My Vig for Halloween contest. This needs improving!

[Tim Bit]

Update

Thank you everyone for your ideas. this is my third and possibly final verision. all coments still welcome but please hurry I plan on entering on the eve of the 29th.

Sorry for the unusally blurry pics. Please comment quickly!

My bs folder when public:

http://www.brickshelf.com/cgi-bin/gallery.cgi?f=348891

UPDATE

Thank you pickerel for your Ideas. Here the outcome.( Remember These Still Aren't Final)

What do think I could add/take away. give me your worst.

I have finished my vig for the Halloween contest. But this thing needs alot of work. I want all the tips you can think of. Sorry in advance for blurry pics. Hopefully I'll have couple of better Versions before I enter.

The back round story is that a man named Dr. Lou lives in the house beside the graveyard in the small town of Forks. but he ain't an ordinary doctor he is a serial killer. He always wears a mask and holds a small knife. he stores the bodys in the basement were his giant man eating python lives. The old lady kneeling in front of the grave is a widow. Dr. Lou is planning on sending her to see her husband.

Well give me your absolute worst. This is 100% prototype and I'm planning on doing a complete overhaul.

Thanks

Edited October 25, 2008 by Tim Bit

[Zorro]

Nicely done, Tim Bit, but is it possible to rotate those pics? (photoshop or something alike)Now I have to turn my laptop and that seems to be a bit weird. (I got a soure neck, like many pc-nerds/lovers do...

Your MOC is good. from me.

Edited October 13, 2008 by zorro3999

[Pickerel]

This is the right thread for me! (I'm a natural critic)

My worst huh?

Well, I'd fill your tower in to match the window's side, it might even look good with a little overhang.

I see a body and a crocodile in the basement, perhaps more pics?

Try holding your camera straighter, holding the button down halfway down before pressing it, and using the flower symbol thing (I think that's what it is), this helps the camera focus up close.

The seaweed might be able to be combined with the vine for a nice effect.

Like Zorro said, rotate the pictures! People don't like MOCs that give them neck cramps!

Now for the nicer part :

Good usage of window.

Nice lamp. May I have permission to use this in my MOCs- I'd give you credit?

Death Eaters make great serial killers. :skull:

I like how well you added the stairpiece- it's challenging for a vignette!

Hope that helps!

[Guss]

my worst . mhh..

first, I don't like the "light green" tiles,

then , as Zorro said, can you rotates these pics please ? ^^

and .. I like it anyway ^^ that's a nice idea, but I thinks you have the same problem than me , it's too.. "messy" for the majority of peoples, as the majority of my mocs^^ but ... I like it !

[Hinckley]

Tim, I like the story and the action, but the structure itself looks too much like the official LEGO Diagon Alley set. I would suggest keeping the window, but building around it with a different color scheme and original construction. I think you'll be happier with the result. I really do think it's a good vig as far as the way you've setup the story and where the figs are situated. Nice work.

[Tim Bit]

Thank you Hinckley I'll redo the tower ASAP

[Pickerel]

Your welcome Tim Bit.

It's looking a lot better! Those plants look great and your pictures are clear and right-side-up.

Nice job!

[Tim Bit]

The newest pics are at the top. again comment Quickly!