Daniel Williams Posted January 19, 2010 Posted January 19, 2010 (edited) Part 2 - One Rule: Don't Die James Lavigne Construction Worker New York City I grabbed a hammer and slowly crept behind a lone German armed with a machine gun. I raised the hammer and smashed his head in. He quickly fell face forward to the floor blood slowly gushing out of his skull. I never thought I would have to kill a man, but somehow I didn't feel any remorse as I went to get his gun. I rushed down the street and headed toward as others rushed past me to find safety from the firefights that erupted all around the city. I shot at any Germans as I made my way towards the only armory in the city; the military base. I ran down one alley way to the next, trembling, fearing for my life. Reaching up my brow as I swept the sweat away. My dad told me there's only one rule in war and that is don't die. I rushed forward, but before I could reach the end of the alley. I hope he was right. To be continued PS - I will update DwtD later this month, so don't expect anything until the 27 or 29 of January. Thnx for ur patientice. German Decal by Alliessquad62 Edited January 19, 2010 by Daniel Williams Quote
iamded Posted January 19, 2010 Posted January 19, 2010 Hm, interesting so far. Although I think you mean 'remorse', not 'morse'. Nice photos, fits in well with the story, a tad dark but it works. If I may suggest one thing though, it is to make sure no stray hairs or the like get in the shot, as they tend to be distracting. I know I've had that problem before. ~Peace Quote
Daniel Williams Posted January 22, 2010 Author Posted January 22, 2010 Thnx, you seem to be the only commenting on my work, thnx again for the tips. Quote
Fires-storm Posted March 6, 2010 Posted March 6, 2010 (edited) I like this, pretty good story, and it looks promising. Can't wait to see more! Edited March 6, 2010 by Fires-storm Quote
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