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#1 Skinny Boy

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Posted 28 October 2008 - 12:58 PM

In case you still don't know whats going on: Part 1, Part 2, Part 3.

Part 4: One down, a number to go.
Last time we left our group, they had just decided to hold a nearly forgotten line of defence, so called: 'the last line'. The red shirted lad was the nightwatchman:
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But like most, he couldn't last the whole night.
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He went inside to wake the others:
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The 3 soldiers woke with a fright:
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Posted Image "Whoah, relax guys. And wake the others."

When the others finally got out of slumberland, they assembled in the makeshift bunker:
Posted Image "Right then."

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Posted Image "5"

Posted Image "6"

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Posted Image "And me makes 8."

Posted Image "8?

Posted Image "Yes."

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Posted Image "We had nine."

Posted Image "Then where is this ninth person?"

Posted Image "Lets check the truck."

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Posted Image "Nope. He's not there."

Posted Image "Then where could he be?"  "Hey-

Posted Image -Wheres the bike?"

Posted Image "It was there last night."

Posted Image "You don't think?"

Posted Image "Oh come on. A bike and a college student goes missing in the same night. Don't you see the connection?"

Posted Image "Then we gotta find him."

The group then had a long converstaion which stretched into the afternoon. Sadly, it was not allowed to be photographed. Eventually, they came to an agreement: to find Sid, the dropout college student.
The 8 members of the group got on the truck and set out, to go even further into Cedar Bay.

Some notes:
1. Again, the colour coding didn't quite work out for the soldiers-Forum background is the same colour.
2. This part was much shorter since, I haven't got to start building the next part, and am now awaiting a BL order.
3. It looks like this series is gonna stretch a lot longer than I though. Unfortunately, this doesn't mean lots of parts. It means there will be huge gaps (maybe months :angry:  :hmpf:  :oh3: ) in between parts. I may do very small parts in events like that. Rest assured, the most recent parts will always be available in my sig, and MODs, no, I will not be putting more than five images in my signature.

Thanks for looking.
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#2 Lego12

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Posted 28 October 2008 - 01:55 PM

Very nice Skinny Boy. :thumbup: I have read all of your comics so far and I like them a lot. :classic: This one may be short, but nevertheless exciting! :sweet: I can't wait for Part 5! :cry_happy:
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#3 Skinny Boy

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Posted 28 October 2008 - 07:29 PM

Thanks Lego12. Good to know I have a fan. Well, my series has a fan.
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#4 Guss

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Posted 28 October 2008 - 07:42 PM

no your serie have a lot of fan ^^ including me, I just don't want to flood by just saying that I liked it !


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#5 Ricecracker

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Posted 28 October 2008 - 10:00 PM

i thought it sounded interesting when your first one came out, and have been a diehard fan since then. sorry i haven't said anything.  :tongue:

#6 Lego12

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Posted 28 October 2008 - 10:00 PM

View PostSkinny Boy, on Oct 28 2008, 02:29 PM, said:

Thanks Lego12. Good to know I have a fan. Well, my series has a fan.
Your welcome. I like your series very much! :thumbup:
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#7 Skinny Boy

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Posted 28 October 2008 - 10:05 PM

View Postricecracker, on Oct 28 2008, 10:00 PM, said:

i thought it sounded interesting when your first one came out, and have been a diehard fan since then. sorry i haven't said anything.  :tongue:

I thought your comment sounded worrying when I first started reading it :tongue: . Thanks for the comment Ricecracker.
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#8 Brickmaster

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Posted 29 October 2008 - 04:14 AM

Pretty good. But I have some critiques if you want to hear them;

The story seemed very little for how many pictures there were, and there were alot of pictures which really looked exactly the same. Try to extend the story alittle in each segment, and sum up more in one picture? Like the counting "6.. 7.. 8.." would have worked for just one, rather than three separate.

I especially like the fortifications in the first picture too.  :wink:
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#9 Skinny Boy

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Posted 29 October 2008 - 10:10 AM

View PostBrickmaster, on Oct 29 2008, 04:14 AM, said:

Pretty good. But I have some critiques if you want to hear them;

The story seemed very little for how many pictures there were, and there were alot of pictures which really looked exactly the same. Try to extend the story alittle in each segment, and sum up more in one picture? Like the counting "6.. 7.. 8.." would have worked for just one, rather than three separate.

I especially like the fortifications in the first picture too.  :wink:

I see what you mean there. Its just that part would have been too short to post ( :grin: ) if I hadn't put in much dialogue. And when i'm forced to put in dialogue, I try and make it funny, whilst staying on topic, so the reader doesn't get bored. Don't worry, future parts will have high paced action sequences. The reason pretty much nothing happens in each pic, is because i'm used to making Brickfilms. Moving to a comic (which I now really like doing) sounds easier than one would think. For parts with dialogue, I am still using a tripod, whereas I much prefer taking pics freehand - allows me to get where I want and get some really cool shots (see my Assassination series.) Like I said, future parts will hopefully not involve my tripod, unless there's a really important conversation :wink: . Thanks for the comment. And i'm always glad to hear critiques. And i'm sorry for such a long post :tongue: .
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#10 Brickmaster

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Posted 29 October 2008 - 09:57 PM

Ah, if you made brickfilms, that would explain why alot of pictures looked approximately the same. Just thought I'd chime in anyways; If you don't hear critiques it's hard to know what to get better at sometimes. I will keep an eye out in the future, good to hear you took it positively.  :wink:
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#11 Skinny Boy

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Posted 30 October 2008 - 10:34 AM

View PostBrickmaster, on Oct 29 2008, 09:57 PM, said:

Ah, if you made brickfilms, that would explain why alot of pictures looked approximately the same. Just thought I'd chime in anyways; If you don't hear critiques it's hard to know what to get better at sometimes. I will keep an eye out in the future, good to hear you took it positively.  :wink:

Good to know you'll be coming back.

I may photograph part 5 soon, and post it later today. I think the dialogue technique i'll be using will be a lot more exciting than the other parts. I was waiting on a BL order to finish it, but if I don't make the most of the Halloween break, I won't get anything done. So check back tonight or tomorrow in case I have posted (ah heck i'll give you the name) Part 5: Curiosity killed the Crossroads.
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