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#1 Bob

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Posted 17 February 2009 - 04:07 PM

Battlefield's is a new comic I just came up with. This is only the first chapter, revolving around this planet, and everything that involves this planet. This is also only the first part. Part Two will be out in about a week or so.
Without any further wait, lets begin:
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Two years after the BATTLE OF GEONOSIS,
the Republic is winning the war
against the Separatists.

The JEDI COUNCIL on Coruscant, wants
and end to the war once and for all. They
want the menace Greivous brought to
justice.

Count Dooku is furious, and thanks to the new
information brought by his master, DARTH
SIDIOUS, he sends out his evil menace to
MARUDIN PRIME, to hopefully turn the tide of the
war...

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Comments, Suggestions, Idea's?

I personally like what I did with the Holo-Secura, as they haven't released a mini figure version of her. When you look at that, imagine that you see her.

I also wanted to do something that wasn't Phase 1 clones, so I mixed it up alittle and put in Phase 2.

Note: New characters that I designed will be coming in. So far, only General Nim and Commander Dark are my own idea's, and their both dead.  :cry_sad: How sad.

PART TWO is now up on Page Two. A character chart will be under construction:

General Nim:
A Jedi General, who commands a small squad to protect a Republic Outpost on Marudin Prime. She is dead, beheaded by General Greivous

Commander Dark:
A Commander, who served under General Nim. Currently dead, shot by battledroids on Marudin Prime

Commander Red:
A Commander, who served under General Yrowk. Dead, Force Pushed off the Command Center.

Master Yrowk:
A General, who failed to save his Commander. He killed the sith responsible for it. Currently leading troops into battle.

Senator Rshaki:
A Senator in the Galactic Republic. It is unknown currently what happened to him when the droids invaded the spaceport. However, he'll be back.

Edited by Bob the Construction Man, 19 February 2009 - 03:38 PM.

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#2 Joey Lock

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Posted 17 February 2009 - 04:21 PM

I like it! Very intresting, waiting for the next installment

I like the layout of the base!

However, for next time you could use a free version of Fireworks to create speech bubbles. Instead of Yellow boxs blocking the picture. Or you could just change the squares to Circles.
And mabye change Ki-Adi-Mundi's head to Yellow to match his long head.

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God save the gracious King,
Long live the noble King,
God save the King:
Send him victorious,
Happy and glorious,
Long to reign over us:
God save the King.

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Posted 17 February 2009 - 06:59 PM

i like the part were you said "insert cool lightsaber effects" that was so funny :laugh:

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Posted 17 February 2009 - 07:06 PM

Thanks for the replies.

Yes, Ki Adi Mundi's head is replaced
I actually like the yellow boxes, I dont know why.

You'll see my dry sence of humor all over these comics...

Ill give you what the upcoming parts are without giving it away:

Part2: Mundi and the Galactic Marines go to investigate
Part3: Separatist Invasion
Part4: Battle of ...
Part5: Conclusion, and bridgeway to Chapter 2.

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Posted 17 February 2009 - 11:57 PM

I really like it but the picture with Grevious killing that jedi was a little blurry
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Posted 18 February 2009 - 12:51 AM

good story, solid all round. but more action between droids and clones.
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Posted 18 February 2009 - 05:16 AM

I laughed at "Suck my laser!"

Great comic keep up the good work. :thumbup:

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Posted 18 February 2009 - 12:58 PM

Bob the Construction man, could you give us a hint of what the next comic will be about please
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Posted 18 February 2009 - 01:49 PM

View PostBob the Construction Man, on Feb 17 2009, 04:06 PM, said:

Ill give you what the upcoming parts are without giving it away:

Part2: Mundi and the Galactic Marines go to investigate. Separtist invasion.
Part3: Battle of ...
Part4: Battle of ... continues
Part5: Conclusion, and bridgeway to Chapter 2.
There you go.

View PostiH Master 13uilder17, on Feb 17 2009, 09:51 PM, said:

but more action between droids and clones.
This was just a quick takeover, 5 clones against a force of about 15 droids. Don't worry, there will be more action when the Confederacy take/attack another place. I'm also going to put up the comic allitle early here, so look out for that soon.

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Posted 18 February 2009 - 04:27 PM

Great start! First I recommend is to not use flash but brighten the studio instead, it qill make your pictures look better. Secondly more action between the clones. But besides that I love it :wub:
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Posted 18 February 2009 - 07:03 PM

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Teaser Picture:

The City of Marudin Minor, which you'd think would be the forest planet, is busier and better then the jungle planet of Marudin Prime.

Shortly before the Clone Wars, Supreme Chancellor Palpatine made Marudin Prime a National Park Planet, allowing no cities to be built there. When the Clone Wars began, a small outpost (Which you saw) was allowed there.

Marudin Minor however became a large city planet, and is ruled my a Monarchy with a Senator representitive (Whom you'll meet). That is just a view of one part of the city, with a spaceport, and a small army area, which the Republic is using.

In the next chapter, You'll meet General Yrowk, and Commander Red. (Flash looks like Neyo, but isn't).

Expect Part Two tommorow, because it's rather stormy here, and the pictures will come out bad.

Edited by Bob the Construction Man, 18 February 2009 - 07:15 PM.

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Posted 18 February 2009 - 07:07 PM

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Posted 18 February 2009 - 07:13 PM

It's a different one, but if you want me to make one up, I can do that for you.

Okay, his new name is Commander Red, because his armor is red. Sorry for the confusion.

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Posted 18 February 2009 - 11:40 PM

Can't wait for the next comic!
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Posted 18 February 2009 - 11:53 PM

Great comic! But just one tiny flaw, Grievous isn't the kind of cyborg to stand around and chat. he's a smashy-burny-sabrey kind of guy who would have torn through that base like it was butter.

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Posted 19 February 2009 - 03:17 AM

It's always nice to see more comics around EB, this one is another fine addition. It has a nice story, with a little humor throughout it, I can't wait for you to post the next parts :sweet: . The only thing I don't like are the speech bubbles, I think it would be better to use traditional speech bubbles I'm sure you can find a program with them in it somewhere, it would improve your comic a bit IMO.

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Posted 19 February 2009 - 10:44 AM

Bob the Construction Man when are you going to finish the next comic I am well waiting for it
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Posted 19 February 2009 - 03:24 PM

Battlefields: Chapter One, Part Two:
I tried to add my special brand of humor to it, but, lets get on with Part 2!
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Fun Fact: Clone's like to sing while doing work.
Fun Fact: That sith wasn't supposed to be there, but the other one took a break was lost
Interesting Fact: Marudin Minor is supposed to be the smaller planet, it's city is like Coruscant, only it still has green places.
Fun Fact: Yes, that's a Senator.
Fun Fact: It's a known fact that CT 5645 likes to dance while fighting (See picture of Phase 1 clone without a gun)


Author's Note: Sorry about the awful yellow boxes. I'll try and get the program that was recommended. I already had the comic done when it was recommended. I was just waiting.
Author's Note: Sorry about the blurry, bad pictures. As the comic goes on, they'll get better.
Author's Note: The Red blur you see at the corner before the Command Center explodes, is meant to be a laser blast that's about to hit. I discovered this in the SW-Comic Game, when I did this to make it seem like a red emergency light was on.

With that being said, Comments, Suggestions, Tomatoes to throw?

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Posted 19 February 2009 - 03:46 PM

What did you do to make the black spots on the base's remains?
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Posted 19 February 2009 - 11:51 PM

I love the story, but what happened to the commander in red did he die? or something?
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Posted 20 February 2009 - 12:32 AM

You'll have to see in about a week.  :wink:

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Posted 20 February 2009 - 07:52 PM

Part 3 will be out in about 3 days. I just need to make a new set, and fix up a couple things.

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Posted 21 February 2009 - 04:41 AM

View PostBob the Construction Man, on Feb 21 2009, 03:52 AM, said:

Part 3 will be out in about 3 days. I just need to make a new set, and fix up a couple things.
Ok good! I thought I would have to wait a week for another comic
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Posted 21 February 2009 - 05:35 PM

Great job! You are definetly improving :sweet:
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Posted 22 February 2009 - 02:44 PM

Thanks for the replies, Part Three has been postponed, to being released tommorow.

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