Posted 14 October 2009 - 04:44 PM
- The building looks too brown. The entire building is brown, so I suggest you use a different colour for the furniture to make it look less brown.
- The palm trees are to semetrically. I suggest placing one somewhere else and making one taller than the other.
- The beach looks a little bit to flat. Maybee you could add some hight with tan plates.
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Posted 14 October 2009 - 05:09 PM
Posted 14 October 2009 - 05:12 PM
Ragvald Stonesplitter, Commander of the Brave Ursurpers
Posted 14 October 2009 - 07:21 PM
What I enjoyed:
I love cobblestones and especially when they are done right! You made them look exceptional and I they were very eye appealing. It also broke up the background and refocused the eye to the large MOC rather than the central structure.
I don't quite remember if I have seen water that has been done like this before but what stood out to me the most was the the water and your shoreline created a slope that again focused the eye of the viewer into the overall picture of the MOC. The colors and layout of the water and the beach are very asthetically pleasing to the rest of the building.
3. Clean lines and clean "cutaway".
This is another classic cutaway MOC and the lines and espeically the back roof of the structure make the cutaway possible without making it look gaudy. I really enjoyed that and it made the MOC more fun to look at and inspect closer rather than focusing on a bad cutaway job.
4. Pirate Flag
Simple item: This is the first time I have seen someone use the new flag and like it. I couldn't tell you exactly why, but to me it seems like it should be there.
The interior of the structure has a defined and usuable opening, first floor, stairs, second floor, stairs, and third floor. I can almost envision a lonely old pirate walking in and finding himself in one of the upper rooms. Very cool way of transitioning the entire layout.
What bothered me:
1. The palm trees look too much like mirror images. Maybe move or modifty them to look more natural?
2. A few spots in the front facade and interior walls simply have too much open brown space. Maybe break them up with something to hang there?
All in all a very nice MOC and very eye appealing and enjoyable! Congrats!
Edited by martinsuper, 16 October 2009 - 02:32 PM.
Posted 15 October 2009 - 08:48 PM
Posted 16 October 2009 - 02:33 PM
My biggest problem is that I never want to dismantle anything! So everytime I want to build something new, its off to Bricklink I go!!!
Posted 19 October 2009 - 06:58 PM
I can totally relate to that... problem is, Bricklink is my N1 destination even for some of my smallest projects... Which is the reason why I still haven't posted a couple of vehicles I've been playing around with for the last month or so!!!
Oh well, enough moaning (for now). Honeybee, this is a spectacular entry, and I don't just say that! I'm a sucker for realsim inside buildings and staircases come first in any building - so to see that in a Pirate MOC was an absolute joy to me. Of course, the use of staircases is by far not the best thing about this entry... I too enjoy the water and the cobblestone arrangement, both of which give this MOC's exterior such a unique look. However, I agree with martinsuper and badboytje88 - the facade, especially the last floor could have used just a tad bit more details - and the same goes for the beach (not its last floor, but still...) With the wonderful details around them, these two elements look kind of "unfinished" - and it's really a crying shame that Derfel had to use the bricks straight away. I would have totally loved to see a small dock added to the beach, which would have opened up this MOC so much! It would also have helped eliminate that unnatural look which martinsuper has mentioned - I myself like the positioning of the palm trees, it shows that the ladies did want the palms to look mirrored, but not generic - and the dock would help make this MOC look less centered... Oh well, I guess Derfel was just afraid you'd steal his idea with the Redcoat Rum Runners
As to the interior - only a woman could ever have thought of SO many details - true blessings for the gentler sex, but more like torture for those rough sea-dogs... And only a man could appreciate the sheer amount of EMBARASSMENT those pirates would have to live with their whole lives after setting foot in that parlour! The combination of those two opposites = priceless.
Posted 01 December 2009 - 09:39 PM
Lord Of The Dark Isle
Posted 01 December 2009 - 11:02 PM
The profit of this violence free contest is the big amount of different content.
This one is another special with great presence.
The roof looks very nice.
You have taken two very distance shots from the frontside, one with more details could show different techniques.
Anyway, great entry. Good luck
Posted 03 December 2009 - 07:06 AM
Posted 03 December 2009 - 07:32 AM
Fansatic work, I love it.
Might get my back waxed again !
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