Jump to content


S.T.C. Part 6


  • Please log in to reply
9 replies to this topic

#1 Skinny Boy

Skinny Boy

    Posts: 1021
    Joined: 04-February 06
    Member: 650
    Country: Ireland

Posted 24 May 2009 - 01:36 PM

Previous Parts: 1, 2, 3, 4, 5.

Part 6: Day3.

Carl has wandered the green lands for three days now. He stumbles across what looks like a neighborhood.

Posted Image
"Dear Diary,.. uhh, conscience. I seem to have found an old neighborhood. Clearly abandoned, but I can't see why. I'll go in for a closer look."

Posted Image
"What the... the windows are broken, and boarded up. And the doo'rs locked."

Posted Image
"Same thing here."

Posted Image
"Hey, this ones open. Who are you talking to? You. Oh shut up."

Carl enters the house and finds some clothes.
"Well thats convenient. What? Oh Get lost you."

He then explores the neighborhood.

Posted Image
"Now I know i've seen that before. But where..."

Posted Image
"Ok, i'm gonna go for... What? Conscience, I've found what looks like the bare minimum of remains of a house. Just the foundations. Now i'm really confused. Why would people leave, when theres no signs of destruction, except the road which has worn away, and this weird... green ground. Now I find a house that looks like, it was professionally dismantled? There's not one sign of rubble. And its not like they stopped construction. The other houses were occupied. I'll find out sooner or later."

Carl goes around the back of the opened house to find a shed. He opens it.

Posted Image
"I don't know what that is.... But I like it!"

Posted Image
"Maybe not. Ahh ha ha ha! God will you leave me alone!"

Carl practises riding the bike for the rest of the day.

Day4:

"Conscience, I travelled on this thing not too far from the house today. I found a large building that says 'Museum' on a sign outside. I went in to explore."

Posted Image
"Conscience, I came to a room that had sign. It said: 'Local History'. In the centre there was a setup, of two men in some kind of struggle. Another sign said: Depicted here is Commander Arnold something breaching the lines of the... what is that word? during the great revolt of 2009. I'd never heard of him, or the revolt before. Though I could use a weapon."

Posted Image
"Thanks Arnie."

"I've explored most of the 'Museum' now, and its almost empty. Just a couple of statues. Hey, theres something."

Posted Image
"Its a gun!"

"Conscience, Today was fun. I learned a lot about... wherever I am. Something happened in 2009, and there is a thing called a museum. I found a gun, and sure enough, in an office, some bullets! I'm gonna head home now. Heh, home is where you make it I guess."

Posted Image
"Man. Who knows what tomorrow will bring. A headache. Oh thats it you son-of-a!"

End Part 6.

Yeah, I said this wouldn't be for ages, but I took a study break. A long one. 2 days  :grin:

Thanks for looking.
======================================

Posted Image

FlickR

#2 ---Vertea---

---Vertea---

    Posts: 1610
    Joined: 24-August 08
    Member: 3815
    Country: United States

Posted 24 May 2009 - 03:26 PM

View PostSkinny Boy, on May 24 2009, 08:36 AM, said:

Previous Parts: 1, 2, 3, 4, 5.

Part 6: Day3.

Carl has wandered the green lands for three days now. He stumbles across what looks like a neighborhood.

Posted Image
"Dear Diary,.. uhh, conscience. I seem to have found an old neighborhood. Clearly abandoned, but I can't see why. I'll go in for a closer look."

Posted Image
"What the... the windows are broken, and boarded up. And the doo'rs locked."

Posted Image
"Same thing here."

Posted Image
"Hey, this ones open. Who are you talking to? You. Oh shut up."

Carl enters the house and finds some clothes.
"Well thats convenient. What? Oh Get lost you."

He then explores the neighborhood.

Posted Image
"Now I know i've seen that before. But where..."

Posted Image
"Ok, i'm gonna go for... What? Conscience, I've found what looks like the bare minimum of remains of a house. Just the foundations. Now i'm really confused. Why would people leave, when theres no signs of destruction, except the road which has worn away, and this weird... green ground. Now I find a house that looks like, it was professionally dismantled? There's not one sign of rubble. And its not like they stopped construction. The other houses were occupied. I'll find out sooner or later."

Carl goes around the back of the opened house to find a shed. He opens it.

Posted Image
"I don't know what that is.... But I like it!"

Posted Image
"Maybe not. Ahh ha ha ha! God will you leave me alone!"

Carl practises riding the bike for the rest of the day.

Day4:

"Conscience, I travelled on this thing not too far from the house today. I found a large building that says 'Museum' on a sign outside. I went in to explore."

Posted Image
"Conscience, I came to a room that had sign. It said: 'Local History'. In the centre there was a setup, of two men in some kind of struggle. Another sign said: Depicted here is Commander Arnold something breaching the lines of the... what is that word? during the great revolt of 2009. I'd never heard of him, or the revolt before. Though I could use a weapon."

Posted Image
"Thanks Arnie."

"I've explored most of the 'Museum' now, and its almost empty. Just a couple of statues. Hey, theres something."

Posted Image
"Its a gun!"

"Conscience, Today was fun. I learned a lot about... wherever I am. Something happened in 2009, and there is a thing called a museum. I found a gun, and sure enough, in an office, some bullets! I'm gonna head home now. Heh, home is where you make it I guess."

Posted Image
"Man. Who knows what tomorrow will bring. A headache. Oh thats it you son-of-a!"

End Part 6.

Yeah, I said this wouldn't be for ages, but I took a study break. A long one. 2 days  :grin:

Thanks for looking.
Aaaaargh! I wanna see more!!!

Posted Image

Because ponies.


#3 Skinny Boy

Skinny Boy

    Posts: 1021
    Joined: 04-February 06
    Member: 650
    Country: Ireland

Posted 26 May 2009 - 04:57 PM

View Post---Vertea---, on May 24 2009, 04:26 PM, said:

Aaaaargh! I wanna see more!!!
Thanks, but you'll have to wait!
And I don't think you should quote the whole post with images and everything. Gets annoying for those with slower connections. :wink:
======================================

Posted Image

FlickR

#4 pesgores

pesgores

    Posts: 92
    Joined: 06-February 08
    Member: 2683

Posted 29 May 2009 - 08:59 PM

How long will we have to wait?

#5 Asuka

Asuka

  • Pictural Poet


    Posts: 6658
    Joined: 19-June 06
    Member: 816
    Country: Schnitzelland

Posted 01 June 2009 - 03:34 PM

A pretty cool story! The museum part was very interesting, and I´m glad he found a bike to move around.  :thumbup:

#6 Zorro

Zorro

  • Farewell Dieter!


    Posts: 5757
    Joined: 17-September 08
    Member: 3951
    Country: Belgium

Posted 01 June 2009 - 10:22 PM

Looks very good so far, the tension is building.
I will definatly look out for the next episode.

#7 pesgores

pesgores

    Posts: 92
    Joined: 06-February 08
    Member: 2683

Posted 04 June 2009 - 08:25 PM

View Postpesgores, on May 29 2009, 09:59 PM, said:

How long will we have to wait?


#8 Skinny Boy

Skinny Boy

    Posts: 1021
    Joined: 04-February 06
    Member: 650
    Country: Ireland

Posted 04 June 2009 - 08:39 PM

Thanks Zorro and Asuka. Glad I could get you two hooked you could tune in. :grin:  :wink:

View Postpesgores, on May 29 2009, 09:59 PM, said:

How long will we have to wait?
Whoah, theres just too much constructive criticism in that post... I can barely handle it!  :hmpf_bad:
Seriously, if you're gonna post, why not make it worth while. And honestly, don't you know of something called suspense?  :wacko:
======================================

Posted Image

FlickR

#9 pesgores

pesgores

    Posts: 92
    Joined: 06-February 08
    Member: 2683

Posted 04 June 2009 - 10:41 PM

The very moment I looked at the photos at your signature in other forum, I fell in love with it and checked it immediately.

Read the first chapter and thought "This is great. Gotta read more!". But I thought the first part to be short. I read the 2nd and it seemed short as well. "So, if there are only 6 parts as of now, this means my read will end soon." Nevertheless, it was very enjoyable, specially to go through the scenarios and characters and the story is really good. I'd love to see a longer part, preserving the style of before, and I hope it doesn't take long, because I am really excited about it.

There, better? :tongue:

The question remains, though. How long will we have to wait for the next part? :sweet:

#10 Zepher

Zepher

  • I can't control my tongue


    Posts: 10065
    Joined: 04-June 08
    Member: 3241

Posted 04 June 2009 - 10:50 PM

I'm going to have to go back and read to make sure I've got all the character's right.  I'm really interested in what's going on.  It's got a very deep plot already, you better explain EVERYTHING in the end.  I'm actually kind of confused, but it's very interesting, so keep it up!  Just try to answear a few questions before entering in too many new ones!   :wink:

Lord Lawrence Boomingham


&


Nash Ash in Unrest in the Forest





0 user(s) are reading this topic

0 members, 0 guests, 0 anonymous users