RoryoCox Posted June 23, 2010 (edited) Here is my entry to the epic scenes small category. I am replacing the Pit of Carkoon. It shows the evacuation of Bespin, Han in Carbonite and the most memorable scene, Luke and Vader's battle. This MOC has a playset feel so some of the proportions are out. I would say it is built to be like the 10188 Death Star. The bottom level is designed so you can see the slope, but not making it too dark as I feel it would suppress the general feel of the MOC. I hope you liked my entry. Please comment on how I can improve it. Edited June 25, 2010 by Burman Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
prateek Posted June 23, 2010 Wow. This is great. Many great scenes in one! Although it's sad to see your Carkoon gone, this is better! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
KimT Posted June 23, 2010 Nice entry Burman. Best of luck. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Darth Yogi Posted June 23, 2010 really nice i like the 3 scenes in one good job Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
XimenaPaulina Posted June 24, 2010 Although your previous entry was already good, this one is even much better! It's great to see you managed to put 3 scenes in your entry. Among the three levels, I like the middle one the best. I love the clever build of the stairs and the semi-circle platform. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
def Posted June 24, 2010 You did a good job. If I were to tweak it, in the bottom scene I'd add 1) a rail around Vader (maybe a flexi tube with straight droid arms) and those three tubes (http://thestranded.files.wordpress.com/2009/10/i-am-your-father.jpg) and 2) drop out the bottom, either leave it empty or make it very deeper. It misses the feeling of hanging in space. But, the top two work well Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
XimenaPaulina Posted June 24, 2010 BTW, just some very minor observations, I could be wrong here, but did Vader remove his cloak on that scene? I also noticed Boba doesn't have his shoulder cloak. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Mofo Jones Posted June 24, 2010 Good idea and build, but I have one slight nitpick: Luke still has his right hand and he's out on the gantry. He didn't move out there until after it was cut off. Might want to have Luke hanging on by his left hand. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Special K Posted June 24, 2010 That is Fabulous much better than the previous one. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
brickfoot Posted June 24, 2010 I love how the stairs are at an angle. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
The Legonater Posted June 24, 2010 Nice work! Is it just me, or do half of the entries have more than one scene? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
XimenaPaulina Posted June 25, 2010 Nice work! Is it just me, or do half of the entries have more than one scene? Yeah, I noticed that too. Maybe not half, but a lot of the entries do have multiple scenes. I guess the more scenes the more chances of winning. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
ThatGuyWithTheBricks Posted June 25, 2010 BTW, just some very minor observations, I could be wrong here, but did Vader remove his cloak on that scene? I also noticed Boba doesn't have his shoulder cloak. Yes, he did have his cape, which was being blown by fake-wind. Burman, I think that you kind of reached to far with this one. You tried to do a lot, but ended up ignoring features leaving it with obvious flaws (the bottom level especially). It has potential, but not execution. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
XimenaPaulina Posted June 25, 2010 Yes, he did have his cape, which was being blown by fake-wind. Burman, I think that you kind of reached to far with this one. You tried to do a lot, but ended up ignoring features leaving it with obvious flaws (the bottom level especially). It has potential, but not execution. I have to agree, every detail is important, no matter how small it may be. Vader without his cape just doesn't look right, so maybe you could put it back. Don't forget also the shoulder cloak of Boba. Good for you, you have the new Boba minifig (I don't have one yet) so pls. dress him well. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
RoryoCox Posted June 25, 2010 Thanks for the advice everybody. I have changed a few things going by your advice and have added the bottom picture. I hope you like it now. Anything else that I can do please tell me. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
The Legonater Posted June 25, 2010 Ah! That's better! Nice edits! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
XimenaPaulina Posted June 26, 2010 Thanks for the advice everybody. I have changed a few things going by your advice and have added the bottom picture. I hope you like it now. Anything else that I can do please tell me. No problem Burman, it's great to hear you really take the criticisms constructively to improve your MOC(s). For that alone, you're already a winner. Though the competition is really tough, I hope you do well in the contest. Good luck my friend! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
RoryoCox Posted June 26, 2010 Thank You. I hope to do well as well Share this post Link to post Share on other sites