Bodi Posted March 19, 2018 The son of trot sounds in the deserted streets of suburb of Astrapi. A carriage stopped at the gates of the newly built Military Academy. - "Ah, here she is!" The headmaster of the academy, proud as he is, could not help shuddering at the sight of this cart carrying the Courteville's coat of arms. A valet hastened to run to the gates and helped the lady to get off the carriage. Madame de Courteville crossed the court, flanked by ranks of cadets and naval officers. - "Madame la Duchesse, I hope the trip was pleasant. Would you care to partake of some refreshment?" Asked politely the headmaster. - "Oh, monsieur de Torchon, you are too kind, but I think we put aside the courtoisie for a moment, you know our majesty has orderred personnaly the construction of this arsenal. Ah, I forgot, this academy thingy, you know it's the first military school in the new world, and I hope you will not fail us." A big drop of sweat slid down the cheek of de Torchon, he knew quite well the reputation of this Madame de Courteville, and she shall not make his life easy unless she got a satisfactory response. He began to search his pockets for that piece of paper but came out with empty hands, par Poseidon, he must left it in his old clothes. He had to improvise. - "Hum, well...madame...de Courteville...you see..."Stammered de Torchon. - "Monsieur, I hope you won't make me listen your harangue in the tropical heat?" Said la Duchesse with a grin. - "Mille pardon, madame, you are absolutely right, could you do me the honor to follow me to my office, a detailed report is waiting for you." The poor headmaster was quite relieved when he heard the protest. - "Volontier." The Duchesse was ready to go enter building, when she raised her eyes and her gaze focused on these lime-green plates. - "Quite an exquisite taste, where did you find these green plates?" She asked ironically while frowning her eyebrows. - "They are made of quartzites that exist in abundance in this region, a quite unique color, isn't it? But to be honest, Astrapi is a small settlement, we were low on budget and we had to do with what we already got." Replied de Torchon, seemingly quite proud of his work. - "Very well." Exclamed la Duchesse, then, in a whisper, she said to herself,"I shall see to have them replaced." Thanks for viewing. C&C are welcome! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Captain Genaro Posted March 19, 2018 (edited) A very nice build, Bodi, and the story was quite enjoyable. I especially liked your explanation for the lime green tiles. I do hope to see the Duchesse character developed some more as I would like to know what makes her such an intimidating figure. The building is well done with just enough parts out of place to suggest mild weathering, and your trees are a nice touch. The carriage is nice, too, and must have one heck of a driver to control the horse without any reins. For improvements, the ground could use some work. On the path, it looks odd to have the tan pieces sitting above the grey. It gives the appearance of dirt being placed on top of the paving stones. Edited March 19, 2018 by Captain Genaro Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Roadmonkeytj Posted March 19, 2018 Oddly enough I rather like the green ... Doesnt seem fitting for a government facility however im sure they will be replaced soon lol. The story is well written and easy to follow. I do like the architectural elements in the building. My criticism is the sulky i like elements of it but feel like it comes up short ... Just a little bit more would have put it on par with the building and grounds Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Bart Posted March 19, 2018 Nice build Bodi, I like the wall/fence and the gate. but would soldiers standing in formation at a formal event be there with a pack? I could understand that it would be like that if they are ready to march out or something. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Keymonus Posted March 19, 2018 Very nice Academy @Bodi! The facade and the facade/roof transition is great, I especially like the little columns surronding the central window! I do not know how the inspection will go, but the lined soldiers, the facade decorated with flags and the entrance gate surely make a certain effect! 19 hours ago, Bodi said: "Quite an exquisite taste, where did you find these green plates?" A fine lime touch! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Bodi Posted March 21, 2018 On 2018/3/19 at 11:19 AM, Captain Genaro said: A very nice build, Bodi, and the story was quite enjoyable. I especially liked your explanation for the lime green tiles. I do hope to see the Duchesse character developed some more as I would like to know what makes her such an intimidating figure. The building is well done with just enough parts out of place to suggest mild weathering, and your trees are a nice touch. The carriage is nice, too, and must have one heck of a driver to control the horse without any reins. For improvements, the ground could use some work. On the path, it looks odd to have the tan pieces sitting above the grey. It gives the appearance of dirt being placed on top of the paving stones. Thank you CG for your comments on the building, it's my biggest land based build so far and it's also the first time I build a carriage, I'll try to do better next time. And you'll surely see that Duchesse again. On 2018/3/19 at 12:14 PM, Roadmonkeytj said: Oddly enough I rather like the green ... Doesnt seem fitting for a government facility however im sure they will be replaced soon lol. The story is well written and easy to follow. I do like the architectural elements in the building. My criticism is the sulky i like elements of it but feel like it comes up short ... Just a little bit more would have put it on par with the building and grounds Thank you! The sulky was of light construction because it was pulled by a single horse, didn't want to overload the poor beast too much. On 2018/3/20 at 12:06 AM, Bart said: Nice build Bodi, I like the wall/fence and the gate. but would soldiers standing in formation at a formal event be there with a pack? I could understand that it would be like that if they are ready to march out or something. Glad you like my build. As for the soldiers, I agree with you, they should have leave their packs in the dormitory. On 2018/3/20 at 3:44 AM, Keymonus said: Very nice Academy @Bodi! The facade and the facade/roof transition is great, I especially like the little columns surronding the central window! I do not know how the inspection will go, but the lined soldiers, the facade decorated with flags and the entrance gate surely make a certain effect! A fine lime touch! Thank you Keymonus! I guess the outcome of inspection depends largely on the refreshment provided by the headmaster. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
