General Zen]

Palin, I love your aspiration to create your own character. :-) General Zen is a character I created as well to work as a highly respected and feared imperial general. He was considered "vader's favorite" for not only his effective leadership and tactfulness, but his extreme loyalty and devotion to his empire. i could go on and on about him, but i do not wish to bore you! ;-)

If you want a character to fight with palin jax, General Zen is willing to help! ;-)

[Palin Jax]

Thanks General Zen, but that is not fully the point, as I would much rather have them "grow" along-side each other. And as to being bored to death, well :-D , I would like you to go on, and on, as that is the point! :'-)

An Open Story is more like creating a chapter in a book, or an scene in a film. As such, I will write one chapter, more likely a full page worth of story. The who's, where's and why's, environments and settings that Jax is in. Then it is open to anyone else to post what their character is doing... Like I said, I do not wish to control anyones Character, mainly because I view this as an open story-line. I dislike hurting anyones feelings in that I might have made your character do something out of character.

Also, to all of you out there in Cyber-space, I want this to be done as an "In Character" story. If you are a rebel, you are to do so with the desire that you wish to end the oppression of the Empire. Imperials, I would like you to emulate a favorite Admiral, or General, even possibly a Commander you might have read about. I want Vader and the Emperor, or any other Main Characters to be off limits, for now.

Edited January 24, 2008 by Palin Jax

[Corvus]

I like your idea, Jax. If you've read my posts in the TIE army, my character and his brother, Jaing have a constant joking attitude with each other.

I'd like to expand this, to show how they both live with each other and getting along, and I think this will work perfectly. :-)

However, why not limit it, just a bit. Not quite a full page, but not half a paragraph, either.

Will

[General Zen]

I apologize about being on a tangent, Palin, but everyone knows you can get a man talking we he is talking about himself! :-D I think this will be an interesting and creative pursuit for you, and if you need any ideas, just ask us! ;-) I really hope you do this project, and I'm sure it ill be great!

[Palin Jax]

*The Preview Begins*

{A cantina, on a back-water world far out in the outer Rim. Two men, sharing a drink. One, rather in pity for the second, who wears tattered rags that were once the uniform of the old Empire}

"Breathing... It was hard to do as I watched. I'm Good at watching... People, places, things... This is my story, if you care to listen. Be careful not to get sucked in though. Thats how it happened to me, at the end.."

"Sometimes I lie awake at night... or often I just start pacing... I can feel the darkness, always at my sights... just off to the side... He's there, you know, watching... Just sitting there, on His throne. I tried to tell him, I did... It's not all bad, it's not just hatred... Once I cared, and cared deeply... You could say that I loved it, in a sense, but thats... it's just not true..."

{first man nods as he listens}

"Your wondering what I am rambling about, what I am getting at, aren't you? If you'll buy me another round, I'll tell you... I'll tell you what it was like, opening my eyes for the first time, though I guess they were never really opened... As I dawned my helmet that first day, as I lost my innocence. I was naive, but maybe it's what saved me."

"I was there, you know, when that cold metal shell erupted over the skies of Endor. I felt Him slip away just before the end. That traitor, Vader, as he dropped him over the side. And the Rebels, their in-charge now. Ha! They can't agree on what flag to fly, can they. They let those non-human dogs have their voices back. Even brought back the Senate. Father Papaltine should have done um right in the first place and wiped the universe clean of em'."

I might be a shell of a man now, but once.. once I was the man... A Grand Admiral at that! And my ship... ahhh... How I miss Her... The Event Horizen... And Black Ops... The Shadow Corps...

{The First man sits and listens, not sure of the others sanity, and thinks to himself. "The look in this poor souls eyes, more like dark pits. Black holes have more color. His tongue darts to and fro, licking his lips." Finally, the good Samaritan ask the Second}

"Whats your name, Sir..."

{Silent for but a moment as he ponders this other mans question, Palin stumbles in his mind.}

"Why, I'm Jax, though most people feared me as Grand Admiral Jax..."

(Well, just a bit of musing on my part, and to show you what I am thinking about at this concept stage. Tell me what you think, or add in like manner)

Edited January 25, 2008 by Palin Jax

[Palin Jax]

*Jax* Good morning Sir! Sure feels good to be behind the controls of a real TIE instead of that Trainer...

*Unknown Voice over com-mic* Pilot ST 353, concentrate. Thats 6000 credits worth of Imperial hardware your flying... Now, bank left, hold in tight, then loop right...

*Jax* Like this... (Performs the maneuver text book style)...

*Com-mic* Good... It would appear you were paying attention in there...

*Jax* Ah... thats nothing (breaks hard left, circles in loop, then dives inverse over the training center)

*Com-mic* Pilot, that is an unauthorized maneuver, and you are now flying in restricted airspace... Thats 2 demerits. Now, return to formation at once and practice dog-fighting tactics...

*Jax* You mean secessionist-fighting, don't you...

*Com-mic; second voice* This is Lieutenant Solo. You are to report to Sec-ops upon docking your craft. Finish your training quickly, and then strip down into your cadet uniform. Captain Ando will see you at once.

*Jax* Yes Sir. Sir, do you have any idea what this is about. I've already reported to the Corps Com twice now. I didn't cheat, not even once.

*Com-mic; first voice* That will be all pilot... You are to proceed to Sec-Ops at once... dog-fighting drills are canceled...

*Jax* Ah man... now Denton will win top honors....

As Jax piloted his craft back into the holding clamps, a new excitement, mingle with dread, filled his guts. "Thats three times now that they've thought I cheated on the Holo-tests", Jax thought to himself as he cleared the TIE's spherical pod and emerged onto the pilot's dock. "A bet its Denton again too... or maybe its Selkirk."

Stripping off his grey helmet and placing it in his storage locker, Palin felt a sense of pride fill his veins. Section Leader was a big honor. And grey was allot better than that tacky white helmet that training pilots had to wear. He could almost burst from the prospects of donning the black helmet of a full fledge TIE pilot. One day, Ensign Jax would rule the skies. He imagined himself on patrol, even guarding some important Moffs personal shuttle, or maybe even getting Recon duty out on some Mid-Rim world. As he cleared the corner to the Sec-Ops office...

Edited January 26, 2008 by Palin Jax

[Palin Jax]

Seated behind a cold and unadorned desk, Captain Mikal Ando shuffled around reports, but it wasn't the only thing being shaken around at his desk. Just hours ago, Admiral Tanniel sat right across from him, holding an Imperial code cylinder authorizing him to pull the top tier candidates from his academy. Whats more, this spot that Mikal had worked so hard for, even fought for to some degree, was being heisted from him. He was to accompany his troopers to a remote location, as of yet classified, and begin a new academy.

At least his work in the clone research facilities on Kamino would final pay off. What possible good could come form altering an already perfect strain of clone DNA, or fusing it to the midiclorions of a force adapt. As he pondered his plight, the com speaker above his desk announced the arrival of his brightest cadet. Instructors only dreamed of the raw and as yet untapped potential this kid possessed. Not only was he gifted intellectually and metaphysically, but he had an uncanny humbleness about his presence. He was like a rock of peace with in a society ravaged by the perpetual winds of anarchy set ablaze by this new rebellion. Allot was ridding on the shoulders of these new recruits, and the Empire needed warriors like Palin to stand for order and stability.

As Jax entered the room he was unaware of the magnitude of this summons, yet he could almost... sense.. that his young life was about to change. The sweat filled brow of his mentor filled him with an uneasy feeling of dread. Outside the commandant door stood the elite of the elect, and Palin had just gone in first. "Maybe they think we all cheated," he thought to himself, "or maybe the tests were to easy and now we are being pushed back to start over."

"Sit down cadet Jax" Captain Ando said in his pleasant bass voice. "It pleases me to inform you that you and your pod mates are to be graduated from this Academy ahead of schedule."

Standing now at rigged attention, Jax saluted his Commandant."Thank you, Sir... Not to be to forward, Sir, but my class has almost a year left. Won't that effect our overall usefulness as line officers?"

"Very to the point, aren't you Jax. As you are aware, no one has placed top honors as fast as your class, and you yourself have managed to out-pace the rest of your pod... Tell me, Palin, do you believe there is anything more that you can learn from here?"

"Sir," Palin stammered, "with all due respect, there is always something more one can learn from there superiors."

"Jax, if only we could get more pilots and officers like you into our ranks. Unfortunately, the decision was out of my hands. I am to be reassigned as well. We are to depart after your graduation commencements for a classified location. Palin, as you know, I have Ultra-Clearance. I can read almost anything that would pass in front of the Emperor's eyes himself. Yesterday, I would have told you that there was no higher classification. Today, I know that I was wrong. Not even I know what our new assignment will be, but I do know that we will be doing something important. Something of the uttermost significance for the Empire."

Edited January 27, 2008 by Palin Jax

[Palin Jax]

*reminiscing back at the cantina*

"I can almost feel the pulse of our engines as we touched down on that planet. It was, in a way, a second birth for me. I could also feel the excitement of my pod mates. Clones can think collectively in a unit, almost telepathically. You could say that is how we won the war in the first place. I looked at Denton. He was officially know as Foxtrot 351, but our handlers, more out of laziness, gave us all names... You know, come to think of it, I wonder how they all told us apart?

"As I was saying, as I looked at Denton, and we shared that moment, there was also that feeling of pause, like it was all too new for us. What where we doing out there, what was about to happen? You know, what really did happen out there changed the course of history. We, the Shadow Corps of the 501st, probably single-handedly pushed back the defeat of the Empire by at least 10 more years..."

"Thats no brag on my part either. My unit found more ... undisclosed... Rebel Locations, than all of the other branches of the Empire... Combined... If that fool Crix hadn't turned traitor, the Rebellion might never have won in the first place."

"He was there too, ya know... I spent a good deal of time with him... He was so hard-headed, and bit to heavy-handed if ya ask me. He spoke allot about justice, 'bout what the Empire was really about. But he said it was the Rebels, and not us loyalists, that had the right idea. Even then, at the onset, I could almost agree with what he was saying. You might say I was almost tempted by the same dream... For a time. Let me tell you, friend, it's always tempting to dream, and dream big, but when you do wake up, you will really find that your in this nightmare."

"Ya know, friend, you look very familiar, come to think of it. Where you there with us on that day?"

"I will always remember that first day though... I fondly call it... Zero day"

[Palin Jax]

(zero day)

Jax debarked the Theta class shuttle through the offload hatch. It was symbolical gesture as of a mother giving birth, for on that day, the formation of the Shadow Corps would occur. The planet was not more significant than any other, just some unused bushy rock floating through the void of space and time, but unbeknownst to this small band of clones, recruits, and there trainer, this would mark a bright day for the Empire.

As more Cadets departed the nest of their mother bird, they began to form ranks. The only female cadet qualified to be here, Juno, strutted tentatively in next to Palin, only briefly making eye contact. A lovely specimen of the fairer sex, she was more than mere eye candy... A class behind Jax's own, hers was the first to be made up solely of recruits rather than clones in the history of the Imperial Academy of Carida, itself not far from its infancy. This marked the current strategy of the enlarging rank and file of the Imperial Navy Command. If looks could kill, Eclipse could steal your breath away, but more to the point, she could, and would, just take your life.

Jax noted that Commandant Ando also joined the ranks. Beside him stood Crix Madine. As the group stood there, Palin noted that no one stood in the place of commander. All where equal... This confounded the young clone. Then, as an almost despairing wave came over Jax, Madine stepped forward...

"Cadets," Crix beamed, "the elect of the Empire, you have been selected for a task not many could bare. After reading carefully over your dossiers, I myself have hand chosen you for an elite branch of Imperial service. When I say elite, I understate your true worth to the cause. Men, Our system of governance has fallen under attack from gorilla like tactics that our more... senior commanders cannot combat. I believe in the old adage, you must fight fire with fire. But I want more. I want to consume these rebel scum like the core of a super Nova sun."

"I want you to know something men. I stand with you, as an equal, because I will not order a man to do a thing that I myself will not do. You might find this kind of command unsettling. Let me reassure you that I am what I wish you to become. Cadets... forward march..."

As they marched... for endless hours, Madine shared his vision with the cadets. He told them of their function, to be an undetectable thorn in the side of the vermin festering within the Galaxy. He lifted them to the notion of independent action. He cajoled them to believe His cause. In the end, a marched that would have killed almost any highly trained storm trooper left these young men and one woman more alive than they had ever been... As they put up there prefab garrison, they spoke eagerly with one another. As they shared what meager morsels of food they had brought MRE, they drank in the fresh air of hope. As they each, one by one, nodded off into sleep, they shared a commodity more precious than gold. They shared The Dream!

Edited February 1, 2008 by Palin Jax

[Palin Jax]

(Journal Entry, Cadet Jax:zero day+8)

"Well, we have completed our first week of strengthening training. I thought that our first march was a killer, but after surviving just the tier one moves alone, I think the sytha-meat they serve in our power lunches might be less bounded up than my muscles, and I think the leather of my boots might be more tender than both of those. And I thought youth basic conditioning was tough!"

"What I can't get over, or the rest of us, is how Madine is there right along side of us ever kilometer we go. He Tenacious, that one, D-manneding our respect... not by rank, but by merit. Lennox, one of my new squad mates, tells me that Commandant Madine reports only to Grand Moff Tanniel, and directly at that. Thats a big jump in the Imperial chain of command."

"Not all of my fellow Cadets like our new Commandant, however. I have noted on several occasions that some of the others speak very illy of Madine. They call him weak... a sympathizer with the seditionists. Selkirk said to me in passing that Madine was once sent on a mission to ferret out a Rebel spy net-work, not surprisingly within the Imperial Bothan network itself. At a orphanage on Sedesia , it was discovered that the Spies had been using the facility as cover for their base of operations. When the Commandant and his men were order to wipe out those in-human swine, Crix actually hesitated, even asked for the order to be rescinded. Showing even more defiance, Selkirk intoned, Crix offered to single handedly bring out the Bothans."

"Not surprisingly, but allot of my fellow Cadets see His mercy as a weakness. I am not so convinced. Sure, I can see it for both its political and social implications, true... but also, deep down in my core, I feel that it is... good. I had to dig a bit deeper to see how the rest of the story all panned out, but it flushed out like this... After Madine's Commanding Officer learned of His little rebellion there at the orphanage, he did indeed rescinded the order. He even offered the people of Sedesia some food and blankets to endure the upcoming harsh winter... In the end, ironically, I heard that the children all passed on, rather tragically too... I was unable to discover whether or nor they did indeed succeeded in capturing those Bothan Spies. It won't be that hard now, however... I've heard Sedesia is a ghost planet. Good thing our men got out of there in time before they contracted that strange plague."

Edited February 3, 2008 by Palin Jax

[Palin Jax]

(Journal Entry, Cadet Jax:zero day+27)

"I can't believe that in the short time we have been here, how much our pod has formed a cohesive unit. It' unfortunate that Eclipse has been reassigned though. I hope her future endeavors will be a testimony to the Empire and her skill. What a pilot."

"Madine gave us one hell of a speech last night. He really put himself out there, challenging in open forum our benevolent Emperor's new "Human Only" policy. I can not fathom why he would be so openly concerned though. Our unit puts the elusively reputation of the Bothans to shame, not only in tact, but also in ability. Who needs those beast faced lackeys anyway."

"Halfway through training. I hope that this is all worth it some day. I would gladly sacrifice all for my Empire, no doubt... but to be a shell of a man at the end of all this... well. Lets just say that a few rounds with a young rancor would be easier than some of our days. One fun thing though. Madine still hasn't banned bulls-eying the local fauna yet. I need all the practice I can for snipper drills. I wish I could put into words the thrill of the hunt... the patients of finding the right location... the waiting.... those little mind tricks...."

"I made pod commander again. I am not sure that it is such an honor as before though. We are bonding, no doubt, but command is not something I am looking forward too. We have formed up much smaller autonomous units now, just four strong per squad. Even with just our tight-knit squad, I am finding that our TIE/Shuttles are far to over cramped. I guess not all clones are made to think alike anymore..."

(Journal Entry, Cadet Jax:zero day+27 late entry)

"That schutta... where the hell did he find a young rancor anyway. Glad I have been doing extra snipper training, though, I sincerly doubt I will ever get that smell out of my armor..."

[Palin Jax]

(Journal Entry, Cadet Jax:zero day+61)

Graduation, if you can call it that. I was given top honors, but it is of little comfort. I was Made for this stuff. I was more impressed by the other natural cadets. Daniels came in behind me, though distantly, but none of my other pod brothers were close to Him. My brother Connor made a dismal third. I have been promoted to the rank of Lieutenant, and have command of our first pod... I have nick-named our band the Shadow Fist. It will be a joy to serve with Connor though. We are close as tank brothers go.

We are to be assigned to Sector 8. Mon Calamari. I hate the smell of fish, and the smell of slaves even worse. I hope that pep-talk Crix gave us will be enough. We depart on the morrow, so I am off to sleep.

(If any one would like to add to this story line, it opens here. I just ask that you ADD to it. I am trying to write this more like episodes in a TV series...HINT, HINT ;-) ... so that is the direction I would like this to go. And no, I am not a writer, or in any way involved with Lucas Films... Just a fan who needs Star Wars TV, and soon :-$ . So, this is your chance to make the show go your way.)

Edited February 12, 2008 by Palin Jax

[Palin Jax]

(GD+31 day, Over the skies of New Pyltomo)

"Our first assignment; we have been tasked to liquidate intellectual assets for procurement to Imperial SECINT (Secret Intelligence) agency. In other words, we are here to abduct a Biological Warfare scientist who has developed a high yield, highly contagious strain of Candorian Plague, thought extinct since the Republics Dark Ages. Our source here suggest that a crime syndicate organization known only as "Black Sun", has been working on the virus for some time, and Grand Moff Tanniel has expressed an interest in the project. That is of course to safely remove this possible threat to the Imperial Sovereignty. Black Sun has been in negotiation with the Imperial SECINT for some time now, but has recently expressed, regrettably, that they no longer have faith in the Empire's ability to properly reimburse for their many years of research, and not to mention, embarrassing failures to develop a "delivery system" for the retro virus."

"Be that as it may, no one takes anything off the table from the Empire when it comes to our citizens safety. When negotiations broke down, the chief scientist, a Bandorian by the name of Cando Ordron went underground. It is our task to recover as much of his research as possible, and to recover the said Scientist in one piece. We are the elite of the elite, the best of the brightest our universe has to offer. We will take nothing for granted. We will make no mistakes. The Empire will reign in it's mighty fists around these filthy criminals, and bring justice to these villainous scum..."

"I will lead the forward assault, but I ask for volunteers brave enough to risk all for the good of all. This may be a suicide mission, Gentleman. I ask you, are there three of you who will walk the razor edge to achieve this goal?"

[ZoL]

(Back at the cantina, I have just interupted Jax's story from a nearby table)

*To Jax* "Ya' know you are not the only Stormtrooper here, though by far the highest rank. No offence but I thought of you as Vader's lapdog, I guess I was wrong. Well, my experiance was difforent, well let's just say I didn't like how I was being treated. So I deserted. It was that simple, and yet it bothers me to this day... But I saw the evil before it consumed me, made contact with the rebellion, told them the Empire's secrets. Oh, do I remember...

(On Kashyyk, during the building of the death star)

[Journal entry]

I don't know what I am becoming. I just killed a Stormtrooper today, he was even in my class in the acadimy. Well, he had burst in on a meeting to discuss the plan, what was I to do? I don't know how I did it, I shot him, if they don't find out I'll be surprised, but I plan to be outta there before that. If I die, at least I know I did the wrong thing. I just don't know.

[end]

All I could think of was the plan, not with the fighting going on around me or anything, and each time I keep finding problems. Now, I was once an eager young cadit, following my brother into survace. But that ended in thast mission. My only and final mission. Even with fire all around me, I could not focus, I later went mad, saying I had intercepted messages I hadn't.

[Corvus]

Hey, Jax, do our stories have to relate to yours? Maybe you *or someone* should write up some rules. I think this has the potential to be like a more in-depth TIE army thread. :-)

Will

[ZoL]

Hey, Jax, do our stories have to relate to yours? Maybe you *or someone* should write up some rules. I think this has the potential to be like a more in-depth TIE army thread. :-)

Will

Yes, I agree, there does need to be some rules set...

[Palin Jax]

(Back at the cantina, I have just interupted Jax's story from a nearby table)

*To Jax* "Ya' know you are not the only Stormtrooper here, though by far the highest rank. No offence but I thought of you as Vader's lapdog, I guess I was wrong. Well, my experiance was difforent, well let's just say I didn't like how I was being treated. So I deserted. It was that simple, and yet it bothers me to this day... But I saw the evil before it consumed me, made contact with the rebellion, told them the Empire's secrets. Oh, do I remember...

(

"Don't know what you's talkin' 'bout brother... I never 'ad the pleasure o work for da Dark Lord... We' wus always in da shadows... lurkin in da background... No more dan thieves, little less horrid dan kath hounds... but we wus good..."

(Second man to Lord Slyp) "Leave him alone, can't you see the Admir... I mean the man is clearly drunk out of his mind...

(Lord Slyp, this is not fully the same character as in the TIE Army thread, because he needs to be more fluid to be in this story.)

Hey, Jax, do our stories have to relate to yours? Maybe you *or someone* should write up some rules. I think this has the potential to be like a more in-depth TIE army thread. :-)

Will

(The rules are, and they are few: That this is a story line like episodes/scenes in a movie; Although there needs to be some RPG-like interactions, it is not, nor do I wish to take it too, the level of the very awesome and magnanimous TIE army thread :-$ . It is an open story thread, as long as we add respectfully to it. I would however like this to at least work around Jax's story line most of the time, but if for character background, you must go elsewhere, then do so. Feel free, even encouraged to do the same! Please spell check. This is so that when a person is drunk, you can tell they are drunk. Oh, and one more thing; this Palin must be fluid, so please don't refer to his exploits, or any other characters for that mater, in the TIE army thread... it will get confusing :'-( )

[ZoL]

(Lord Slyp, this is not fully the same character as in the TIE Army thread, because he needs to be more fluid to be in this story.)

Thanks...

How, about this, I'll PM you one more and if you like it, I'll post it, but if you feel it's not good, I'll stop posting in this topic, also, I think the 'Drunkeness' is a good idea.

[Palin Jax]

Lieutenant Jax and his pod slunk through the dirt avenues of the wasted settlement. Little more than a ghost town, rimmed with decaying prefab settlers slowly being enveloped in foliage, Bando was on the verge of being all but forgotten. Skeletons lined the rows of burned out transports where people had falling over and died in their final attempt to escape the ravages of the plague. Forms holding tiny, brittle bones of infants, pairs of skeleton became intertwined, the victims at least together in eternity. Safe in their darkened reflec helmets, still the terror of this grim visage could be clear seen to take its effects on the Shadow Fist.

Moved with a rare case of empathy and pity, Jax covered the remains of what appeared to be a young women clutching the contents of her belly, with its yet-formed skull almost looking up into the eye sockets of it's long dead mother. "What could have caused all this", Jax thought within his mind, "and why would anyone want to repeat this tragic loss. No being deserves this fate. All the more reason to keep this weapon from Black Sun... and probably their likely research funder, the Rebel Alliance."

Just then, a sudden movement caught Jax's eye. No more than a flash, but quickly it disappeared into a building... "Stop!" Jax ordered. His men, now aware of the situation, brought their blasters to the ready. "After them CC-2210... we'll follow around. AO-7012, track right around the perimeter. And ...."

(If anyone would like to jump in... now is a good chance... I will post tomorrow with the rest)

[Palin Jax]

Just curious. 2 questions. Would anyone like me to continue writing? And a bit of a snag. I have kind of rethought Palin's Charater a bit. I would have to start from scratch? This would basicly wipe out the existing story, but I have gotten more into the whole Clone Commando, Shadow Trooper thing. So, if anyone cared for this post, please answer with positive feedback. Also, consider contributing. Thanks!