Schreeuwwitje Posted July 22, 2015 Posted July 22, 2015 Hi Everybody, Before I discovered the wonderfull world of Eurobricks and the rest of the world wide web I decided to write a fantasy book. After my Dark Ages I picked up the idea to create MOCs to display my chapters. So I started out my first story line MOC (also before checking on Eurobricks). I do know of the high level builds here and that my own level is nowhere near, but I still wanted to post this first one, also in relation to the next one (who will be of a much higher level I hope). I am looking forward for some positive critisism and I hope you'll enjoy it: ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ Chapter 1: - Character 1 - Snip The market square was crowded. Sounds of merchants trying to sell their stuff to noisy buyers, the smell of food being cooked and the always present guards watching from under their helmets. Overview-Left by Draken Nek, on Flickr The people seem to look happy due to the absence of an imminent threat, but their hearts were still grasped by fear. The commanding general of the city is a feared man, but he and his mages are seldom seen amongst the commoners. Peace is somewhat established, at least in the city itself. Shady merchant about to be robbed by Draken Nek, on Flickr Through the crowd of visitors a cheery young man appeared, laughing and evading all the peasants and travelers on his path. When you could view his movements from a higher perspective, you could see some similarities with a panther stalking his pray in the jungle. The persons that know him closest would recognize that Snip was on a mission. His black hood and cape provided cover for his weapons as this alleged master thief is not afraid of any competition or resistance. His colleagues had informed him that he could find something of great value in this city. Something the fearful general kept in his citadel. Something that could change the lives of so many... Something shiny... Snip by Draken Nek, on Flickr ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ Cheers, Schreeuwwitje Quote
Exetrius Posted July 23, 2015 Posted July 23, 2015 The crowd looks very alive and realistic, I also like the tan house, especially it's roof. Futhermore, I really like where the story is going! I think the build would profit from a thicker and slightly smoother base. The texturering techniques you used for the wall are good, but would look better with smaller parts (swap 1x6 tiles out for 1x4 and 1x3 for instance). I look forward to the next chapter! Quote
Puvel Posted July 23, 2015 Posted July 23, 2015 Looks like a crowded market place indeed. Think the tan house is my favorite part. Looking forward to the rest of the story! Quote
Schreeuwwitje Posted July 23, 2015 Author Posted July 23, 2015 Ghehe thnx for the comments! After I had build this I indeed bought more smaller parts for texture and I planned to do the second house in tan as well, but this was almost all my tan. So I have been buying some extra materials for the next MOC :) Quote
TitusV Posted July 23, 2015 Posted July 23, 2015 Nice build, you did a good job with the crowdy market, looking forward to the next chapter Quote
SEE AR AR THREE Posted July 23, 2015 Posted July 23, 2015 I don't know why so many people worry about their building skills compared to others. This is really good. I like the woman pouring the water out the window! The only thing bothering me is your use of the word "stuff". Merchants would sell wares or goods, but wouldn't use the terminology "stuff". Quote
LegoPercyJ Posted August 12, 2015 Posted August 12, 2015 Great build! The wall and buildings are excellent! Quote
LittleJohn Posted August 12, 2015 Posted August 12, 2015 Excellent build! The wall texturing looks great and I really like the roof on the tan house Quote
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