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#1 kabel

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Posted 16 September 2012 - 01:50 PM

alright, I've been working on this for the last couple of days, and am quite pleased about how this came out. However, me not scoring a single point in the last challenge got me thinking that I'd like to have more feedback on how to make this a really great entry this time. So here are some WIP shots I took today. Constructive comments would be apreciated ...

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Posted 16 September 2012 - 02:22 PM

Well, what I can see is looking pretty good.  If possible could you add a shot from back a little way so we can get a better feel of the overall composition of the build?

The rockwork is looking pretty good and there is plenty of color to the build.  I would change out the brick or plate that is under the blue slope in the river where it dips.  You can see the yellow underneath there.

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Posted 16 September 2012 - 02:32 PM

i can see some good detail in the rocks and water. your not giving to much away so far :) cant wait to see some more

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Posted 16 September 2012 - 03:52 PM

thanks for the quick answers guys!

@Kayne: I've just realized myself how dumb this looks and changed it right away, thanks!

@Rast: alright, I added two overall shots to the first post
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Posted 16 September 2012 - 04:23 PM

Good work :thumbup: :thumbup:  , cant wait to see it finished :classic:

I think rocks and water are well detailed  :classic:

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Posted 17 September 2012 - 05:56 AM

Great work so far Kabel! The water is excellent is are your trees. The black temple idea is also nice, it gives a bit of a mystic feeling to it :thumbup:

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Posted 17 September 2012 - 11:43 AM

It's looking nice so far, although I would suggest mking the temple in a color other than black, although black does give a bit of a "charred remains" effect.  Good work on the smoothness of the river though.  :thumbup:

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Posted 17 September 2012 - 12:32 PM

Looking good Kabel! My only suggestion is to add a more impressive part to the ruins. So they look a little more awe inspiring, maybe a shrine or something similar.
Your landscaping is excellent  :thumbup:
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Posted 17 September 2012 - 01:09 PM

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Posted 17 September 2012 - 01:57 PM

I like what you're trying to do with the water, but it feels "flat".  I think it needs a little texture to it.

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Posted 17 September 2012 - 02:34 PM

Thanks everybody for your feedback. I think this I going to be really helpful!

@kai: which color would you suggest, dark grey? There are a few elements of it in there, maybe I could just put some more in it.

@soccerkid: as you can see, the altar region of the temple hasn't been build yet, I'm still collecting ideas in my head

@kibosh: where do you think it lacks texture? At the rapid? I haven't really started working there yet and I'm of course waiting for more bushes etc. to arrive
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Posted 17 September 2012 - 04:39 PM

Kabel are you going to use the full 64x64?

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Posted 17 September 2012 - 05:13 PM

View Postkabel, on 17 September 2012 - 02:34 PM, said:

@kai: which color would you suggest, dark grey? There are a few elements of it in there, maybe I could just put some more in it.
Dark grey would be a good color.  It's not that black looks bad either, it's just that I don't think I've heard of a black temple. . .   :wink:

@Rast - I believe the max is 54 or so (58 or 52?) x5o whatever.  :classic:

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Posted 17 September 2012 - 05:23 PM

its acutally going to be 56 by 48

well, the black is part of the story, furthermore granite exposed for a long time looks like kinda black too. but you're right I'll mix in more some dark bley in my efforts to make the temple look nicer
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Posted 19 September 2012 - 07:47 PM

Looking good so far. Here's some feedback:
  • The water looks really good
  • The rock banks of the river look good too
  • Good start on the temple ruins, although I think they need to be a bit more architecturally interesting. Not sure what I mean there, but the ruins aren't totally compelling yet. Maybe a bit more detailing, and some ruined pieces lying on the ground will help.
  • I find black to be a very difficult color to photograph. Details get lost. You might want to consider having the temple ruins mostly black with some details in another color.
  • The foliage on the bank and the tall tree look good. Hard to tell about the rest. My rule on foliage is - when in doubt, add more.
  • How do you get across the river to the temple? Those rock banks look too steep for the horse to go up. Maybe there will be a more approachable way up in the area you haven't built yet.
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Posted 21 September 2012 - 07:10 PM

@NM: thanks a lot man, this was really helpful, and I tried to work in some of your suggestions
a way up the bank:
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PS: sorry for the pics' quality, but for WIP shots I usually don't bother the setting
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Posted 21 September 2012 - 07:56 PM

Awesome creation there!
I love the river and the black and white tree (oak?i dont know the name in english)
Nice going with the temple too :thumbup:
I cant wait to see it all finished.
Im sorry but at the moment i dont think i can be helpful with something :)

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