Well it's nice coming out of your Dark Age isn't it?
I suggest taking completely new pictures though. The color is nice and bright in the first one, but the white is much too overexposed. The second one has lower brightness, but it loses the shine.
A darker background, black, dark blue or something of the sort would work really well here. Are you taking these with the flash on? If so, then I'd suggest turning it off and getting some sunlight or some lamps. Also check for a Macro mode, although I'm not sure if such an old camera has something like that.
The new version seems better. I'm not a fan of all the loss of color, but the statue [If you could use some gray instead of black, it'd be fabulous], the scripts as the treaty and redone table is nice. The flag and the barrel are nice small touches at the top to make it less boring as well.
I suggest adding some action of some sorts though. Have the solider put his musket on his shoulder and trot. Have the two down below talking or shake hands, like others have mentioned. These small actions in minifigs can really bring a vignette to life.
While I like the white than the garish yellow and red from before, it seems boring and lacking. Some red accents [To symbolize the Redcoats. :P] on the wall would be nice. Maybe some of These Windows
would work well, if you have any. Some plates or these
in red on the top could work as well.
Anyway I like the idea, it's very realistic and all. Photo could be better, but I understand what you mean about a bad camera. Best of luck!