EpsilonEta Posted July 22, 2015 (edited) Location: A06 – Guinevere Tags: Spying, Military, Building, Spaceship / Airplane The story continue right after “Minor setback”. I reuse a lot from previous builds so I put a picture of the new stuff in the spoiler. Previously: Agent Raven has been sent to deal with the increasingly annoying Dust Demons. She infiltrate the organization and discover there is a traitor within Kawashita who supply the demons with information. She manage to slip this intel to agent Koro hoping he can find and stop the traitor. Now she's been invited to the Dust Demons main base on Guinevere to meet with there leader, the Commodore. But before she could report to Kawashita she was taken captive. Scorched earth So, what do you think. Is she a spy? My instincts say no. She didn't react to me using “honor” in such a casual way earlier. A kawashita agent would at least have flinched slightly. Nether did she become defensive when I said I could spot traitors. Through out the interrogation I felt she was honest. The lie detectors have made the same conclusion. Ok, bring her out. I apologize for the bad first impression but we had to make sure you wasn't a spy. What?! Are you saying this was a test? I... Yes. It's standard procedure for new officers. We need to be careful. Also, we've had multiple setbacks and suspicious data accesses recently. Our guy in Kawashita is convinced they sent someone to investigate us but then that's like saying MANTIS employees will carry weapons. You did all this just to test my loyalty! I want to punch you but my fist hurt to much. Well, that's the spirit we are locking for. You can take out on the Kawa-scum on Aeristus. You'll be leaving as soon as you gotten a shower and a new uniform. With all respect sir. I fell like I want to rest for a while. You can rest while you fly to Aeristus. Yes sir. Raven is evaluating the situation. So it was a test, I figured as mush. The first meeting, the questions. And why else bring me here, to there main base. Had they known I was a spy I'd be dead on Marphacia. Now then? I have no time to determine the base's exact location. I might at least get a radio with my new gear but no way of reaching Koro. He may not have found the traitor yet. Can't help that, I won't be back here for a while. During the shower she think through various strategies for multiple scenarios. When she's done she get new clothes and the captain is waiting to walk her to the hangar. No chanse of slipping away. Why didn't I get an armor and gun? Don't you trust me? I passed your test. You will get a captains armor like mine when we get to Aeristus. It's lighter than standard armor and believe me, you don't want any armor on for a few days after what you been through. Seriously, I'm surprised you held out as good as you did. I cried like a baby and could hardly walk after. It wasn't that bad really. I mean, he looked scary but didn't have mush skills. I've had far worse in school. What!? What school was that? Special agent training. I'm the spy you are looking for. While the captain look like a big question mark Raven take his gun and jam it in his face. Raven make sure he's unconscious an then go to the cockpit door. Help! He just fell down, I think he have an alien disease, he's face is all red! The pilot comes out to help. To not risk setting of alarms by shooting or killing she knock down the pilot with the gun. Raven go to the cockpit. Yes! It have a position system. Sector Q5 coordinates 23 18 - 42 65, that's MANTIS territory but close enough for a stealthy raid. She set the radio to emergency kawashita frequency as the drop ship travel to the landing pad. After giving the location to HQ I can just fly towards Aeristus and the Demons wont suspect a thing. Just have to avoid using words they might be scanning for. Humm. No manual input of ID codes. Well KG is a “spy company”. There personnel should understand basic codes or at least forward message to someone that does. This is your local weather report and do we have sensational news. It's raining on Guinevere. I say it again, it's raining on Guinever, sector Q5 coo... This is AD-38. Identify yourself. I'm a weather reporter, please call home and tell them... A what? This is a... Shut up! ...Kawashita channel. How did... Quick! Call HQ! Dust Demon main base in sector Q5, 23 18 - 42 65. Confirm! Hello? D** it. No signal. They are jamming communications. Huu, spy company my megablocks, she thinks angrily. They probably didn't get the full coordinates. I'll have to light the way for them. She stop the drop ship, puts on the captains armor and run back to the hangar. No one here yet. How clumsy of them to store awesomnium next to fuel tanks. What if someone dropped a grenade. Lets see 60 seconds should be enough. Ooooppps, I droped it. Better get out. This explosion got to be visible from the entire sector. She runs to the Commodores large door hoping he's still there. 10 seconds left. Wait a little. Now. Kawashita is attacking! What? We heard an alarm of unauthorized transmission but... Raven count down in her head 3.. 2.. They are jamming all... BHOOOM!! That was the hangar! You two check out. I will make sure the Commodore is safe. BANG! What was... BANG! Raven enter the com room but no Commodore. She try to access the data in the com desk. Locked. I better call and see if HQ got my message. Oh, cancel jamming. This is agent Raven ID 137955. Did you get the coordinates for the base? This is KD-11. We only received a sector and sent a large search party. I just saw a large explosion and a smoke pillar. Heading there now. You've been searching the entire sector?! MANTIS will attack... We will destroy the base before MANTIS can gets here. No! We need a ground team and some technicians. The data here could... I have my orders, the base is about to be rubble. But I'm in here looking for there leader. Give me a few minutes and... No can do. MANTIS fighters are on the way. If you don't get out, know that you died with honor. Ohh, that's a relief, she thought sarcastically as she started to rip out a few hard drives from the communication desk. I can get away with the Wasp on the landing pad. Maybe even pursue the commodore. When she get out she see a distinct silhouette in the sky. Crap! That's a KB-66 heavy assault bomber. And posibly another one in the distance. They really want this base destroyed. Lets hope the comander armor's jet pack is as good as the standard one. The end (for a while) Raven and Koro will continue the fight against the Dust Demons and search for the Commodore but for now I'm on vacation and the time I have will go to the challenge. Maybe Raven go to the KGMA for some training but she's more likely to scout or sabotage off screen. Also, the “megablocks” wasn't an auto correct. I think it's a good curse and I deliberately wrote it like that. Lastly, I have to try write less story in the future. It's fun but take a lot of time. For the judges: This is all the new builds (minus some explosive effects). More pictures of the mini KB-66 "Flying Dragon”. The original was made by aeralure Bomb mode The base after the first round of bombs. Extra pictures of the bathroom Hey! Why am I still in here? shhh, stop breaking the fourth wall. It's a meta section. And you wont get extra points for fanservice. Edited July 22, 2015 by EpsilonEta Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
shmails Posted July 23, 2015 Great work, I am very impressed with the amount of work it takes to make a storyline like this. The fuel tanks are my favorite part, but there is so much going on it is hard to comment on all of it. I love the use of Megablocks as a universal curse word, and I think this may be the first build with full nudity in AG! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
NuckElBerg Posted July 23, 2015 (edited) Heh, I felt I had to read through the entire story as one before reading this, and, well... it's a great one, but from a build and a story perspective! I think it's a great combination of regular and micro-scale builds (I especially enjoyed your micro-version of Aera's bomber, which was just gorgeous and instantly recognizable ), and the story is both engaging and realistically-feeling. Great job! Edited July 23, 2015 by NuckElBerg Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Dannylonglegs Posted July 24, 2015 (edited) Wow, EpsilotEta.... thus is stunningly gorgeous! Every scene is spectacular, from the attractive greebling, to the micro ships... it's all excellent... and of course, the story is exquisite! I really loved reading your story, and hope to read more of your adventure in the future! I think this may be the first build with full nudity in AG! Hey! That's only because I was talked out of it. all of Octan saw those pics... ~ Insectoid Aristocrat Edited July 24, 2015 by Dannylonglegs Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
mccoyed Posted July 24, 2015 Your best yet, Ep. This story is like a mini-movie with all the drama, action, twists and turns. And yeah, even a shower scene! I'll have to get Koro in a shower or chemical vat or something to even the genders! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
EpsilonEta Posted July 24, 2015 Thank you. I'm happy you liked the story (en some even read it again). I like writing storys but this is more like directing a movie. ”Casting” the minifigs for deferent roles, building sets and photografing sceans. It toke way more time then I had guessed. (Should have gone with the action version with Raven killing the guards in the com rome while the Commodore escapes throu a secret door) I'm going to try skipping weeks now and making smaler builds with short storys in the future (lets see how long it take before another mastodont arch shows up) Great work, I am very impressed with the amount of work it takes to make a storyline like this. The fuel tanks are my favorite part, but there is so much going on it is hard to comment on all of it. I love the use of Megablocks as a universal curse word, and I think this may be the first build with full nudity in AG! Thanks. I personaly like the mikro bomber but then I prefere advanced technics over estetic. Heh, I felt I had to read through the entire story as one before reading this, and, well... it's a great one, but from a build and a story perspective! I think it's a great combination of regular and micro-scale builds (I especially enjoyed your micro-version of Aera's bomber, which was just gorgeous and instantly recognizable ), and the story is both engaging and realistically-feeling. Great job! Thank you. (did you re read the guinevere story or the whole Dust Demon one?) Nice to know my storys are apreciated. The bomber was one of the first things I made as I had a mikro base to destroy. Liked the shape of the KB-66 when I first saw it. Wow, EpsilotEta.... thus is stunningly gorgeous! Every scene is spectacular, from the attractive greebling, to the micro ships... it's all excellent... and of course, the story is exquisite! I really loved reading your story, and hope to read more of your adventure in the future! Hey! That's only because I was talked out of it. all of Octan saw those pics... ~ Insectoid Aristocrat Is there a nudety policy I wasn't avare of I can censour the pictures if someone is offended Your best yet, Ep. This story is like a mini-movie with all the drama, action, twists and turns. And yeah, even a shower scene! I'll have to get Koro in a shower or chemical vat or something to even the genders! And something for cyborg/robo lovers to Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
SpacerSteve Posted July 24, 2015 Your story has been a fun one to read. I really like how you combine the micro scale and minifig scale. That Kawashita bomber is pretty cool too. It kind of reminds me of an eldar Vampire if you are familiar with 40k. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Big Sal Posted July 24, 2015 Nice conclusion to your great story! The bomber is awesome! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Dannylonglegs Posted July 24, 2015 (edited) Is there a nudety policy I wasn't avare of I can censour the pictures if someone is offended. Octan has a strict no nudity or drinking on the job policy. But no, there's no rule. Someone looking at my WIP pictures for this scene though it was wierd, so I changed it. ~Insectoid Aristocrat Edited July 24, 2015 by Dannylonglegs Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
LittleJohn Posted July 24, 2015 Nice builds! I really like the fuel tanks Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Mike S Posted July 25, 2015 You have a really great story going on! And some really great builds too! I especially like your micro of Aeralure's bomber... instantly recognizable! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
pombe Posted July 26, 2015 This is absolutely one of my entries for AG so far. I've read it so many times now. What a fantastic story. Not only is it well written, but it is well composed and story-boarded, and it reads like a comic book or feels like i'm watching scenes from a movie. Thank you so much for taking the time to write and present all this for us the way you did. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Andromedas Gates Posted July 29, 2015 The judges awarded you 4 points. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
EpsilonEta Posted July 29, 2015 (Sorry I didn't reply earlier, I'm on vecation) Your story has been a fun one to read. I really like how you combine the micro scale and minifig scale. That Kawashita bomber is pretty cool too. It kind of reminds me of an eldar Vampire if you are familiar with 40k. Thank you! No, I'm not familier with warhamer but I googled the craft and it's pretty simular. (but Aeralure made the bomber design) Nice conclusion to your great story! The bomber is awesome! Thanks! I like your storys a lot too. Octan has a strict no nudity or drinking on the job policy. But no, there's no rule. Someone looking at my WIP pictures for this scene though it was wierd, so I changed it. ~Insectoid Aristocrat The job of a special force agent allow for ignoring policys as long as the job gets done Your build actualy inspired my shower scene (but it's more for humor than fanservice) Nice builds! I really like the fuel tanks Thanks. You have a really great story going on! And some really great builds too! I especially like your micro of Aeralure's bomber... instantly recognizable! Nice to know the story was appreciated. (was afraid it would be too long to read) I might do more mini versons of peoples builds in the future. No need for Kawashita to have a new craft for each story This is absolutely one of my entries for AG so far. I've read it so many times now. What a fantastic story. Not only is it well written, but it is well composed and story-boarded, and it reads like a comic book or feels like i'm watching scenes from a movie. Thank you so much for taking the time to write and present all this for us the way you did. Wow! Than you! Realy nice coment (even thou you are missing an adjectiv there in the begining, but I take it's a good one ) Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Jody Meyer Posted July 29, 2015 great build, so much work done here, nice perspective view on bombing photo. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Commander Turtle Posted July 29, 2015 This was a really excellent ending. I laughed at the "You will have died with honour" part And there's a whole load of building and storytelling, one of the best of the whole game so far for story! Absolutely love that you built Aera's bomber in micro. You've outdone yourself, I look forward to the next time you do a big story. Hey! That's only because I was talked out of it. all of Octan saw those pics... What's with all the girls being nude? Someone find me fleshie legs, I have some crown jewels to air... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
aeralure Posted July 30, 2015 I hadn't seen this somehow Eta. Pretty amazing work. So many scenes and a long story. Congrats too on the first full nudity AG build! I must say though, thanks for the Hiryu micro build. When I saw it I simply could not believe it. I almost cried. It's so well done. Makes me proud to see it in action too doing what it does best! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Blackhawk STX Posted July 30, 2015 Great work, great story! Loved the Hiryu micro-build! Still looks imposing, even at that scale. Impressive! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
EpsilonEta Posted July 30, 2015 great build, so much work done here, nice perspective view on bombing photo. Thanks. I tried several angles but strait up (with unfocus of the base) worked best. But then I needed to include a extra picture of the destroyed base in the spoler. This was a really excellent ending. I laughed at the "You will have died with honour" part And there's a whole load of building and storytelling, one of the best of the whole game so far for story! Absolutely love that you built Aera's bomber in micro. You've outdone yourself, I look forward to the next time you do a big story. Thank you, Soon I'm going to translate my Swedish storys and post on mocpages. I will notify you here at AG when I do. At some point I will even do an origin story for ”Swedish Raven” that would work for "AG Raven" too. What's with all the girls being nude? Someone find me fleshie legs, I have some crown jewels to air... You could alway render that part I hadn't seen this somehow Eta. Pretty amazing work. So many scenes and a long story. Congrats too on the first full nudity AG build! I must say though, thanks for the Hiryu micro build. When I saw it I simply could not believe it. I almost cried. It's so well done. Makes me proud to see it in action too doing what it does best! Thank you! Good to know the original designer aproves I was wondering why you hadn't comented yet. Now I know and better late then never Great work, great story! Loved the Hiryu micro-build! Still looks imposing, even at that scale. Impressive! Thanks! I like building small, it's faster and more chalanging. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
