[OL Ch1b] - Strange shores

[robinnilsson403]

After some hard weeks at sea, land has finally been sighted! But through the spyglass the lookout saw something strange, a strange shape. When Lan heard of this he demanded ha would be put ashore there as soon as possible to examine what the shape was, and how it was built.

An officer on the ship appointed one soldier to follow as an bodyguard. There was not much more room left in the small boat, but Gawyn jumped in when it was lowered into the water.

"Gawyn! This could be extremely dangerous!" Lan said.

"But I want to see it! I didn't come here to stay on the ship all along."

"You came here to do as I tell you. You stay in the boat until I tell you to come ashore. We don't know what's out there in the forest! And you," Lan said, talking to the bodyguard, "you do as I tell you too. No firing of that rifle unless it is absolutely necessary!"

The helmsman slowly got them closer to land. A wind blew, but not much moved in the forest.

"Helmsman, you and the boy wait here for us. Lets go!"

"Boy..." Gawyn muttered. "At least I brought a game game of snakes and foxes. Do you want to play?" he asked the helmsman.

"I know you are my bodyguard, but I go first. And do as I tell you!" Lan said to the bodyguard again. "Now, what is that... And how was it made..."

[TitusV]

Everything looks great, but the statue seems a bit flat to me

[Gideon]

Nice entry, once again welcome to EB!

In this build, I think the tree to the right looks best

Everything looks great, but the statue seems a bit flat to me

Maybe some green (olive green?) on top as well to make it look older?

The background is ok, but I think it would have looked better if it was further back and less wrinkled. A smooth transition from the horizontal part under the build to a vertical background behind the build usually makes the background look best. It is also nice for the presentation to include a picture of the whole build without cropping any edge.

[Bregir]

Cool build and story.

There are a lot of great details, like the waves, driftwood and that beautiful tree on the right!

While you could have made the statue more elaborate, I think it looks fittingly simple for a native culture. And adding some olivegreen on the statue could be an option, but who is to say it is old?

[Captain Dee]

This is a good beach landing scene. I like the angle of the shore and the trans-clear bits are realistic for the surf. But it seems odd for the sailor to still be rowing, unless the others jumped out first and waded in. The right side tree is great and the others are okay, but more of them (or more undergrowth) would give a better jungle look. The statue is unique and the driftwood is a good idea. Good work.

[Captain Green Hair]

Ah yes, the Oleanders seek out friendly natives to plunder. That statue is smiling!

The landscape and foliage is quite nice, but I agree with the others that you need to work on your statue building skills.

[robinnilsson403]

Sorry for not responding earlier. All work and no play makes me a dull boy...

Everything looks great, but the statue seems a bit flat to me

Ah yes, the Oleanders seek out friendly natives to plunder. That statue is smiling!

The landscape and foliage is quite nice, but I agree with the others that you need to work on your statue building skills.

Thanks! I made the statue with the flatness in mind. It will come later in the story. ;)

Nice entry, once again welcome to EB!

In this build, I think the tree to the right looks best

Maybe some green (olive green?) on top as well to make it look older?

The background is ok, but I think it would have looked better if it was further back and less wrinkled. A smooth transition from the horizontal part under the build to a vertical background behind the build usually makes the background look best. It is also nice for the presentation to include a picture of the whole build without cropping any edge.

Thanks G!

I'm lacking parts in olive green (plates and tiles!), and putting in some of the same green as the ground made it look strange.

I have a small "photo tent", packed away since I recently moved. I had to take what I could, and it turned out to be an unironed bedsheet. And I was in a hurry to get it the photos taken before the short week was over. I hope the photos will get better in the photo tent, and I'll try to include a better overview shot in the future. :)

Cool build and story.

There are a lot of great details, like the waves, driftwood and that beautiful tree on the right!

While you could have made the statue more elaborate, I think it looks fittingly simple for a native culture. And adding some olivegreen on the statue could be an option, but who is to say it is old?

Thanks for the comments! A lack of colours in my palette, but it will expand. :)

This is a good beach landing scene. I like the angle of the shore and the trans-clear bits are realistic for the surf. But it seems odd for the sailor to still be rowing, unless the others jumped out first and waded in. The right side tree is great and the others are okay, but more of them (or more undergrowth) would give a better jungle look. The statue is unique and the driftwood is a good idea. Good work.

Thank you! About the rowboat, my idea was that he tried to hold the boat at the shore, putting the oars against the bottom to stabilize it. Now when I look at it, it just looks odd when the oars are on top of the water like that.

I didn't want to get too much overhang (or am I misinterpretating the rules..?). I wanted to include more foliage in the trees, but again, lack of parts.

Thank you all for your comments! They will help me build (and photograph) better in the future. :)

Hopefully my ch1a, built at the same time, will be published tomorrow.

[SilentWolf]

I love the story line. The bushy tree on the right was cool, but it seemed to conflict with the palm trees on the right. I like the clam shells on the shore. It added a true seashore element.