10 replies to this topic

[Zepher]

Meant to look blown out.

The City of Persolicia was built on a unlevel and wierd terrain, as shown below

(Lacking GIMP Diagram... I'll make one later...)

Many buildings were built into mountains, and the city was balanced on a bunch of canyons and mountains.

(Forgive my stupid writing skills.  I got zero hours of sleep....)

When the the war broke out, the city literally fell to pieces.  Many building were destoryed, losing walls and roofs.  Streets feel apart, as did the poplution.

The Leader of the City chose to side with the CIS, thinking that the benefiets would be higher, while the High General refused to side with the clearly, in his mind, evil.  Going behind the leader's back he called in the Republic.  The city split in two, and the battle for control began.





























Critic away, please.  I've saved this creation becuase I want to see how to improve it (and I need to photograph it as a set for the 313th comics (Season 3!!!  Looking ahead!!!!)

-Zeph

[Legoking]

You have a very nice MOC here. I really like the clone trooper that is on fire!

Suggestion

You could possibly add some dark gray, gray and white tiles to give your MOC a smoother look.

You did a very nice job!

LegoKing

[The Penguin]

A very nice SW MOC!  

I won't be critisizing much!  
But the way you did a burning falling clone is great!
Blast the Republic!  

Good day, gentlemen! )  

[k_peek_2000]

AWESOME! I love that burning clone haha.

[KimT]

k_peek_2000, on Apr 14 2009, 09:26 AM, said:

AWESOME! I love that burning clone haha.

A really nice vignette you've done there.
The burning stormie is a nice touch and you can almost feel the tension between the houses, which is a neatly enhanced by that very good background story of yours
I think you should loose the 'windows' (the trans-bluse thingies) since they'd probably be blown to smotherines anyways.
Also I am a little puzzled as to why these guys:

Are fighting since they're ARC-170 pilots
Great and I'll have this indexed shortly

[Zepher]

They're fighting becuae I thought they're coloring went well with the snowy planey ;)

And those windows are what inspired the whole thing!

[Jammiedodger]

KimT has no imagination.

Great scene. I like the technique to make the burning clone.

Greetings,
JD

Edited by Jammiedodger714, 14 April 2009 - 08:46 PM.

[The Who]

KimT, on Apr 14 2009, 09:19 PM, said:

The burning stormie is....

Are you sure that's a Stormie?



Anyway, nice MOC. Aside from 3 or 4 plant parts and Bib Fortuna looking rather out of place, I don't really have much to suggest. Although some tiles might do some good...

[Legoking]

Zepher, on Apr 14 2009, 03:42 PM, said:

They're fighting becuae I thought they're coloring went well with the snowy planey ;)

And those windows are what inspired the whole thing!

They do fit in with your MOC very well. But don't you think snowtroopers would looker better since they have the word "snow" in it?

[Zepher]

If I had any, they sure would!  

booger540, on Apr 15 2009, 12:53 AM, said:

Are you sure that's a Stormie?



Anyway, nice MOC. Aside from 3 or 4 plant parts and Bib Fortuna looking rather out of place, I don't really have much to suggest. Although some tiles might do some good...

The plants I agree with you on, but even in the snow some small plants can grow!

As for why a Twi'lek, named Vimpu, is there... read my comics!  Just search "313th"  or "Clone Wars" in the Search box for one of the four episodes up on EB!

[CloneCommanderDelta7]

KimT, on Apr 14 2009, 08:19 PM, said:

A really nice vignette you've done there.
The burning stormie is a nice touch and you can almost feel the tension between the houses, which is a neatly enhanced by that very good background story of yours
I think you should loose the 'windows' (the trans-bluse thingies) since they'd probably be blown to smotherines anyways.
Also I am a little puzzled as to why these guys:

Are fighting since they're ARC-170 pilots
Great and I'll have this indexed shortly

The pilot could have been shot down out of a V-wing (insert the wreckage of a broken starfighter).  It's really good, only the cannons need to be improved badly.

That burning clone is destined to a sad death.

Edited by CloneCommanderDelta7, 20 April 2009 - 12:45 AM.