[SoNE Ep. V] Parts and Technical Crew

[Artizan]

Near the star system of Endor, a single imperial shuttle approaches the small forest moon of Endor...

Controller:

Shuttle Dylinium, transmit the clearance code for shield passage.

Artizan:

Transmission commencing.

Controller:

Shuttle Dylinium, what is your cargo and destination?

Artizan:

Parts and technical crew for the forest moon.

Controller:

Carry on.

Artizan:

Thank you, sir!

[Wat Tambor]

Nice little creation, especially the first picture with the edited background and the micro scale TIE fighter looks great.

The cockpit itself looks nice, first I thought it was from the UCS Imperial Shuttle.

The only thing that bothers me a bit are the studs where the cannons are. Maybe some more white tiles there to cover the studs would have been nice.

[Nom Carver]

I love it! this could be used in a brick film or comic, it reminds me to the actual size props in the movies.

[MKJoshA]

Sherlock is an Imperial?!

Good job on making this ship feel unique but not out of place I would recommend adding some more white tiles to the "wings" of the ship, but that's just a minor thing.

[markus1984]

Yes - for the Empire .

Good work and can say only the same as Wat T.

The first picture looks really good with the background and the Micro Tie-Fighter.

Markus

[BEAVeR]

Artizan, you have permission to land: your MOC is beautiful enough to be associated with the Empire. Over.

Yes, that's a very nice MOC. It's a bit weird to only see the cockpit of the shuttle, but if you look past that, you see that that is quite great. The general shape of the cockpit is pretty accurate, and I think it's better than the one on the official set, since you integrated the curvy parts better. I see you spent a lot of attention to the details as well, as you can see at the side windows. Still, it isn't perfect, and I doubt a perfect rendition of this ship is impossible. Your cockpit doesn't get wider towards the ship. The official one does, but too much. The only way to integrate this well, would be to angle the side panels, but then you would have to use wedge plates on the cockpit, thus exposing studs. Not ideal. So maybe you have the perfect solution, untill some genious shows up with a better idea. The fact that the windows on the side are there, nicely delineated with that white stripe, is already great. But the execution once again isn't perfect. Those windows really should be at the side. Maybe you could make the white structure less wide (and a bit shorter, so that the proportions still add up), so that the sides of the windscreen touch the side of the white part. Or you could plate a black slope part in the void. Also, the white stripe is a bit too wide ( ), and that could be solved by placing a bar or something similar there. Finally, try to make the tiling on the cockpit symmetrical, because now that's a bit disturbing. When MOCcing, you should pay attention to the shape and the details of your model all right, but also consider (unwanted) effects caused by the nature of the bricks, like the seems here. It often are these small things that can make your MOC that much better, without much effort!

I can see you included some details on the top of the neck. But they are covered from view by that sticker-ed part. I think you should have more confidence in your building skills and let us see those brick built details instead of the sticker (which actually is a bit out of place because the shape is off). Then the shape of the cockpit, with the 'tips' at the end, would be more visible. I would say that brick-built details always get more appreciation than a well-put sticker. So don't be afraid to go brick-built, and show us what you've got on detailing skills. Also, highlight them in your pictures, because now we only get small hints, and don't get to appreciate your MOC at the fullest.

You dealt pretty well with the rounded sides of the ship. The studs are a bit a pity, but the shape is right. And while you can't get rid of the studs on the rounded parts, you can tile up the straight parts. That would be better, since those few studs would appear more as a decorative element rather than a unwanted artifact of the bricks you used (and here we are again). Also, considering the effort that went into the shapes and proportions on the cockpit, this region is rather simple. That gives a rather sharp contrast that could easily be avoided. There's clearly more detail in the source material, so you could bring more life and relief to the part that is sticking out. Try tiles on different levels, grill tiles, tastefully placed studs... That parts that are sticking out at the sides could even be a stud thicker. You could make use of the extra space to give a more rounded look to the cannons (e.g. with a gear). Give it as much love as you gave to the cockpit, and don't slap it on, tired of building that cockpit. Treat each section equally, because one section that is a bit less refined can already make the whole MOC a bit worse.

So give more attention to those protruding sides, and put more effort in brick-built details. And don't be afraid of showcasing them. That way the elements that already are very beautiful in this MOC, can be part of something that is bigger than the sum of its parts. So keep the good building up, through the episodes and within single builds, and then I'm sure we will see some amazing things, growing from these MOCs that are very fine already!