WIP

[NewRight]

I spent all of today working on this one diorama and I'm not quite sure I like. Now I'm trying to see if there is anything on it that I can salvage. I thought I may as well show all of it since I do somewhat like it. I also really want to get any thoughts on it. Here's a WIP shots when I was about halfway through.

I like the techniques I used and the minifigure action. What really makes me dislike it is the thin 'incomplete' look it has all about it. I think it does look better in person, but even then not that great. Here's an additional photo I took later tonight.

Anyway all thoughts are welcome. I'm trying to somehow salvage this and maybe make a pirate dio I like a little more. Any help welcome.

Thanks in advance.

Edited March 14, 2010 by NewRight

[awesomebrick]

That's amazing Newright

I'm a big fan of your MOCs

The only problem is that the second picture isn't showing up

for me

[lightningtiger]

Ditto Ditto, yeah that second photo isn't comming up.

Anyway that building would make a great prison - I say go prison - you gotta have somewhere to stick those pirates.

Great design again 'NewRight' and I'm a conformist! !

[Captain Green Hair]

Looks great from what I can see.

I don't really like the black door however, I think a brown one would look better, and then make the tile on it black.

Perhaps you might want the rocks that lay against the building a bit higher and add a bit more vegetation to spice things up....

Just my 2 cents, good luck!

[Admiral Croissant]

I think the grey stones between the white and tan ones make it look a bit..not very good

That's the only thing and maybe some vegetation like Greenhair said.

For the rest it looks quite promising, keep it up!

[NewRight]

That's amazing Newright

I'm a big fan of your MOCs

The only problem is that the second picture isn't showing up

for me

Thanks for that kind response. I uploaded the second picture to BrickShelf using a deeplink this time so there shouldn't be any problems. Flickr was probably having trouble since the photo is set to friends only. (Flickr friends that is) Everything should work now.

Ditto Ditto, yeah that second photo isn't comming up.

Anyway that building would make a great prison - I say go prison - you gotta have somewhere to stick those pirates.

Great design again 'NewRight' and I'm a conformist! !

Funny you mention that. The original intention was to have a gate breaking open (like shown in the just uploaded second picture) and all of the pirates pillaging and running wild on the old fort.

Looks great from what I can see.

I don't really like the black door however, I think a brown one would look better, and then make the tile on it black.

Perhaps you might want the rocks that lay against the building a bit higher and add a bit more vegetation to spice things up....

Just my 2 cents, good luck!

I agree. If I can find my light bley slopes (can't find them used in any of my currently built creations, but kind find them where I supposedly sorted them ) then I'm really hoping to do some rock work similar to what I used in Yo ho, Yo ho. Probably less steep though. When I build the rock face I'm hoping to use some of those bamboo chute type pieces integrated into the cliff. I'm a little to lazy to actually look up what they're called, but I used them in the Yo ho, Yo ho diorama.

I think the grey stones between the white and tan ones make it look a bit..not very good

That's the only thing and maybe some vegetation like Greenhair said.

For the rest it looks quite promising, keep it up!

I'll see what I can do. I liked the cluttered look a little. Originally there wasn't suppose to be as much tan. I was using it as a transition from the white to the crumbling stone. I'll add the vegetation for sure.

[Alex the Great]

A good start NewRight, I would also suggest changing the door to brown. But everything else looks good to me, keep it up.

[hawkrider]

What really makes me dislike it is the thin 'incomplete' look it has all about it.

Well almost every MOC i see on this website has the 'incomplete look' anyway I think it really is very detailed white shallow water on the beach, pirates keeping their muskets out of the water,and the big sonic boom canon.

#edit# why is it that every time I quote no bubble comes up?

Edited March 14, 2010 by hawkrider

[Alex the Great]

#edit# why is it that every time I quote no bubble comes up?

You have to press this, then "

" will show up (with a backslash in the second bracket). Then just paste whatever you want quoted in there, if it's not working I would suggest you pm an admin.

[Fires-storm]

Wow, amazing! I love how this came out, the detail on the wall is excellent, and I love the gunpowder trail for the cannon. great job and keep bricking

[MetroiD]

Well almost every MOC i see on this website has the 'incomplete look' anyway...

Hm, why the swipe at EB MOCs, if I may ask? As to the quotes - by the looks of it, you probably keep deleting the {/quote} code at the end of the quote.

@NewRight: What did you intend this one to be? The wall of a castle? A town gate? The way it is now, its position seems rather weird to me - if it were a castle, then this little beach would most probably be inexistent, serving as foundation for the wall, not standing in front of it - and if it were a town wall, it would most probably be located at a greater distance from the beach itself. I think you should decide for yourself what kind of element that wall is and build on from there. Keep the rock arch if you can though - looks great to me!