Bigger Fish Posted January 12, 2016 Posted January 12, 2016 (edited) So I was thinking of making a series of animations of various characters battling each other in order to teach my self Flash. I just finished up writing the first script for the series about Tahu Vs. Preston Stormer. Please tell me what you think and what I should change. Enjoy! Episode 1: Tahu Vs. Preston Stormer Intro: (Our video opens with a Hero Pod descending through Okoto’s atmosphere towards its target.) (We cut to Tahu standing on a cliff overlooking Okoto as the Hero Pod crashes down behind him, causing him to turn around and see what it is.) (Preston Stormer climbs out of the pod and points his weapon at Tahu.) Tahu: (Pointing his weapon Stormer.) Who are you? Stormer: Preston Stormer, leader of the Hero Factory Alpha 1 team, and you’re under arrest for multiple accounts of arson and many other crimes. Tahu: What! That’s impossible! There must’ve been a mistake, I’m a hero, I’ve saved countless lives, just like you! Stormer: I don’t make mistakes, Now please put down your weapon. You have twenty seconds to comply. Tahu: No! (Draws other sword and ignites them both.) I will not come with you! Even if I have to roast you alive to do so. (Dashes at Stormer, who effortlessly dodges and points his weapon back at Tahu.) Stormer: You now have fifteen seconds to comply. You are in direct violation of Penal Code 113, Section 9. Tahu: (Turning around and getting ready to attack again.) No. I don’t know who you are, or why you’re after me, but I know that you and I are both on the side of good and that there’s been a grave mistake. So if I have to, I WILL NOT hesitate to kill you. (Tahu powers up and surrounds himself with fire.) Stormer: If that’s the why you want it to play, then that’s how I’m gonna play to. I am now authorized to use physical force. (Stormer fires off multiple shots from his ice gun at Tahu, with Tahu effortlessly shields agianst them.) Fight: Stormer: (Draw his pistol and spins it around Robocop style before pointing it at Tahu.) Dead or alive, you’re coming with me! Announcer: Let’s get ready to rumble! FIGHT! Stormer fires off more ice and plasma shots as Tahu begins blocking them with his swords before missing a few and getting hit by them, before firing off a few fire blasts of his own. Stormer blocks the shots with his MTIS before firing off two ice spears and dashing towards Tahu with his power sword out. The two lock swords and begin sword fighting and get into a stalemate followed by Stormer activating his rhino power and punching Tahu across the island. Stormer then summons his Mach Bike and gives chase. Tahu lands near the Fire Reigon as he gets up and surveys his surroundings only to be ambushed by Stormer on his bike. Tahu activates his mask of speed and chase after Stormer. Tahu catches up to Stomer and then activates his mask of strength in order to grab the bike and stop Stormer. Stormer gets off his bike and slices it in half when Tahu throws it at him. Stormer: So you wanna play rough, eh? Good, because I’m through playing the good guy! Stormer fires off his backpack ice missiles, followed by a group of attack drones. Tahu then blocks the shots with his shield only to have it broken by a couple of drones from behind. Tahu responds by throwing his spinning blades and firing off his Ghostblaster to destroy them. Tahu then fires his Ghostblaster at Stormer, restraining him with chains. Stormer simply uses his particle separator to phase through the chains. Tahu keeps firing at him to no effect. Stormer then deactivates the separator and begins brutally beating up Tahu before restraining him and getting ready to finish him off using his ice saw. Stormer: You have the right to remain silent, even though you won’t be able to say anything at all when I’m through with you. Tahu quickly uses his mask of invisibility to escape, much to Stormers surprise. Stormer: WHAT? Stormer brings out his gun and begins looking around while getting beaten up by an invisible Tahu. Stormer: Where are you? Show yourself! If you turn yourself in now, then you will brought back to the Hero Factory with only THREE of your limbs missing. After getting hit again, Stormer throws his hero cuffs at the invisible toa to home in on him and catch him. Stormer: You won’t escape this time, invisible bot. The cuffs catch Tahu, draining his power and revealing him to Stormer. Stormer walks over to Tahu, charging up his blaster to execute him while Tahu looks up at him defiantly. Stormer: (Preparing to kill him) You know, if you just gave up and came with me, then none of this would’ve happened. Tahu: (Breathless, with barely restrained anger.) I’m... not... done... yet... Suddenly, a large flash of light appears, blinding Stormer as Tahu kicks him away and dons the Golden Armor, melting off the cuffs and powering himself up with a fiery golden aura. Stormer: So, you got yourself some fancy new bling. (Gets ready to fight again.) Not that it matters, you’ll just fetch a higher bounty when I bring back to base. Tahu: I CAN FEEL THE POWER! Tahu slams his sword into the ground, causing a massive lava wave that Stormer jumps out of the of using his ant gravity rings. The wave causes a small volcanic eruption and a large lava flow. Stormer flies away from the eruption thinking that Tahu died in the blast. Stormer: I think I lost him, no one could have survived that. (Suddenly, a large fire blast just barely misses him.) What? (Stormer sees Tahu surfing towards him on the lava flow.) Impossible! The two begin exchanging elemental shots at each other while dodging each other’s attacks. The two the fly over a large cliff as Tahu grabs Stormer, dragging him down into the jungle. Tahu: You won’t escape me this time! Tahu begins melting off Stormer’s boots, causing them both to crash land in the jungle. Stormer gets up and calls back to base to summon his battle machine. Stormer: This is Stormer! Requesting Battle Machine. I repeat, requesting Battle Machine! This is a code red situation! Target is more dangerous than expected and is resisting arrest! I need heavier firepower, NOW! A large mech the drops from the sky and Stormer climbs aboard, Titanfall style as it then starts up just as Tahu makes it to Stormer. Tahu looks shocked while Stormer looks proud. Tahu: What? An Exo-Toa? Where’d you get that? Stormer: It’s not an Exo-whatever you primitives used, it’s a high-tech customized advanced ordinance battle machine with the most powerful in both cryogenic weaponry and containment, it’s also known as Your Doom. Tahu: It doesn’t matter, I’ve fought worse things than that on a daily basis. Stormer: So have I, punk. Now to finish this fight with something I should’ve said when we started this fight. FREEZE! Stormer then fires his freeze cannon at Tahu, freezing him solid. Stormer: Your move, creep. Stormer then begins walking towards the ice crystal that Tahu was sealed in, getting ready to put him in the container. Stormer: Sorry it had to be this way, but if you just came peacefully, then none of this would’ve ever happened. Suddenly, Stormer hears an eagle cry as he turns around to see what the noise is. Stormer: What is that? Suddenly Ikir bursts onto the scene and shatters Tahu’s ice prison before fusing with him, powering him up significantly. Tahu then begins dashing back and forth, striking Stormer repeatedly and setting the Jungle ablaze. Just before Tahu can strike Stormer, Stormer grabs Tahu by the wings and rips them off. Stormer: Let’s see how well you fly without these! Stormer then forcibly rips the wingless Ikir off of Tahu’s back and then throws Tahu away and begins beating up Ikir. Tahu gets up and rushes towards Stormer while Stormer’s now stomping Ikir into the ground. Tahu dashes forward and slices off the Freeze Machine’s arms, much to Stormer’s surprise. Tahu then fires off a massive flame blast that melts the mech just as Stormer ejects from the mech. Stormer then lands on the ground as the two combatants dash at each other and lock swords. The two struggle until Tahu then uses his heat vision to burn out Stormer’s optics, causing him to reel back in pain. Tahu: Burn! Tahu the superheats his sword and slices through both Stormer’s sword and his neck. Tahu then grabs Stormer’s head and melts/crushes it while Stormer’s headless body collapses behind him. Announcer: KO! Aftermath: We return to the Hero factory to see the Alpha 1 headquarters and a screen that has Tahu walking away from Stormer’s corpse and a picture of Kopaka labeled NEXT TARGET, DEAD OR ALIVE! Zib: (Talking to someone offscreen.) Are you sure this is the right thing to do? I mean, we just our most skilled heroes to someone who, according to our records, has done nothing wrong and in fact, has done quite a lot of good with his team in their corner of the universe. Mysterious voice: Yes, this is the right thing to do, beings like that are much too powerful to exist lest they go rouge. None of them need to exist as long as we have the Hero Factory around. Now, continue the operation. Zib: Yes, sir. Furno has just been dispatched to Okoto capture the next target. We then turn to the shadows to see a pair of glowing red eyes and a toothy grin. Mysterious voice: Good... We then return to Okoto where we see Kopaka overlooking a cliff in the ice region. Furno: (Behind Kopaka) Well, if it isn’t the Toa of the hour. Kopaka turns around to see Furno behind him, gun drawn and ready to fire. Kopaka: Who are you? Furno: It doesn’t matter right now, what DOES matter is your answer to this simple question. You ready to live forever? We then cut to black right when Furno fires off his gun. Edited January 12, 2016 by Bigger Fish Quote
Quisoves Pugnat Posted January 12, 2016 Posted January 12, 2016 P.S. How to I put things in spoilers? i is the square-root of negative-one![ /spoiler] without the space in the last set of brackets Quote
Bigger Fish Posted January 12, 2016 Author Posted January 12, 2016 (edited) Thanks. So, what do you guys think of it? Edited January 12, 2016 by Bigger Fish Quote
Quisoves Pugnat Posted January 12, 2016 Posted January 12, 2016 So, what do you guys think of it? If nothing else, it's gloriously over the top. If you pull it of, I'll be quite impressed. I would, however, cut down on the dialogue. Stormer and Tahu are rather too chatty, seeing as they're trying to kill each other. "Yes, this is the right thing to do, beings like that are much too powerful to exist lest they go rouge." I'm reasonably certain that Tahu Mistika's armor was dark enough to be described as "rouge." =P Quote
Bigger Fish Posted January 12, 2016 Author Posted January 12, 2016 (edited) Ok thanks, I'll work on it. Edited January 12, 2016 by Bigger Fish Quote
DuckBricks Posted January 12, 2016 Posted January 12, 2016 Ok thanks, I'll work on it. Nice job! Is the toothy grin guy Vezon? I'd suspect he'd do something like this and cause chaos throughout the universe Quote
Bigger Fish Posted January 12, 2016 Author Posted January 12, 2016 (edited) Nice job! Is the toothy grin guy Vezon? I'd suspect he'd do something like this and cause chaos throughout the universe Your half right, they ARE a Piraka, just not Vezon. Though you have given me a good idea for a future arc. I also have Furno Vs. Kopaka and Rocka Vs. Takanuva planned plus a few others along with a battle royal involving Merrick Fortris dueling against three unknown opponents, including the mastermind behind everything. Edited January 12, 2016 by Bigger Fish Quote
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