Dark Sword Ragnarok Posted July 25, 2008 (edited) Hey guys and girls, I finally got around to making a comic! NOTE:All humor in this comic is not ment to be offensive in any way. The Characters: (and the names that will appear in the dialouge) Commander Jack (Jack) Admiral Adam (Adam) Shock Trooper (Trooper) Jessa Ventra (Jessa) Clone Pilot 214 (214) And here... we.... go. Adam: Hold up, Jack. Jack: Morning Admiral, what can I do for you? Adam: Well, Jack, I have been evaluating your performance lately. Jack: Oh? And? Adam: I fear you have been losing too many of the personal clones I've sent you into battle with. Jack: Oh, really? How many have died, really? Adam: Well, lets just look at this flashback I've prepared solely for this comic... Jack: ??? Adam: Let's see, there's that stealth mission... Adam: There's that Jungle invasion mission... Adam: Then there's that time you attacked a Droid base... Adam: And really, who can forget the time you used a clone as a wingman in a direct attack on a full droid fleet... Jack: Oh, come on, that was a great plan, he just got in the way of a stray blast! If he would have moved a litlle to the right, it would have passed him! Adam:Oh well. The more important matter is, the Jedi Council has decided to give you a Padawan. We agreed someone you can train is a better asset than a disposable Clone. Jack: Very well. I suppose I can pass on some techniques to him. Adam: Actually, its a she. Come on in, Jessa! Jack: Wait, what? Adam: Jack, meet your new Padawan, Jessa. Jessa: Hello! Jack: Uhh........ Hi? Adam: On another note, Jack, there is one Clone I can spare for your use. Jack: Great! Adam: This is Clone Pilot 214. He is a top pilot, although he has some slight defects. Jack: Oh, God, what now..... Adam: 214's main defect is his strange skin color defect. Jack: Hmm, that is strange. Adam: The only other defect is he's British. (Cue record rippig sound!) Jack: WHAT!?!?! 214: Hey there, mate? Want to grab a spot o' tea after this? Jack: No, not again! I will never go back to England! 214: Blimey, why does every bloody person I say that to run away? Is it so wierd that I like tea? Adam: Its a long story, buddy. Trust me. 214: But... Adam: Let's just say he had a bad experience last time he was in England, okay? DSR Edited July 25, 2008 by Dark Sword Ragnarok Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Natman8000 Posted July 25, 2008 I dont really think this is funny at all Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Shoc Posted July 25, 2008 Interesting 'vignettes' but it doesn't really have a story, and is kinda racist. :skull: Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Dark Sword Ragnarok Posted July 25, 2008 (edited) Go eat some lard. No.... I wasn't trying to be racist, read below. I dont really think this is funny at all Well, I'm sorry you feel that way. Interesting 'vignettes' but it doesn't really have a story, and is kinda racist. :skull: Well, there was quite a bit of story in there, if you read it. Basically, Jack is like the Master Chief from Halo, but in the Clone Wars. (not the same person, skill-wise) He always goes into battle with a few personal Clones(usually ShockTroopers). The comic shows how none of the clones he brings can keep up ( as suprising as that is) and how it has been decided for him that instead of wasting Clones, he was to teach a Padawan his skills in battle. He also gets one last clone, who happens to be an amazing pilot, but has a skin disease and is the only British clone. It wasn't meant to be racist at all, if you read the beginning of my post. I have many British friends, I have nothing against the British at all. But the fact that 214 is British was intended as a pun on the fact that this is an English-based board, and because I've planned another comic with the same characters. Also, his skin disease was a pun at skin-colored minifigs. 214 is actually going to be a funny character, and the fact that he is the only British-accented clone will tie in later. I will change the dialouge if anyone feels offended, although, I wouldn't feel offended if someone made a comic poking fun at America, in fact, I would welcome it! I personally don't care much for America. If I could move to England, I would in a heartbeat, believe me. Much better education system. England ( and other countries around it ) ON! Again, nothing in the comic was meant to be offensive, I apologize. I really love England and the British, so please don't say I'm racist, it really isn't true! Edited July 25, 2008 by Dark Sword Ragnarok Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Shoc Posted July 25, 2008 England ( and other countries around it ) ON! Again, nothing in the comic was meant to be offensive, I apologize. I really love England and the British, so please don't say I'm racist, it really isn't true! Ok, sorry. I was just a little offended at the stereotypical English way of talking he has, but meh. :skull: Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
yorkiejim Posted July 25, 2008 i just didn't find it really funny. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Dark Sword Ragnarok Posted July 25, 2008 Ok, sorry. I was just a little offended at the stereotypical English way of talking he has, but meh. :skull: I'm sorry about that. Everyone that I know that is British has learned an American accent, so I don't hear much of what people in England actually sound like. So, I'm sorry if it seemed stereotypical. Also, 214's British accent will be important later (hopefully.) i just didn't find it really funny. Well, I'm sorry. I suppose my brand of comic isn't to your liking. On the other hand, I've just dipped int making comics, maybe you will like my later comics. DSR Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Shoc Posted July 25, 2008 I'm sorry about that. Everyone that I know that is British has learned an American accent, so I don't hear much of what people in England actually sound like. So, I'm sorry if it seemed stereotypical. Well, I'm English and my accent's closer to an Australian accent although I don't know anyone Australian... Weird... I look forward to your next installment anyway, to see how it goes. :skull: Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Dark Sword Ragnarok Posted July 25, 2008 Well, I'm English and my accent's closer to an Australian accent although I don't know anyone Australian... Weird... I look forward to your next installment anyway, to see how it goes. :skull: That is strange.... Anyway, thanks, I hope you like the next installment, although it will be shorter. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
