[O9 - Onderon & Dxun - CE] Jungle Convoy

[PandaQuil]

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A cacophony of excited cries echoed throughout the humid jungle as the convoy inched through the undergrowth. The vegetation seemed almost vengeful, thick roots and thorny vines wore away at their machetes; they were already on their third and they still weren't even there yet. Sweat dripped down Marrick's face, it was far too hot for helmets; how did the neo-crusaders of old cope with this? 

Eventually, the dense leaf cover parted and the looming grey bulk of the abandoned bunker became visible. It couldn't have been too soon, and the tired convoy felt collectively rejuvenated as their destination slowly edged closer. The pace picked up, the crew hauled the reclaimed beskar crates and supplies with seemingly inhuman strength, and Marrick hacked and slashed relentlessly. Finally they had made it. The Automatic door of the metallic behemoth groaned as it welcomed the first Mandalorian visitors in Thousands of years... One of the previous residents was even waiting there to meet them, how polite!

Edited February 7, 2021 by goatman461
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[Ross Fisher]

Honestly, this is really great. It's a good jungle, a nice bunker build, you're trying some slightly more advanced techniques, and the image embed is working, too!

The only downside is that the backdrop is a bit distracting. Maybe try a matte piece of card instead? I'd also suggest cropping tighter on some of those pics. 

Edited February 2, 2021 by Ross Fisher

[n1majneb]

I think this is well executed - The contrast between the Jungle vegetation and the bunker works really well. Bar the skeleton, those door seals really keep the encroaching jungle out!
I'd like to see more of the Black tree, that looks like a nicely detailed tree. Perhaps a reverse shot?

I understand the need for the current background but I think a plain colour may help with focus too - the wider images look a little soft and it may be the focus is hunting for the detail in that pattern unfortunately. Its happened to me before.

[PandaQuil]

9 hours ago, n1majneb said:

I think this is well executed - The contrast between the Jungle vegetation and the bunker works really well. Bar the skeleton, those door seals really keep the encroaching jungle out!
I'd like to see more of the Black tree, that looks like a nicely detailed tree. Perhaps a reverse shot?

I understand the need for the current background but I think a plain colour may help with focus too - the wider images look a little soft and it may be the focus is hunting for the detail in that pattern unfortunately. Its happened to me before.

Yeah probably. I don't really have blank card or other those sorts of things just lying around so I went for my MMA matts as a substitute. I might try sticking more to interiors so I can fill the frame with lego in future 

 

[dvogon]

Quite interesting build. The contrast from the jungle to the bunker works very well, the lateral build of the ground is on par and the story is nice.

On the suggestions side, while the wild jungle effect is right, some clearance would help to spot the characters better in the shots, although the first one is great. For the bunker roof, being that thick, avoiding the inverted studs would help as well to the overall looking of the bunker interior.

 

[marvelBoy123]

The transition from the landscape to the bunker is vary good and I think the vegetation is probably some of the best we have seen in Factions for capturing the jungle atmosphere.