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[Zepher]

Orginal

(12x12 with minimum over hang, it should be okay since the contest says 16x16 (I thought it was 12x12, and check once I was fisnihed ))


Old treasures are strung below the area, with weapons from fallen friends and enemies surronding the island as a fence.


Oversized later for when he wants to go swimming!


Water cascade from his... excess water.


Fishing for food.


His old crow's nest has become an artist's corner!


Thanks for looking!

-Zepher

This post has been edited by SlyOwl: 08 December 2009 - 10:17 PM

[Bricknave]

I think the MOC and the background story of it is fabulous, and I like some of its detailed features such as the use of skeleton legs to hold up the safety bar (very clever) and the stream of water dripping down from the top of Pearch Rock.

However, certain objects included in this MOC do not match the MOC's theme very well. The Sir Danju purple-with-yellow shield should be removed because it just does not look good there (although it would look good in a pirate captain's quarters or in a hallway of a Navy fort), and the propeller on top should be replaced with something else as the airplane wasn't invented at the time there were pirates.

Also, I think you should add some more bricks at the very center of the rock itself; it seems as though the top of the rock is extremely unstable and could tumble over at any second.

This post has been edited by Bricknave: 12 October 2009 - 12:31 AM

[Zepher]

Bricknave, on Oct 12 2009, 01:26 AM, said:

I think the MOC and the background story of it is fabulous, and I like some of its detailed features such as the use of skeleton legs to hold up the safety bar (very clever) and the stream of water dripping down from the top of Pearch Rock.

However, certain objects included in this MOC do not match the MOC's theme very well. The Sir Danju purple-with-yellow shield should be removed because it just does not look good there (although it would look good in a pirate captain's quarters or in a hallway of a Navy fort), and the propeller on top should be replaced with something else as the airplane wasn't invented at the time there were pirates.

Also, I think you should add some more bricks at the very center of the rock itself; it seems as though the top of the rock is extremely unstable and could tumble over at any second.

First off, thank you for the comment.

I will be removing the shield and the strange blue thing on the look-out nest, thanks for the suggestion. However, I rather like the propeller, and since we're allowed to be on the edge of the Steam-punk age I'll leave it, unless others think it's out of place.

Also, the unstable rock structure is supposed to look... unstable. You see it all the time in the desert, erosion only takes place on the bottom level, but get lesser on the top becuase the wind could not bring the eroder (is that a word) there. I love the look of those things, and tried to replicate it in my MOC!

Thanks again!

[Tereglith]

I like this entry, you've inspired me to do something similar. A few suggestions, though. Firstly, you could give it a blue base - islands always look better with water around them, and it would mean that you could take advantage of the full medium size of the entry. Another, smaller rock, connected to this one with a rope bridge would be very cool, and I think that it would add to the MOC greatly. As for the propeller... I wouldn't necessarily mind the anachronism of it (heck, both my entries for this are full of anachronisms) if I could see what it was actually for. As it is, it's just a random propeller that's going to ignore users that are more temporally intolerant than I.

[Zepher]

Tereglith, on Oct 12 2009, 02:26 AM, said:

I like this entry, you've inspired me to do something similar. A few suggestions, though. Firstly, you could give it a blue base - islands always look better with water around them, and it would mean that you could take advantage of the full medium size of the entry. Another, smaller rock, connected to this one with a rope bridge would be very cool, and I think that it would add to the MOC greatly. As for the propeller... I wouldn't necessarily mind the anachronism of it (heck, both my entries for this are full of anachronisms) if I could see what it was actually for. As it is, it's just a random propeller that's going to ignore users that are more temporally intolerant than I.

Thanks, I think I will do water depending on howmany blue pieces I end up having! And I'll get rid of the propeller!

This post has been edited by Zepher: 12 October 2009 - 08:49 PM

[Bricknave]

Zepher, on Oct 11 2009, 05:33 PM, said:

First off, thank you for the comment.

I will be removing the shield and the strange blue thing on the look-out nest, thanks for the suggestion. However, I rather like the propeller, and since we're allowed to be on the edge of the Steam-punk age I'll leave it, unless others think it's out of place.

Also, the unstable rock structure is supposed to look... unstable. You see it all the time in the desert, erosion only takes place on the bottom level, but get lesser on the top becuase the wind could not bring the eroder (is that a word) there. I love the look of those things, and tried to replicate it in my MOC!

Thanks again!

You're very welcome!

[Derfel Cardarn]

What a very interesting entry! Lots going on and very eye catching with a great idea. All i would suggest is maybe to put it on sum blue plates, i know you have only got 8x8 to build on, but it mite give it a more 'island' feel. Great entry, good luck with the contest!

[MetroiD]

While I'm not quite sure what you meant by that "eroder" concept and it does look weird to me, I must admit that somehow this impossible-looking structure makes the island stand out a bit. Combining that with a steampunk look (thanks to the propeller, mostly) gives this entry a totally different twist compared to the other ones. And originality is a thing that to me as a voter always comes first.

So, in that sense, as someone who could vote for this one on the above grounds, I'd suggest adding some more elements in order to expand this entry and its originality. You've clearly gone for a steampunkish look, which combined with the Pirates theme is a winner to me. You should however try and work some more elaborate details into the MOC as you find fitting. If I were you, I'd lose some of the more useless stuff that looks a bit piled on top of that island and replace it with creations which the pirate has made himself - naturally, "creations" in the steampunk sense of the word. Turning that propeller into a windmill for example would be a good start, because I too feel that you should definitely keep it.

Combining such unique elements one would never expect to see associated with Pirates with your impossible/zany structure of the island will potentially give this one an extremely distinct vibe. Regarding the structure itself - for some reason, one of my first associations was the floating island from Gorillaz' "Feel Good" single. I'd suggest checking that out if you haven't - just to draw some inspiration.

Can't wait to see your update(s)!!

[badboytje88]

This is very different from everything I've seen before in this contest! I like it! You were definately thinking outside the box. I love the water flowing of the rock. The yellow things you can put underneath a minifigs legs look slightly out of place, but I like them!

There are some things I'd change:
- As mentioned before the fan and the chield look definately out of place.
- I don't like the striped house on the rock. I think it would look better either in tan or in brown, not both.

That's all

~Badboy

[Millacol88]

I like this, it works very well as a makeshift home thrown together in a hurry, which fits quite nicely with the backstory you provided. I'm not going to complain that it looks too random with all that stuff piled on there, because its clear that its meant to be. However, I do think it could stand to be a bit more realistic. Like others have said, some water and perhaps some ripple effects with clear plates would go nicely at the bottom. It's a shame you don't have a lot of blue, a 12 x 12 base with some other rock formations, waves and other details would do wonders for this MOC. I also agree that the rock formation looks quite unrealistic. I know I wouldn't want to make my ramshackle, probably pretty weak house on such a thin rock, with rough seas and possibly sharks below! Also, a ladder going up from the main room up to the crow's nest would look pretty good, if you can fit it in.

But the biggest thing that I'm not crazy about is the mixing of Pirates, Steampunk, and even a little Castle. Taking away that purple shield, along with those Medieval-looking axes, along with that Steampunk-like wooden propeller up top, would make your MOC have a clearer definition, and really help with the atmosphere of the scene. To me, the mentality should be: "I'm stranded, I'll use whatever I could take off the ship to survive." Right now, it seems like "I'm stranded, oh look, a Knight's shield and some battle axes, along with a propeller that are all inexplicably here."

I'm not trying to be too hard on you, I really like this MOC, its just that I feel you added a few things that don't really make sense that take you out of the experience you were trying to convey. I like all the little quirky details you've got, especially the water tap and the redcoat hat on a pike.

[Tereglith]

Just so you know, I'm totally with you on the erosion concept. Something like this, but at sea, right?

http://upload.wikime...ar_de_Uyuni.jpg

(I'd deeplink, but the picture is HUGE)

[Zepher]

Tereglith, on Oct 13 2009, 09:44 PM, said:

Just so you know, I'm totally with you on the erosion concept. Something like this, but at sea, right?

http://upload.wikime...ar_de_Uyuni.jpg

(I'd deeplink, but the picture is HUGE)

Exactly.

Thank you all for your suggestion, I'm starting to rebuild it, so keep those suggestions coming!

[martinsuper]

Cool MOC! I think that we need to make a new MOC category called "castaways" as this has become a very popular theme!

I really like the MOC but I am somewhat unsure if the bottom should be underwater of if the rock is this high from the water? The only reason I ask is because the ladder does not go down all the way and there is no "type of water" at the bottom.

I enjoy the idea of a pirate who is trying to make a go of it under really difficult circumstances. The scene look believeable and is clearly a castaway and not something else.

A cool creation!

-martinsuper

[Captain Blackmoor]

The high Pearch Rock is even visible on the frontpage tomorrow!

[Big Cam]

Very abstracrt, but functional too, reminds me of Robinson Caruso in a way, like a stranded desert island outpost.

Great job.