[MOC] Bionicle Toa Hicann the toa of Thunder

[Legofan225]

Hello everyone!

Okay before l start posting pictures and everything l wont to say fev things first:

1)If you don't like my MOC then don't reply at all

2)Don't post like "It's so horrible" or "Don't make any more MOC" l only want to show my MOCs for the people who are interested to see what l had done

Okay so let's get to the images in diffrent angles first l made the Toa in two versions first it's just the first version of this guy and the second version is the titan version of him:

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5)Transformation mode:

6)Jet Hicann:

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9)Size comparison :

As you can see Jet Hican is quite taller then Stormer

10)The back:

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14)Toa Hicann and his battle gear:

Storyline:

Toa Hicann was the first Toa of thunder and a leader of an ancient Toa Order.

Earlyier life:

Toa Hicann first when he was a matoran his name was Hicaz most of his past is unnoun but acording to the ancient archives of Metru Nui he lived on Artakha island as a matoran worker but later when the Great spirit Mata Nui was searching for it's protectors The spirit shawed the potencial of a true Toa in an ordinary matoran and that's in Hicaz. The Great Spirit taked him as his student and trained him to be a true Toa. Hicaz was a student to the Great Spirit and later when his training came to an end Mata Nui transformed him in to the First Toa of Thunder and then Hicaz renamed him self to Toa Hicann the Toa of thunder and Mata Nui gaved him a task to lead an ancient Toa order.(Toa Lerax toa of weather,Toa Zannry toa of rock,Toa Galix toa of gravity,Toa Khanx toa of ice and Toa Yannix toa of Forge)

Transforming into stone:

Mata Nui gave a mission to lead his Toa team to Spherus Magna to defeat an ancient evil overlord Fallen from ever in dangering the matoran universe but when they arrived on Spherus magna The great Overlord ambushed the mighty toa with his Dark Army of shadow warriors and Fallen killed Hican's fellow Toa but also banished Lerax to parallel universes to wander in them forver and Fallen somehow cursed Hicann and transformed him into to stone for the rest of his life but Hicann used a telepatchic power to call for Mata Nui for aide and the great spirit banished Fallen to the realm of shadows to be improsed there for his crimes. While Lerax was cursed to wander in paraler universes Toa Hicann ramaned as a statue for ions on the planet Spherus Magna.

Mata Nui's exile:

When the great spirit Mata Nui was bannished to Bara Magna(That once was a part of Spherus magna). Mata Nui and his new found frends found Hicann as a stone statue at the Valley of the dead . Then Mata Nui used his Kanohi Ignika to restore Hicann back to life but Mata Nui succeded but Hican lost his memory of his life life he only remembered his fight with Fallen and his transformation in a stone statue and so Hicann joined Mata Nui in completing the great spirits quest of defeating Teridax and his brotherhood.

So as you can see l made a storyline for him too but the story it's not completed becauce l'm still thinking some ideas of how he got his battle gear and the Moc is finnished but his story isn't so l hope this model is interesting to you oh and also l almost forgot :

Powers and abilities:

Hican had the power to control thunder and lighting but when he transformed into Jet Hican he gained new abilities the power to control teleportation and to control time also his lightning powers increased but all of his powers camed from his golden Kanohi Hau.

So l hope his storyline is not boring to you and if you have any advice about writing how he transformed into Jet Hican and updating him the go ahead l'm a good learner.

Edited January 25, 2014 by Legofan225

[Timeline15]

quite a cool moc. You've actually made the Carapar chest plate; a piece that has no other colours that match in, not look out of place. I do recommend you revamp the jetpack though, it looks like a mess of multi-coloured pieces.

[Legofan225]

Thank's and thank's for the advice l'm thinking of making some needed updates to the MOC and to the titan version

[xxlrocka]

No criticism allowed? Well, I've got nothing to say here except that's a nice complex build...

[bacem]

if you can accept criticism, then i'd say that the red fin on the jetpackk looks a little out of place, maybe replace them with the silver one or gold. but if critisism isn't allowed, then ignore this.

[Legofan225]

Criticisim is allowed yes just no bad Moc or don't do anymore MOCs sentences. Criticisim is allowed just no bad MOC or don't do anymore MOCs sentences and thank you all for your replyies and thank's Bacem for the wonderful advice

[Legofan225]

What do think of the storyline guys ? too much ? or there are some weird parts ? l'm still thinking of details about when he got the jet pack and to make concept art of this character of mine and what do think is it a good idea about making concept art ?

Edited January 29, 2014 by Legofan225

[Timeline15]

What do think of the storyline guys ? too much ? or there are some weird parts ? l'm still thinking of details about when he got the jet pack and to make concept art of this character of mine and what do think is it a good idea about making concept art ?

The one thing I take issue with is that the story features him personally meeting Mata Nui. try to create a backstory that doesn't alter or self-insert into the main canon. It comes across as slightly big headed when your self moc is a personal ally of Mata Nui (though I'm sure this wasn't your intention). Other than that, good, complex story. :)

[The Mugbearer]

1)If you don't like my MOC then don't reply at all

You know, that's not really fair and mature. However, it's understandable if you seek only for flattery that will please you and will make you feel great about what you are and what you made.

But if you seek for people's objective opinion, if you wish to improve, then please, learn to withstand people's critiques and do not limit their holy right of free speech.

I see you understand it clearly, so I just want to point out that you can't prohibit people from expressing their feelings in any way they feel appropriate.

As for your MOC (and it's Jet mode to be more specific), it really needs better, more complex legs. It could make a perfect brutal warrior in bulky armor, but legs ruin that feel.

Edited January 29, 2014 by -N13OS-

[DraikNova]

Here's some constructive criticism: try replacing the red wing pieces with silver ones, and either putting the jetpack farther up, or replacing the Ehlek claw with another jetpack. Also, I agree with N130S, it needs different legs, but to accommodate that, the torso would have to become one or two modules longer as well.

What looks good on it...well, the claws you use to secure him in his jetpack fit perfectly, actually.

[Legofan225]

Thank you all for seeing my MOC and thank you all for replying and as l sed l will put some needed updates to my MOC and thank you all !

[Says Seven]

The figure itself is pretty well balanced (basic at best), but the jet pack should be made a bit smaller with more organized/less colors to emphasize more of the front of him. Other than that I like it, mostly because it reminds me of the good ol' days of 08' when I

myself started mocing. ;) So keep up the good work, and don't let people bring you down.

Edited February 5, 2014 by Says Seven