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#1 jifel

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Posted 21 November 2008 - 12:10 AM

Well, I have decided to try to write a bionicle story. this will take place in an alternative universe, and starts in karda nui.

This is completely NON CANON, but may still contain spoilers!
Up until this point, this demension was identical to the current main one, and starts after page 84 in bionicle legends 11, the final battle. Also, it will be very similar at first,but will change afterwards alot.

Also, I will skip bits that havent changed from the book, so reading the book (bionicle legends number 11) first will definitely help.

    "Mutran, I need you to send your thoughts into Icarax's mind."  Gorast hissed.  "Any thoughts. Screams. Babble. Anything so that he does not pick up on what I am sending to Vamprah. Mutran nodded, but his mind raced as he made his choice. Mutran strained, using his kanohi as he never had before, cutting Vamprah off from Gorasts very thoughts. A grim smile played across Icarax's mask as the message bounced off Mutrans mental shield into Icarax. Mutran paused to catch his breath, exhausted, as Vamprah finally recieved Gorasts thoughts. Gavla had made her way back to Vamprah's back, so the Makuta could see once more. He darted and dodged, staying out of range of Icarax's blades and avoiding shadow bolts. Gorast swept in to smash Icarax with two arms, and he pivoted to face this new opponent. Gorast backed off, laughing."Nothing to worry about, Vamprah." she cackled "Mutran brings news from below. The Toa Nuva are about to achieve in their mission! The plan will succeed! She knew how Icarax would react. All his hopes of leading the brotherhood rested on depended on the Plan of Teridax failing. He couldn't allow the toa to succeed in their mission. "I will deal with later." he growled, and Gorast dived forward, and screamed "Now!" Icarax laughed as he swatted her away, and a magnetic field crushed her armour into scrap. A follow up of laser vision destroyed her energies, as the only female Makuta died, with a scream born away on the wind. Vamprah wheeled around and flew up. Icarax let him go. He had  a Codrex to destroy, and a universe to conquer. Icarax savored the moment as the codrex slowly crumbled. Suddenly, three strange vehicles shot out of the structure, followed by a toa. Icarax frowned. If the toa escaped,they could still awake Mata Nui, and Icarax's plan would be ruined. Icarax cut off the pressure on the codrex, and dove down to follow, and ultimately destroy the toa.

     Inside the coderx, Toa Ignika prepared to jolt Mata Nui awake. With an earsplitting crash, part of the ceiling caved in, smashing the powerful figure through the wall. Ignika's instinct took over, and he leapt aboard his skyboard to find the cause of the attack.

     Far below the coliseum of Metru Nui, Makuta Teridax waited outside of a massive Kanohi Hau carved into a wall. Slowly, he counted down until the time the Toa would be allowed to achieve their destiny. Now! Teridax smiled as all the years of planning, plotting and scheming came down to... nothing. He frowned mentally. What had gone wrong? He had spent countless hours ensuring success, what had he overlooked? Had one of the toa been accidently killed to soon? In antidermas form, he shot into a solid rock, and then teleported into the core.

     Makuta Krika hovered nearby Takanuva, toa of light and shadow, as he dispatched 4 matoran to collect the other matoran. Despite the risks, he knew he had to warn his fellow Makuta of the energy storm the toa had described.

Meanwhile, Chirox and Bitil, followed by a horde of the yellow Makuta's past, dove towards Takanuva, toa of twilight. As the first shadow bolt struck him, he whirled in midair, and blasted Kirop off of Chirox's back with interlaced shadow and light. The matoran fell, before a Bitil scooped him out of the air. Chirox tumbled through the air, as Takanuva used his new powers to slowly draw the shadows from Chirox's black soul into himself, and then release them straight up. Chirox shrieked in agonyand a pair of Bitils grabbed his arms as he fell towards the swamp. Bitil sent a massive blast of sonics into Takanuva, buying himself time to escape with an unconcious Chirox.

    Kopaka Nuva jumped into the Jetrax T6 and sped out of the way of the Axalara and Rockoh as they smashed through his ice shields. "All right" Kopaka said, "If this is going to be the final battle, lets make it one to remember!" Seeing Takanuva fighting through a swarm of Makuta, he angled the Jetrax that way and accelerated. He never made it. Icarax stopped him cold with his power as he swept down. He landed on the front of vehicle and lifted the toa of ice out of the cockpit by his throat. "Yes, toa, let us make this memorable." He smiled as his blades spun into a blur.

Toa Lewa saw a Makuta hauling Chirox through the air. "Oh no you ever-don't" Lewa said, as Midak skyblasters peppered the shadowy pair. The yellow armored Makuta went flying, while Chirox plummeted down towards the swamp. a pair of Bitils appeared and caught Chirox as he awakened. Meanwhile several other duplicates stopped the Axalara cold with magnetic powers, and the original Bitil landed on the hood, only for Lewa to suddenly pull out his air saber and cut through his armour. Bitil desperately teleported away to stem the leak. "Ah!" Lewa screamed as Chirox flew down and smashed Lewa, and then yanked him out of the cockpit. Lewa drew his skyblaster, and it was the Makutas turn to scream as a ball of light punched him out of the sky

     Tahu Nuva soared through the sky, on the alert. A cold, chilling laugh brought Icarax to his attention, as he swung his rotating blades. Icarax was having fun. All he had to do was kill this one toa, helpless before him, to ruin Makuta Teridaxs sinister plan. With a twisted smile, he swung his weapon, only for it to ricochet off a powerful shield. "What madness..." He exclaimed, as he spotted a crimson toa overhead. He snarled and hurled Kopaka through the air, and sent a blast of disintegration after him. "No!" Tahu cried out, catching his friend and throwing up his shield in an instant, as the blast shattered the shield and hurled the two toa into a small island. Icarax dropped a tridax pod and flew down, eager to kill.

     Ignika, new toa of life, raced after a towering being of red and black. He hated those colors, of smoke and fire. The makuta looked familuar, he dimly remembered being hurt by this one. "I spared you, and now, you try to hurt my friends!" he rasped as he drained the life of the makuta before him. Icarx whirled in pain, seeing the mask behind him. He roared in fury. "I will not be denied my kills!" and used his last strenght to hurl a blast of inorganic molecular disruption. Although Ignika was safe from the effects of the blast, his sky board crumbled beneath him and he plummeted towards the swamp. An instant later, an unconcious Icarax followed.
    

More later.

jifel

Edited by jifel, 01 December 2008 - 11:47 PM.


#2 The Crazy One

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Posted 23 November 2008 - 05:40 PM

Wow , great story. :thumbup:

#3 jifel

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Posted 23 November 2008 - 06:08 PM

Thanks, crazy one. This is mostly for if you did not want all the makuta to die, but its fun writing it.

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#4 Kanohi Ignika

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Posted 25 November 2008 - 12:21 AM

All the parts are good, except one flaw: Makuta Teleportation power doesn't work from the outside into inside Karda Nui, and vice-versa (the walls are shielded against the power).

You could edit it to make a teleportation chamber inside the Coliseum though, since it is a fan fiction.


-Iggy

#5 jifel

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Posted 25 November 2008 - 02:37 AM

View PostKanohi Ignika, on Nov 24 2008, 07:21 PM, said:

All the parts are good, except one flaw: Makuta Teleportation power doesn't work from the outside into inside Karda Nui, and vice-versa (the walls are shielded against the power).

You could edit it to make a teleportation chamber inside the Coliseum though, since it is a fan fiction.


-Iggy
or I could say the shield to stop teleportion was dameged in the codrex with the energy field, or when Icarax damaged it with his Gravity asault.
thanks for the response.

jifel




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