kahir88 Posted February 21, 2019 (edited) A mercenary's story: Part VI (epilogue) If you missed, here is the previous parts: A mercenary's story: Part I A mercenary's story: Part II A mercenary's story: Part III A mercenary's story: Part IV A mercenary's story: Part V Home sweet home! Conrad returned to his homeland after so many years. While he was away, the local lord gave a name to this region of Avalonia. They call it now Deep Garden, after the place is a bit under the sea level, and full with orchards. Conrad arrived at Rosebury, the biggest town in the region, where he and his father went on markets day. He left his followers here, and he went, to find his parents home. He found it, or at least the ruins of it. He didn't find anyone there, just a sole tombstone. So he went to the nearby farm, maybe, someone could explain what happened here. The neighbor was new too, he bought the farm from the previous owner, Conrad was glad, cause he used to steal apples from that neighbor. But, he wasn't so informative, he told Conrad what he knew about his family. The last three or four winter was really harsh. And the crops wasn't much, in those years. The lord, who named the region, eventually run out of money, after the exports, to keep his subjects fed, and to try grown new crops. One day he disappeared without any trace, some says, he traveled to Kaliphlin, to start over his fortune again. And he left everything behind. The soldiers without their payment left the region, or in the worst case, they went rogue and started pillaging the remaining supplies what we had. And Conrad's family was one of the victims. He heard about two male corpses. When Conrad asked about his mother and sisters and the tombstone, the neighbor knew little about them. The tombstone was raised for a women, maybe for his mother. And her sisters were married to someones Conrad was shocked, he blamed himself for he wasn't here, when the bandits attacked his home. But he quickly realized, he couldn't do anything to save his family, and it's sure, he would be dead too. He returned to Rosebury, to his men. They didn't go for the promised adventure, what Conrad told them. They spend the night here, Conrad wasn't able to sleep, many thoughts harassed him during the night. He felt bad, for what happened here, while he was away, but maybe this was his fate. Maybe every action what he made, lead him to this. Maybe it was the time, to show the world, what did he learn. The next day they armed themselves and rushed into the town hall. The mayor of the town become pale as snow when he saw the armed warriors walking inside in the room, demanding his presence. But Conrad quickly told him, what is this all about, and offered him his help. In the afternoon, all of Deep Garden knew about the new martial law, which was lead by Conrad. He promised, to take the position, as Protector of Deep Garden. He also promised, he would solve the bandit problem, and find a way, so Deep Garden can prosper again! ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- And this is the end of Conrad's backstory. I really enjoyed the writing, the building, to show you guys, how did I imagine my sigfigs story, and how did he become part of Historica. It took longer than I expected, challenges, CCC, real-life things, but it is finally done! For my next builds and stories, now you know Conrad the Sly, but not yet know the stories of his closes friends: Zan, Lok, and Boris. They all have their little backstories, how they joined to Conrad's army. There will be more twists, more action, more dark humor, and of course, more Builds! Edited February 21, 2019 by kahir88 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
zoth33 Posted February 22, 2019 Nice to see the backstory here. I like the story so far. The ground is interesting I like the use of the brown seaweed piece. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
W Navarre Posted February 22, 2019 Nice to hear that you will keep going! Pretty good work on the scene of a wall by the path, is his sword placed through his cape? Does that harm the cape? Nice epilogue. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
kahir88 Posted February 22, 2019 (edited) No, I don't think, it would harm the cape. I use this a lot, put the cape on the figure, then simply put through the sword in the smaller hole. Edited February 22, 2019 by kahir88 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
en_zoo Posted February 24, 2019 ... and a nice epilogue! It's nice to know how Conrad ended up back in Deep Gardens (and nice name choice + explanation for the city). Oh and there's one more thing: still a bit too many commas, but I feel like your stories flow better now. Not sure if you've made a progress there, or if it's me getting used to the way you used them No, seriously: I've been looking at them a little better and sometimes it looks as if you were using a German structure. Unfortunately, I don't know much about Hungarian, so I cannot tell you much more [I'm a language teacher and German is my 5th, so all this is kind of second nature for me and really cannot help it... I just find it interesting]. Whatever the case, I enjoyed reading your story more than in the past, which is the important thing, right? Looking foward for more! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
kahir88 Posted February 24, 2019 Thanks, @en_zoo. I find an app, it's Grammarly, it helps me, with the commas and words. Sadly, it doesn't help, with the structural order of the words. :S I'm sure, the problem is the Hungarian languages, I heard from many sources about how hard is. For being my native languages, I don't feel it hard, but it seems, it's hard to translate my Hungarian thoughts, to English. I stop many times, and start thinking over my story: "damn, is that correct?" But anyway, thanks, And I think it is you, who got used to my writings! :D But I'm also trying to be better. Also, Grover helped me out a few weeks ago. Spoiler I'm not brave enough to tell this, but my English teacher always told us, the English language is a bit dumb, compared to Hungarian It's like: "Me Tarzan, you Jane". So we have to lower our communication level to that level. :D Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
en_zoo Posted February 24, 2019 1 minute ago, kahir88 said: Thanks, @en_zoo. I find an app, it's Grammarly, it helps me, with the commas and words. Sadly, it doesn't help, with the structural order of the words. :S I'm sure, the problem is the Hungarian languages, I heard from many sources about how hard is. For being my native languages, I don't feel it hard, but it seems, it's hard to translate my Hungarian thoughts, to English. I stop many times, and start thinking over my story: "damn, is that correct?" But anyway, thanks, And I think it is you, who got used to my writings! :D But I'm also trying to be better. Also, Grover helped me out a few weeks ago. Reveal hidden contents I'm not brave enough to tell this, but my English teacher always told us, the English language is a bit dumb, compared to Hungarian It's like: "Me Tarzan, you Jane". So we have to lower our communication level to that level. :D hahaha! well he was probably referring to English grammar, which is indeed the easiest to learn in the EU. On the contrary, English vocabulary is one of the richest in the world. But anyways... I'm a non-native speaker, yet I taught English professionally in the past - let me know if I can help in any way Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Henjin_Quilones Posted March 4, 2019 Good job getting the story told! The build itself is simple, but gets the job done. If I were to critique it, I would suggest that the ground would look better with smaller chunks of dark tan and brown to make it more uniform, rather than the large wedges of each. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
soccerkid6 Posted April 9, 2019 Solid conclusion to your background story for Conrad. The low stone wall looks great especially with the vines growing over it Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Krol Zmija Sebastian Posted September 27, 2019 @kahir88 sounds like just an Enforcer. Some may even call their crusade one for the "Dark Swordsman". Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Eoin Wallace Posted September 28, 2019 The ruins look good, and the story is well written too! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
