SpaceJoey86 Posted March 4, 2018 Jonah had done well on his last trading run, so before he set off on another he invested in some real estate. The previous owner had a terrible harvest, but Jonah was convinced the gods would favour him over a heretic. DSCN8389 DSCN8395 DSCN8398 Looks horrible from the other sides but if you really want them... Spoiler DSCN8399 DSCN8401 DSCN8400 Please tell me what you think. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kwatchi Posted March 4, 2018 (edited) Without knowing what bricks you have available, I normally worry about critiquing. It can easily devolve into ‘buy bricks’ which is never helpful. But here goes anyway. i) I like the fact you made the effort to break up the wall with textured bricks. It shows you’ve learned a technique. ii) The carrot rows are bang on and a good representation. Potential improvement for next time: iii) Everything is aligned squarely - this is a “trap” I fall into to. For rural/natural settings, if you can build parts of out of alignment, they look more convincing. In this case, if you had built the house on a plate floor, then set it down on top of your ground at a slight angle (using 2x1 jumper plates for example), the scene would look more natural. This would likely mean your ground would be 2 plates thick. iv) If you have the bricks, try and experiment with a non-rectangular ground base. If gives things a more organic look. Prof Thaum’s recent grog shop is a great example for this. v) The roof was the low point for me. Once again, I don’t know what you have on hand, but I would have gone with a different colour: black or red (ceramic tile). Ideally you’d want it textured, if you can. A great rule of thumb is natural surface is stud showing while manufactured surface is tiled or textured. vi) Last thing: why no windows? I still like the moc. It’s a cute little carrot farm. And I hope I don’t come across too critical; I’m just passing the same advice I got when I started. Edited March 4, 2018 by Kwatchi Damn autocorrect Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Darnok Posted March 4, 2018 A quite simple build, but not bad. I think Kwatchi has made all relevant points. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
SpaceJoey86 Posted March 5, 2018 19 hours ago, Drunknok said: A quite simple build, but not bad. I think Kwatchi has made all relevant points. Thanks. 22 hours ago, Kwatchi said: Without knowing what bricks you have available, I normally worry about critiquing. It can easily devolve into ‘buy bricks’ which is never helpful. But here goes anyway. i) I like the fact you made the effort to break up the wall with textured bricks. It shows you’ve learned a technique. ii) The carrot rows are bang on and a good representation. Potential improvement for next time: iii) Everything is aligned squarely - this is a “trap” I fall into to. For rural/natural settings, if you can build parts of out of alignment, they look more convincing. In this case, if you had built the house on a plate floor, then set it down on top of your ground at a slight angle (using 2x1 jumper plates for example), the scene would look more natural. This would likely mean your ground would be 2 plates thick. iv) If you have the bricks, try and experiment with a non-rectangular ground base. If gives things a more organic look. Prof Thaum’s recent grog shop is a great example for this. v) The roof was the low point for me. Once again, I don’t know what you have on hand, but I would have gone with a different colour: black or red (ceramic tile). Ideally you’d want it textured, if you can. A great rule of thumb is natural surface is stud showing while manufactured surface is tiled or textured. vi) Last thing: why no windows? I still like the moc. It’s a cute little carrot farm. And I hope I don’t come across too critical; I’m just passing the same advice I got when I started. Don't worry about critiquing, if no one said anything I would never improve much. 1) wow techniques... 2)Great. 3) I did a slightly less aligned build previously (not much) and it was hard to do with my bricks BUT i will try again with jumper plates in the future. 4) This is what i meant in 3. 5) I would have liked to do a shade of red (not the normal one) but lacked the parts. I liked the roof personally. Maybe some detailing like this would improve it? 6) What windows would you/anyone else recommend. I couldn't find any that were 'right' Critical is good. Thanks for being so honest and helpful. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Roadmonkeytj Posted March 6, 2018 I think it portrayed the farm well. I am glad you chose to keep the carrots underground as that is something that has bothered me with other carrot builds ... I do agree an irregular base and the building slightly askew would do wonders. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites