[Short Story] Attack at Ethrrashk

[Torax]

Hello, everyone!

I made a short story for my MOC: Attack at Ethrrashk, which can also be found in that topic.

However, this is the place for stories, so I post the story here as well, and this is the place to discuss it.

It is a Story based around the MOC. (Or maybe the MOC is based in the story? ) Who knows?

Anyway, it is set during the Clone Wars, adn the main characters are Torax (Wohoo I'm in my own story?) and Ampy. (Read the 'Characters' section.)

Here it is:

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“Sir, they’re coming!” Ray said to his leader, Sergeant Alazarin.

“Yes,” he replied, not seeming to care, although Ray knew Alazarin really did. “Very well. Get ready!”

Ray put his helmet on, and ran to his position behind a small rock. When he looked forward he saw a small pathway to the beach. It was only three or so metres wide, and it featured high walls on either side.

The squad had been positioned here at Kashyyyk a day ago, when they heard that another Wookie city was under attack. As usual, Torax and Ampy had come too, in search for revenge, as they call it. Ray didn’t care why they were here, but he was grateful, because they were great warriors and helped a lot.

Right now Dac was excited. His squad, together with Torax, Ampy and the local Wookies of the village Ethrrashk had set up a trap for the CIS attack platoon. To the right, on top of the cliff stood Torax and looked serious. Torax was one of the most skilled swordsmen Dac had ever seen in action. He wore a Lightsaber, though he claimed he wasn’t a Jedi. Dac didn’t care about that now, as long as the plan worked.

He looked to his right, where Ampy was standing.

“Are you nervous?” He asked her, trying to sound professional.

“This is nothing I haven’t done before,” she replied. They heard Alazarin telling everyone to get ready, so they both put on their helmets. Dac looked out over the sea, and he saw the Droid Troop Carriers undocking their troops. He counted a total of fifteen battle droids and five super battle droids. A small platoon. He felt relieved that there were no droidekas, and he took his position behind a rock. The droids started marching across the beach, towards the clef where they were hiding. The beach wasn’t very wide, so it didn’t take long until they had reached the mouth of the chasm. Dac looked over to the left, at his sergeant. Alazarin waved with his light emitter, signalling to Torax that it was time.

“Unleash hell!” Torax shouted with his deep voice. The Wookies on the cliffs, understanding basic, put all their weight into pushing a large rock each. A third Wookie, who had introduced himself as Chewbacca, started throwing torches at the droids below.

“Uh-oh,” one of them said in its mechanical voice, that Dac hated so much. But it was too late. The wookies, strong as they were, had managed to shove the rocks over the edge of the cliffs, and the heavy rocks were now tumbling down onto the CIS troops below.

Everyone on the battlefield cheered, except the droids of course. It was a cheer of victory and joy. The republic had won this battle, and Dac knew that this victory was important for Torax and Ampy too.

The trap succeeded.

Characters:

•Torax (Lightsaber)

•Ampy (Two guns, sniper, short antenna)

•Clone trooper sergeant Alazarin (Small gun)

-=And his squad of Null-class Advanced Recon Commandos:

-=AN-V “Ray” (Visor, blaster)

-=AN-L “Reed” (Long antenna, blaster)

-=AN-H “Dac” (Long antenna, hip protection, blaster)

-=AN-G “Shell” (Short antenna, grey arms, special blaster)

-=AN-S “Subos“(Sniper, Scout trooper armour)

This squad is a group of Null-class Advanced Recon Commandos under the lead of Sergeant Alazarin. The sergeant managed to train the failed cloning attempts into great warriors, and the squad now fights beside Torax and Ampy.

The odd group makes a great battle team. Event though Torax and Ampy are completely independent in the Clone Wars, they fight with Alazarin’s squad and the Republic against the CIS.

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What do you think?

Please comment!

I really enjoyed writing this short story, and it might well evolve into something bigger.

If some of you all have written a book before, please give me tips on how to take this short story one step further and make it into a book.

Thank you!