Posted 10 November 2008 - 05:59 PM
A ruthless gang of pirates sail towards a tropical island with hungry appetites...
They set foot on the island and start to gather the ingredients for a recipe they like to call... "Bloody Stew"
Few natives survived....
Ye be findin' many more pictures o' this on me Flickr page.
Thank ye for hostin' such a great contest me hearties!
Good luck to everyone!
Posted 10 November 2008 - 06:05 PM
I like everything in it but the sails of the boat ^^ Is that the final sails ?
Posted 10 November 2008 - 06:10 PM
Ho Ho Ho and a bottle of rum! Treasure here I come! Argh matey, your entry makes me feel like becoming gay(As in happy.) again. Here are some tips for you matey...
1) Is the ship part of the entry or not laddy? If so do take more pictures of it.
2) It is an island so add more bloody bodies! show the horror and joy of death!
3)Add more dismantled body parts to the sea! After all, so much blood cant come from only one body!
4)You laddy can add a blood trail to the sea!
That is all laddy! May the beautiful lady luck be with you!
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Posted 10 November 2008 - 06:13 PM
Guss, what do you not like about the sails?
Provisorak, what do you mean by this?
EDIT: Ooops! I just realized that I only have 5 pictures, I'll add one more of the ship.
Posted 10 November 2008 - 07:09 PM
I prefer sails plain or striped ^^ I don't really like when there is skulls or drawing on it, well, depends of the moc , but on yours, I would prefer it striped ( red/white or black/white ) I think ^^
Posted 10 November 2008 - 07:20 PM
Well done, Erdbeereis1, this really is a very nice entry. I like the huge blood trail in the sea and your lobsters are funny too, the cave/prison is very well done and so is the "cooking table".
1) I also like the sails striped. Perhaps you could add some stripes above and beneath these. The skull you've drawn isn't a problem to me.
2) Personnaly I would replace the revolver with a pistol if you have one, since that would be better to represent those times.
Non-brick related advise:
1) Maybe you could "edit" some water in with your graphics software.
Posted 10 November 2008 - 10:12 PM
Zorro and Guss, normally I would change the sails, however I'm not going to because I'll be leaving on saturday to go on a trip for a week and I still need to finish my medium and small entries, and I won't have much time to re-take and edit all of the pictures. Plus I kind of like them how they are.
As for a digital background, I really wanted to do that, but the way the MOC was positioned (sort of vertical) it looked quite strange. Although, do you think it would look okay if the whole thing was in water? That would be easy to do. I suppose it could be a small island.
I may do that!
Posted 10 November 2008 - 11:49 PM
I may do that!
I think that would be better yes, and there are plenty of small island in the ocean, so why not ?
Posted 11 November 2008 - 12:23 AM
Posted 11 November 2008 - 12:59 AM
What I like:
Your ship is good, and the red fits in with the brown nicely. I also like your skull rock formation and crabs, which are both very creative. The additions of the wave crests crashing into the shoreline and rocks was done beautifully, as well as the seaweed. The bird in the tree is pretty cool, too. Putting the rocks in the sea was a great way to fill up some empty space, and the blood trail is very cruel (and the stew).
What could be improved:
Not much, actually. The only part that I don't like is the sails. The paper looks a bit sloppy, but it was a good attempt.
But very good entry which has very few flaws, Erdbeereis. Good luck!
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Posted 11 November 2008 - 01:19 AM
The sails are actually made of cloth, not paper. It's interesting, no one seems to like the sails, but I was pretty proud of them.
Oh well, everyone can have their own opinion!
Thanks again for all of the comments everyone! I really appreciate it.
Posted 11 November 2008 - 02:09 AM
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Posted 11 November 2008 - 02:22 AM
Posted 11 November 2008 - 11:29 AM
Only thing that makes me wonder is that rowing boat, which seems to be going the wrong way. It could ofcourse also be a native coming back to collect the body parts of his children? Or a native with a terrible eyesight and not too great hearing, noticing the slaughterparty a bit too late? Or maybe a special rowing technique ofcourse
Oh and the mountain sheep is a nice touch, making it not only a tradegy for the rowing native, but also for that poor sheep having to witness the killing of his distant relatives.
Posted 11 November 2008 - 01:09 PM
The bloody trails in the water and on the beach is very.. ehm.. bloody Nice!
Your stew is so cruel and I wonder what it tastes like
Your islander in the boat is sailing the wrong way if he tries to escape. You'll have your back to the front of a boat when you row.
I think your sails are fine, only thing is, that I would expect piratesails to be more dirty. They are almost clinical. So if you could make them more brown or somehow more wasted.
Maybe you could put the bloodtrail in thw water into you SNOT-foundation. At the moment it's lying ontop of the water. Thats a pit wierd I think.
Somehow I think that adding a ship like that separates your MOC in two. So if you have time (which it seems you don't ) you should try to integrate the ship more in your MOC.
Good luck in the contest.
Posted 11 November 2008 - 03:55 PM
I'm working on making a water background for the first picture, so that should connect the ship better.
Next time I will certainly try and incorporate the blood into the water.
As for the backwards-rowing man, he is meant to escape but I wanted to make his scared face visible.
With the cleanish sails, I figured that since all of the official LEGO pirate ships have clean sails, then mine should as well. I don't think pirate sails were always dirty, that way they probably wouldn't work too well.
Thanks again for the comments!
Posted 11 November 2008 - 09:49 PM
I wish you good luck!
Posted 12 November 2008 - 09:50 AM
I think you have spent your time well.
Posted 12 November 2008 - 04:55 PM
I wish you good luck!
Thanks a lot Razzer! I had a lot of fun making the animals.
I think you have spent your time well.
I realize now that I probably should have extended the water out so the ship could be on it but ah well!
The digital background should tie it together a bit better I hope. I'm almost done with it, but I can't access Classic-Pirates at the moment, so I can't get to the backgrounds.
Posted 12 November 2008 - 06:20 PM
Posted 21 November 2008 - 11:58 PM
You have a very original idea here. Pirates going onto an island and searching on it for something the pirates don't have. In your first picture, I like how you added the ocean and sky background. It makes your MOC appearance look even better. The battle on the island looks really gory and bloody. The rock formation you have made looks like a giant skeleton head. The table with the Islander being separated looks pretty messed up to me. I like how you made the crabs using pirate hats as the bodies. The Islander on the little boat is funny because he is the last one and does not look like he is going to escape from the pirate ship.
1) Have a shark or a dolphin in the water.
1) Not to be mean, but those sails are not the best. I would go to the sail library and print out a sail. If that does not work, just use plain white paper.
Overall- You have done a great job creating your MOC and you are not lacking blood at all. Actually, I like that blood stream that leads into the water. I wish you the best of luck!
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Posted 22 November 2008 - 03:35 PM
There actually are sharks, only their dorsal fins are showing though, as I thought it would look strange to have a huge shark above water level.
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