[SoNE] Mogywar

[Mogywar]

Me, my brother Gacca and other Wookiees happily lived on Kashyyyk. But then, suddenly Separists started attacking. When we finnaly defeated them, new dictator came, Palpatine and his stormtroopers. They spreed badness and terror over our calm planet. We were are frightened, many of us died, many became slaves and others were hidding in forests. But one day, finnaly came the day we were all waiting for. Rebellion was more and more stronger and one day we all rebel. We attacked the gas factory in Gaywwaka forest, building which heavely polluted river which brought live to many plants we eat. But rebels had some problems, so they came 10 minutes later. That 10 minutes were fatal for my brother. He's been killed by clone. I took my revenge but , that didn't help my brother. After we defeated clones, I decided to join rebelion, like my uncle Chewie.

PLEASE, JUDGE THIS.

[hench]

Great story! I like, how you made the factory and the feeling of the action is great.

[Mr Man]

I love the red ink blotches . Nice little pumping station .

[Brickdoctor]

It's not a bad start, although considering that this is Kashyyyk, I would've liked to see some trees. And a presentation tip: in the future, it'll look much more professional if you go with a plain white background instead of one partially colored with markers.

[Shadows of Nar Eurbrikka]

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